-= I'm sorry we fight =-

Lost in Thought · 08-02-2013, 11:21 PM

a verse a wrote awhile back

Girl,

I'm sorry we fight but i'm beggining to doubt you

Sorry tonight.. i'm trippin about you

imagine a life

I'm living witout you

This wat its down to

till you learn this is a relationship SHIT AINT ABOUT YOU

Its about US two becomes one

IF you bump into us

You confrunt NONE

Watch who we've become

From the begining like the movie begun

It started out great, some book shit

untill in rage we took it

Shaped and shook it

Put it on a flame and cooked it

Left it so bent outa shape

The taiste was crooked

wheres the escape button

I cant wait to push it

and leave this place

I hate to look at

Its me too and i tried to switch the shit

You had a plan but mine was different

it was about US not just MY existence

And you didnt like it so why admitt it?

I'm Hopen that you care

Enough to Know that I'm scared

Why fix this ship

if its broken past repair

Theres to many fish in the sea

For me to have to deal wit you bitchen at me

Over shit i say you take litterally

You cant see wat it did to me

Cuz its hid beneath... incognito

If you bitch at me... then watch me go

I'll be gone and i wont return

If thats wat you want you'll slowly learn

That I dont deserve to choke and burn

while you hope this works but show NO concern

Geno · 08-02-2013, 11:26 PM

hated the format, cool content though. coulda been smoother, add a few words to it man. couple spots would read/transition smoother with a well placed word or two. just my 2cents. 1

08-02-2013, 11:21 PM	#1
Lost in Thought Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 70 Battle Record: 0-4 Rep Power: 33	-= I'm sorry we fight =- a verse a wrote awhile back Girl, I'm sorry we fight but i'm beggining to doubt you Sorry tonight.. i'm trippin about you imagine a life I'm living witout you This wat its down to till you learn this is a relationship SHIT AINT ABOUT YOU Its about US two becomes one IF you bump into us You confrunt NONE Watch who we've become From the begining like the movie begun It started out great, some book shit untill in rage we took it Shaped and shook it Put it on a flame and cooked it Left it so bent outa shape The taiste was crooked wheres the escape button I cant wait to push it and leave this place I hate to look at Its me too and i tried to switch the shit You had a plan but mine was different it was about US not just MY existence And you didnt like it so why admitt it? I'm Hopen that you care Enough to Know that I'm scared Why fix this ship if its broken past repair Theres to many fish in the sea For me to have to deal wit you bitchen at me Over shit i say you take litterally You cant see wat it did to me Cuz its hid beneath... incognito If you bitch at me... then watch me go I'll be gone and i wont return If thats wat you want you'll slowly learn That I dont deserve to choke and burn while you hope this works but show NO concern __________________ Look up to the sky to try n find god in the clouds Hopin when he looks down I dont get lost in the crowd

08-02-2013, 11:26 PM	#2
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,325 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036758	hated the format, cool content though. coulda been smoother, add a few words to it man. couple spots would read/transition smoother with a well placed word or two. just my 2cents. 1 __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*