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Old 02-16-2021, 02:54 AM   #1
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YOUR RUN ENDS HERE FAGGOT

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‘Twas a night that consumed all that studied its stare —
the white of the moon danced a dark cloud of tumbling hair.
Each strand running as carefree as the woman herself
and with a look that befell me firmly under her spell.
The pull of her Celtic charm as I eye the enchantress
leaves me utterly helpless to fight the attraction.

I’m mired in the magnetism that manifests in her eyes
ever-inviting Emerald isles in a sea of restless divide.
A sentient smile broad on her lips as she draws me in closer
calling me over eager to sink her craven claws in my shoulder.
Her aura immobilises me as if to keep me entranced
even a prince born into noble blood has the needs of a man.

Her teeth seem to flash before me in a smouldering scowl
that leaves me aghast as she suffocates the soul from my mouth.
In the moment I’m powerless to change what happens
when two naked matches are engulfed in flames of passion.
We wake the blackest of night from its slumber
with the way she c.ackles in a vibrance of colour.
The cry of her thunderous caterwaul rings in my ears
before the wytch disappears, just as quick as appeared...

I’ve been living in fear of the consequence since that night
as empty inside as the soulless body I’m left to confine.
A mere shell of the smiling suitor she had infact bewitched
when her shadow-casted limbs crawled my alabaster skin.
I was impuissant to resist as my lonely heart deceived
and with no regard she eagerly stole a part of me...

The townsfolk that hark our region knew me as a man of gentry
married twenty years and those of the higher social class respect me.
When the hag presented herself three months gone I scolded her “Liar!”
to goad the entire village to have the social pariah thrown on a pyre.
No one enquired as to whether there was a semblance of truth
behind her pregnancy rumour, just as I expected them too.

I lead them the usual witchhunt with me igniting the spark
pitchforks and lit torches masquerading as light through the dark.
They tie-up her arms to the stake as she tries to protest it
this time she’s defenceless as I was on the night thats in question.
I’ve a wry smile as she’s sentenced to perish within our parish
which rid me of a bastard child and responsibility it carries.

The flickering and fanning flames spat from an open fire pit
growing by the inch for every one our unborn’s lowly life would miss.
I showed no sign of pity as I watched the two of them burn
my muted concern remained solely on being viewed as deserved.

I sent you to eternal damnation as a means of escape -
but the child’s scream has replaced the winds howl I hear every day.
I feel the betrayal each night as I’m watched on a daily basis
when the moon’s as pale in stasis as our unborn babies face is.
The raging hatred burns in every morning sun I’m blinded with
a sure reminder if ever one were needed that... Life’s a witch.



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The strike of the bells ring while the town's crier cries repent
The sun is now void as the townspeople quiver walking through the muck of a dark lament
The ground has been cursed by the grasp of devilish hands
But preacher's daughter flirted with the darkness and left her village damned
let's talk about the way that it all began,
with a weeping woman praying at the bedstand for her ill stricken man
tightly she held his hand and felt his essence drift away as her tears continued to ran
as a hole in her heart began its span,
at the same exact moment outside you can hear the whispers of fiendish incantations as they grew
in her, the blasphemy ensued
she cursed the Almighty, and with that, her hatred spewed
dark shadows begin to enter the room enveloping her whole
she laughs as madness takes its toll
a disbodied entity forces her to the ground and takes control
ravages her body and wants to consume her soul
nearby in the woods, the witches dance around the fire incanting this hell
She attempted to tear herself free but now is enclosed in darkness' spell
Through her pain, her family, and the village will now suffer from this affliction
Women and children outside her residence begin wailing and contorting from her misfortunate transmission
The townspeople are torn, arguing amongst each other about the woman and her religion
"She the preacher's daughter, how can she be a witch?", one asks in suspicion
"It can't be!!! Not one in her position."
A crowd arises bearing torches chanting, " Thou shall not suffer a witch to live!" as their benediction
simultaneously back inside her tormenter seeks her service promising to provide her deepest desires by inviting her to make her mark with blood
The serpent hissing, "I will bring back your love."
she agrees
Then crowd breaks through the door and starts to flood, surrounding her they're ready to judge
"Burn her at the stake!" They drag her out by her hair through the mud
and tie her by her ankles and her waist but her face is a steady smug
the executioner asks, "Any last requests?"
With a smirk, she says, "Let me have a smoke, light this fire and prepare for everything that's about to happen next."
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Mines set to EST. You were 9 mins late.

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The strike of the bells ring while the town's crier cries repent
The sun is now void as the townspeople quiver walking through the muck of a dark lament
The ground has been cursed by the grasp of devilish hands
But preacher's daughter flirted with the darkness and left her village damned
nice opening setup. cool flow and rhyme.
let's talk about the way that it all began,
with a weeping woman praying at the bedstand for her ill stricken man
tightly she held his hand and felt his essence drift away as her tears continued to ran
as a hole in her heart began its span,
isn't it continued to run? rhymes are nice in general and cool internals
at the same exact moment outside you can hear the whispers of fiendish incantations as they grew
in her, the blasphemy ensued
she cursed the Almighty, and with that, her hatred spewed
nice development. flow is cool
dark shadows begin to enter the room enveloping her whole
she laughs as madness takes its toll
a disbodied entity forces her to the ground and takes control
ravages her body and wants to consume her soul
nearby in the woods, the witches dance around the fire incanting this hell
She attempted to tear herself free but now is enclosed in darkness' spell
this is cool. well executed. but i'm hoping for some misdirection. story feels predictable with the picture giving the ending
Through her pain, her family, and the village will now suffer from this affliction
Women and children outside her residence begin wailing and contorting from her misfortunate transmission
The townspeople are torn, arguing amongst each other about the woman and her religion
"She the preacher's daughter, how can she be a witch?", one asks in suspicion
"It can't be!!! Not one in her position."
story development. rhymes are ok
A crowd arises bearing torches chanting, " Thou shall not suffer a witch to live!" as their benediction
simultaneously back inside her tormenter seeks her service promising to provide her deepest desires by inviting her to make her mark with blood
The serpent hissing, "I will bring back your love."
she agrees
Then crowd breaks through the door and starts to flood, surrounding her they're ready to judge
cool progression
"Burn her at the stake!" They drag her out by her hair through the mud
and tie her by her ankles and her waist but her face is a steady smug
the executioner asks, "Any last requests?"
With a smirk, she says, "Let me have a smoke, light this fire and prepare for everything that's about to happen next."
this is nice but you need to follow up on this to pull it off
Looks like you were just running up on time pressure. I can see what you were trying to do to a certain extent but you really need the second half otherwise this feels a bit predictable. The ending hints at something unexpected but you didn't have time to flesh that out.


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