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Old 02-17-2020, 10:45 AM   #1
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Old 02-17-2020, 11:07 AM   #2
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Old 02-17-2020, 11:16 AM   #3
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Old 02-17-2020, 11:39 AM   #4
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Sorry dude i just thought you might like that Eyedea track
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Old 02-17-2020, 12:27 PM   #5
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No, I’m sorry. My comment was light hearted. I do like the track.
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Old 02-17-2020, 06:38 PM   #6
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You're one of the best people I've read doin' paragraph style...Oh & @CopyPat, my bad had to give him a shout out.
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Old 02-18-2020, 01:32 AM   #7
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I liked this for the content, too short though. And needed more multies instead of single rhyme sounds. Liked the kinda switch of tempo/scheme towards the end.
Im feeling the name as a play on a trent Rezner track, and gotta sort of abstract music vibe.. when you mention 'think your pretty' i subconciously think of the sex-pistols, and when you talk about 'hurt' my mind goes to Johny Cash. Maybe it was intended maybe not, might be some I missed even
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Old 02-20-2020, 07:15 PM   #8
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ms.construed was clever. i liked that.
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Old 02-21-2020, 11:38 PM   #9
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Old 02-22-2020, 08:23 PM   #10
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I can relate.

Wish was longer though.

Cool piece.
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