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08-06-2013, 11:43 AM
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Nokyo Genosyde
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Hear Our Psalms (Ars Goetia)
when darkness falls, we are reborn/konceived in a time that we kant rekall/ingrained in our genes, all goodness dissolved/mercy culled from the heart, in the waste, we resolved/this life that we live is bleak, for the lost/sorrow eats through the heart, we were weak in the start/from the moss kovered graves to the cities of the dead/hear our psalms, feel the odium eat thru your head/unto the path of woe we are begotten/wrote our own Ars Goetia in blood that was rotten/konversations with Master Leonard, plan to overthrow all good/Bonfires and pagan chants, around trees of dogwood.......
To be continued......... •For those that dont kno what the Ars Goetia is or dont kno who Master Leonard is, just chekk it out on Wikipedia.org• |
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08-06-2013, 03:06 PM
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08-06-2013, 05:17 PM
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White Earl
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The goetia is a book of demons. I don't know or really care who ars is. Maybe the person who wrote it? I personally though aliester crowley wrote it.
This piece was ok. See you still rockin with the paragraph style. Only few people have the balls to do this. Those who have perfected it.. and those who are stuck in the early 2000's. I think your stuck tbh. Not to say your content was horrible. But I think your style needs work. Elevate. Trry lines in bar format. Instead of paragraph. Let's see what you can come up with. Its time to evolve bro
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