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Old 03-05-2018, 08:24 PM   #1
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Default WEEK IX:2tripple0 vs JESODIST[JESODIST WINS]



Season 8

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Voting ends SUNDAY at 11:59 PM EST

Verses may not exceed 48 lines or 650 words

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Topic: http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=126253

@2tripple0 vs @JESODIST

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Old 03-07-2018, 04:58 PM   #2
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Old 03-09-2018, 03:56 PM   #3
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Life is fast... so be very selfish...
by 2tripple0

I aint know much about none of y'all
If you feel me even though I know the world is small
There aint much to it I don't know how you feel or anything
I don't know why people act the way they do or what they think
Life is unpredictable and so are people
I cant understand why people act so evil
I don't know anything about their characters or nothing
I'm not one of those guys who goes around just making assumptions
All I know is who I am
And I'm pretty sure I know it better than anyone else says they can
Its weird why would people do fucked up things then??
Why would another person kill someone or say something about what shapes other men
How could you do something so fucked up like that on the real??
I realize you may hate someone you may not like them or have some fucked up way you feel
but whatever man all I can do is just take care of myself
All these people who day to day put me through hell
When I know I'm not going make it I don't even stand a chance
Life is so hard to begin with its fucked up theres no real way to advance
I'm not going to give in but just take heed right cause life is fast
It goes by in two seconds and only lasts five minutes and theres only one way to make it last
I mean you'll probably get to the end and be like damn that's all there was to this shit
I hate to be like that but I got a line from one of my boys one time and that's how it ended real quick...
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Perspective From A Broken Heart

She sits awaiting in a Golden Ark
Illuminating the skies in a World so Dark
A mermaid swimming between a Thousand Sharks
The miraculous fairy prancing above Tabernacles and Prairies
Reciting enchanting spells from the Oracle Diaries
Placing creatures in contact under Magical Trances
Turning the hands if time whenever the Paladin Advances
Slashing and punishing those in deed Jumping the Lines
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Mixing and brewing potions like the Queen Sorcerers
Got a hoard of Discrete Murderers A Fleet of Burners
Working together with Dream Sculpturers
Saving those sworn and Bound to Suffer
Got these arch demons choking in Clouds of Sulfer
Telepathically communicating with A Legion of Seraphims
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Darkness and light, Its A Mystical War
Not showing ends, This is Grief and Misery
Whatever happens in the ominous bends is a mystery
Cherrish each moment with her because It is History
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Old 03-10-2018, 08:24 PM   #5
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2tripple0:

I aint know much about none of y'all,
beautiful language, where you are getting it from.. absolutely smooth,concise and attractive..
Life is unpredictable and so are people..
brilliant follow through line,it is reading highly impressive with how you strung it together..
I don't know anything about their characters..
mind blown amazing pickup..
Why would another person kill someone or say something about what shapes other men..
truly outstanding piece.. keep it up.. peace..

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awaiting in a Golden Ark
Oh my god, plow my brain just got weezed all the way out each drip..

A mermaid swimming between a Thousand Sharks

line for line this will be quoteable..
highly moved..

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A story about a relationship and a story about a guy rambling about how hard life is. Darker ego was more captivating as well as had the better flow, although diaries and praiers don't rhyme at all. They're pronounced completely different, which leads me to assuming English is not your first language??? 2triple verse read as a guy simply complaining, "woe is me" over and over again, which grew very stagnant mid way through. Ego kept me guessing, and kept part of the verse hidden in shadows a bit. He definitely had the more enjoyable read for me.

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