09-11-2014, 12:53 AM | #1 |
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NEVERMIND
i cannot give a fuck. i'll write what i want
take a stab at the hatchet and give the rifle a shot let me burrow through your barriers like mice in a crop Feynman and Kant. skimmed over dinner menu wine and croissants iron giant half-inactive, disassembled for stock whenever people feel mechanical i'm silent a lot sometimes more subtle than not. Alpha wave Omega goodbye most wanted re: collaborations, dead or alive rhyme measure refined. Art Deco architect when stenciling lines my medicine's barbiturate, my pencil is pine driven towards expression i could never resign i'll sever everything to save this little treasure of mine anti-anxiety the ventilation, dust in the wind i pissed away the juice and now there's nothing but gin go let your company in. sink into stupor, recline i've shared too much to realize this tumor's benign words are casted shadows of the truth in design but numbers always bothered me. i'm used to the lies soothsayer sonic giga-wattage futurist-minded slow mutant huffing fuselage accusing the pilot Nazi General ISIS. another suicide confused as a mission casualties, a study of the human condition allow the stupor to sink. now make a stupid decision they sent a letter. nevermind, this tumor's malignant DEADMAN
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09-11-2014, 01:06 AM | #2 |
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words are casted shadows of the truth in design
but numbers always bothered me. i'm used to the lies Goddamnit. Will be back later for more of a response.
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09-11-2014, 01:24 AM | #3 |
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illtronics more angst, more realness and less reflection. real dope
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awesome read.
flow was perfection |
09-11-2014, 01:56 PM | #6 |
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makes me feel dumb. makes me jealous.
makes me wish that this wasnt on the internet and I could own it, just me |
09-11-2014, 02:16 PM | #7 |
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this was killer btw. i'll be back. |
09-11-2014, 03:25 PM | #8 |
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09-11-2014, 05:26 PM | #9 |
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This was my favorite piece from you in awhile.
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09-12-2014, 08:43 AM | #10 |
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09-22-2014, 08:01 PM | #11 |
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ya
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09-24-2014, 12:45 AM | #12 | |
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This was a good read, and I'm not going to begin criticizing on structure, format, and content. One thing I will say is, I wish that more people posted positivity engulfed in their lines... on this forum, in general (not saying your post was too negative, I am giving you a "Pos'd" for this).
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this was nice my dude. some parts were a little basic where i felt you could've worded things better and had better wordplay, but overall this was a nice drop. stay up.
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09-26-2014, 05:54 PM | #14 |
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Oh really ok sweet thanks you!!!!!
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09-26-2014, 06:03 PM | #15 |
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09-26-2014, 07:20 PM | #16 |
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09-26-2014, 10:10 PM | #17 |
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>asks for feed
>obscurely yet apparently patronizes an obvious noob for thinking differently than people who nibble on your peen >others chime in after op'er >both of them feel oppressed and sigh/laugh at societys current state measure >both will probably respond to this haphazardly, or not at all >i will be considered patronizing for pointing this out >society >repeat |
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- smush beer on head and didn't cry
- parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once
- when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan
- won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a
- neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper
- set neighbor house on fire lmao
- fuck neighbor husband and wife
- first fish caught resembled david ortiz
- colin kaepernick
- related to genghis khan
- elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club
- never lost game of hide and seek
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