09-09-2018, 06:48 PM | #1 |
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couches and coke. shower and soap. music and speech living in history i've been doomed to repeat behavior stays cyclical, for humans we are 2-fold between your attitude / who's at the bar stupid as art in theory, keep my eulogy brief i've built palaces and turned them into ruins in weeks booze in his sheets, poolside suite, puking relief ginger ale and Tullamore the new aperitif putrid beastly hyperchondriac who's never been sicker wasted by wicker park powdering cigarette filters streetlight sycophantom, interactions often are strange every moment you're talking i'm going fucking insane dial back a bit, allow parameter change our safety bubbles calcify like skeletal frame we polish our cages, learn adaptable language vomit out a person that survives this entanglement in current affairs, lovesickness, circular phases before returning to base for reassignment, replacement via certain demise. perfect and graceful. eternal embrace a couple bumps deep for reaffirming our faith curb your enthusiasm, purge your relationships learning to love your Self relies on learning to hate it reserved, patient. listen closely, searching a vein safe behind his clever ways of turning a phrase nobody gets to nourish his anguish, bury his chains a murder of crows casting shadows on a murderer's face feel it burning. cold-hearted furnace encasement i only grow fonder as it worsens with age you're never quite as special as you often were told i've lost myself in knowing what i should've let go many years past i left myself on the road Kerouac would turn his tombstone over. let it be so. black
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09-10-2018, 10:45 PM | #2 |
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09-11-2018, 06:59 AM | #3 |
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Fire. I’d buy a book of this
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stupid as art in theory, keep my eulogy brief
i've built palaces and turned them into ruins in weeks booze in his sheets, poolside suite, puking relief ginger ale and Tullamore the new aperitif \ugh
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Loved this. Read it twice.
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09-24-2018, 12:45 AM | #6 |
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I thought this was a good read. Everything syncopated correctly, with synchronicity and proficiency. It had had good-vivid imagery, with good metaphors and similes. I enjoyed the good flow and rhyme scheme. Felt natural and well-put. I don't really see anything wrong with this piece. It's quite good, and established. This was a nice written, keep writing.
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09-24-2018, 12:47 AM | #7 |
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but was t good and did u like it
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09-25-2018, 04:17 AM | #8 |
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Safe behind his clever ways of turning a phase
That was such a neatly placed line, everything rolled smoothly like usual. Always an interesting read, your shit |
10-21-2018, 09:04 AM | #9 |
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Really enjoyed this one. Butter flow. Will run thru it again shortly
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