fathead vs R!canTheoryz {R!canTheoryz wins}

[Orc]

NBL
Netcees Text Battle League

Rules

Due Dates:

• Verses are due Friday,
  May 17th 2013 11:59 PM PST.
• Voting ends Tuesday 11:59 PM PST.
• Battles that lack votes may close later.
• One sided battles may get closed early.
• Extensions are normally 24 hours
  (unless requested otherwise, that is),
  can be no longer than 36 hours
  and have to be granted by your opponent.

Line Limit:

• Min. = 10 lines
• Max. = 16 lines
• The max. can be higher if different is agreed upon by both.

Voting:

• Must vote on 5 battles and post your links.
• Post the links in the thread titled "Week 7 Voting Links".
• You will be punished if you don't post all 5 voting links.
  You will not like the punishment, so just vote so you
  don't have to cry later. Details about this are to be
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General Rules:

• 1st person to post can't edit after the 2nd person posts.
• 2nd person to post can't edit after a vote has been made.
• Feeding = DQ.
• Recycling = DQ.
• Biting = DQ.
• No freeposting, swaying or bitching.
• Unless a picture battle is agreed upon,
  linking to your opponent's picture or posting it
  means you will disqualified.
• A check in isn't mandatory, but it is encouraged.
• If your opponent doesn't check in,
  you still have to post a verse.
• Competitors should agree on a line limit in their check in.
• If no line limit is agreed on, then the 2nd person to post
  must match the 1st person's line amount.

@fathead
@R!canTheoryz

[R!canTheoryz]

Checking in ill be going 10-12?

[fathead]

K Good Deal Man And Good luck

[fathead]

A losing streak... you suck Its not farfetched/
You Know Your Shitty If Bleak Says Your Bars Stretched/
So The Skull Your Sportin Must Be Hollow And Empty/
Cuz Head Will Bring It To You Like Ed Norton With.Envy/
Tempt Me And Ill Send You To See Your Dead Friends/
Theyll Say "Life Is A Double Sided Coin Flip And Head Wins"/
Plus, I Know What People Must be Thinking/
An Undeveloped Style Like Yours Is Just Puerto Rican/
Your Worse Than Bleak N When It Comes.To.Cruchtime/
Just Pm Me Dawg And Ill Write You A Punchline/

[R!canTheoryz]

God forbid u take back food chubby here gets violent furious,
Only time fat free from eating ANYTHING is when this faggit ever takes his diet serious.
You don't got moves or game Pimp all ur shit played & wrong,
Last time Head sprung his 'body in a club' he dislocated a shoulder dancing to LL Cool J's Song.
So Fuck def Jam im outside sparkin heaters & Holding Nines,
One Punch kill everything in Fat Farm quicker then THAT Old Bootleg Clothing Line.
When I write my lines they go deep & leave you thinking
Faggot whenever your lines go deep is cuz your Homo ass enjoys going fishin.
You A Snitch & the Chrome im packin will make any type of Liar vanish,
Cuz this bitch Surf the Web Quicker then a random beach guy & spider fetish!

[Sharp]

Originally Posted by fathead

A losing streak... you suck Its not farfetched/
You Know Your Shitty If Bleak Says Your Bars Stretched/
This is an okay concept, but executed basically as a statement. Straight insults have to just be funny as fuck to hit and this wasn't really anything
So The Skull Your Sportin Must Be Hollow And Empty/
Cuz Head Will Bring It To You Like Ed Norton With.Envy/
I dont know if I'm missing anything here... is it supposed to be envy -> green -> hulk? cause if so it was a meh idea and not too well done - the idea needs to be a lot clearer (if im missing something I apologize)
Tempt Me And Ill Send You To See Your Dead Friends/
Theyll Say "Life Is A Double Sided Coin Flip And Head Wins"/
you flipped your own name here, but didn't really do it well - the iconcept was alright but it would have to be flipped a lot cool
Plus, I Know What People Must be Thinking/
An Undeveloped Style Like Yours Is Just Puerto Rican/
if this is a nameflip it didnt really come out, cause its just a statement tbh
Your Worse Than Bleak N When It Comes.To.Cruchtime/
Just Pm Me Dawg And Ill Write You A Punchline/
lol i think i used the same rhyme in the cyph last week... either way again its a statement.

you have ideas but arent delivering them very well. hit the tutoring section, work on working ideas to use wp cuz at this point in text just about every statement is kinda played at this point

Originally Posted by R!canTheoryz

God forbid u take back food chubby here gets violent furious,
Only time fat free from eating ANYTHING is when this faggit ever takes his diet serious.
alright
You don't got moves or game Pimp all ur shit played & wrong,
Last time Head sprung his 'body in a club' he dislocated a shoulder dancing to LL Cool J's Song.
ok
So Fuck def Jam im outside sparkin heaters & Holding Nines,
One Punch kill everything in Fat Farm quicker then THAT Old Bootleg Clothing Line.
working both ways was kind of a stretch here, okay idea
When I write my lines they go deep & leave you thinking
Faggot whenever your lines go deep is cuz your Homo ass enjoys going fishin.
lol wut/meh
You A Snitch & the Chrome im packin will make any type of Liar vanish,
Cuz this bitch Surf the Web Quicker then a random beach guy & spider fetish!oh god why

yep, R!can had enough by way of okay ideas to get it

V/R!can

[fathead]

With Envy I Was Referring To The Movie "Seven"If That Makes ANy Difference But Thanks For The Feed Man.

[FGR]

Tempt Me And Ill Send You To See Your Dead Friends/
Theyll Say "Life Is A Double Sided Coin Flip And Head Wins"/

vs

God forbid u take back food chubby here gets violent furious,
Only time fat free from eating ANYTHING is when this faggit ever takes his diet serious.


wow..rican should have lost this battle using a web/spider line and a lines/fishing concept..yikes dude..u've been text way to long to be using lines like that
i almost wanna vote against u just for that reason but fat didnt come with anything that was atleast mild. no hate fat, just gotta be more creative n bring heat
check a few battles n get an idea of how shit works..VOTE:rican

[Flow]

Originally Posted by fathead

A losing streak... you suck Its not farfetched/
You Know Your Shitty If Bleak Says Your Bars Stretched/
Statement
So The Skull Your Sportin Must Be Hollow And Empty/
Cuz Head Will Bring It To You Like Ed Norton With.Envy/
Miss
Tempt Me And Ill Send You To See Your Dead Friends/
Theyll Say "Life Is A Double Sided Coin Flip And Head Wins"/
No
Plus, I Know What People Must be Thinking/
An Undeveloped Style Like Yours Is Just Puerto Rican/
Statement
Your Worse Than Bleak N When It Comes.To.Cruchtime/
Just Pm Me Dawg And Ill Write You A Punchline/
Bleak comments are getting old and this is a statement

I feel you have started similar to how most new comers do, you need to look at the concepts and execution, I think everything you said was a statement except one concept I have no idea about (the envy line - not sure how that would be insulting even if I got it) and another which was about you winning, which rarely works...read other peoples votes and battles and you will get a feel for whats good and what isnt

Originally Posted by R!canTheoryz

God forbid u take back food chubby here gets violent furious,
Only time fat free from eating ANYTHING is when this faggit ever takes his diet serious.
meh didn't really like this wasn't worded to well
You don't got moves or game Pimp all ur shit played & wrong,
Last time Head sprung his 'body in a club' he dislocated a shoulder dancing to LL Cool J's Song.
lol you won this battle already funny line
So Fuck def Jam im outside sparkin heaters & Holding Nines,
One Punch kill everything in Fat Farm quicker then THAT Old Bootleg Clothing Line.
I liked this but couldn't be cleaner
When I write my lines they go deep & leave you thinking
Faggot whenever your lines go deep is cuz your Homo ass enjoys going fishin.
what?
You A Snitch & the Chrome im packin will make any type of Liar vanish,
Cuz this bitch Surf the Web Quicker then a random beach guy & spider fetish!not feeling

Rican won by having a lot better misses, however this was a pretty awful battle I know rican can bring more but probs didn't think he needed too, which after reading fats verse I agree

Vote Rican

[~RustyGunZ~]

the first 3 nameplays of ricans were okay, shitty wording

nothing fathead dropped was great, head over to the tutor section broski

v/rican