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Old 01-15-2021, 01:27 PM   #1
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Default WEEK SEVEN MAG: BAD VOTERS OR AM I BIPOLAR??





Intro:
I originally wrote a very pessimistic and hateful introduction saying y’all didn’t give any effort to voting so I wasn’t giving any effort to the mag. But upon a more rational thought process I’ve seen that you guys have for the most part done your best and put your best foot forward week in and week out and I appreciate that. This league is just heating up we’ve got 5 weeks left until the playoffs and with a couple more legitimate sign ins we could be in for a spectacular finish. (@Inno @Bodey @Johnny 6 feet I’m talking to people like YOU)

Verses are due SUNDAY which is also my BIRTHDAY so please don’t disappoint me even more on my birthday than I will already be.



REVIEWS:
Wasn’t much to cover this week in terms of actual battles. Had a couple of decent bouts though buried under all of the no shows and what not.

CONTENDERS: SCAR 2-0 vs OBJECTIVE 2-2


This was a lot more competitive than it seemed to be on paper. Objective has been a writer who has had ups and downs (obviously based on his record) BUT I feel like he’s finally coming to form. I think Universe mentioned I haven’t given him
the most diverse range of topics? So I apologize if that’s true but he’s definitely done a lot with a little and I really vibes with his self reflective piece this week and just examining what it is to be human to have this conflicting battle of heart/brain. His last two entries of the week have been the best two I’ve read from him not only all season but in general, I am very proud of his progress. Scar told another grandiose tale comparing the heart and the brain to armies and it was really reminiscent of some of his work in the GWL which is bad news for future opponents. Scar won here easily in votes but honestly Objective has a bright future in these leagues if he keeps writing, I loved the way he vented this week.
WINNER: SCAR

MR. J 3-2 vs FRAZE 1-0

Very cool battle here and a great matchup of different styles. Mr. J seemed a bit uninspired this week to me, he’s gone on a recent 2-loss skid after his championship berth a couple of weeks ago. His flow was top notch as always and the way he weaves his bars together through his multis is always phenomenal. But overall Fraze had the more interesting narrative here although both writers took similar paths. Fraze had deeper bars he went more in depth in his description of this trek we take when we fall in love, how a simple hike through the good and bad, desert sands and then you match yourself straight into a hole. It all resonated with me a great deal. Fraze earned himself a contenders match this week with a great showing awesome job to both battlers.
WINNER: FRAZE


NO SHOW/DQ SHINE
We had one no show battle and two win by default via DQ so this little section is to pay homage to their valiant efforts.

MMLP:


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We’ll see you on the other side …

this is Ride or die,
felt make-believe
but it was plain to see I was flying high
the skies alight right from the jump
no sign of life with no one above
things looking up,
but then all of a sudden they’re coming at ya
running faster than Forest Gump
I'm on the run, rummaging
fumbling, from the flight at the start
to fights in the yards
once the pressure come on this treasure hunt
but the fire in my belly had ignited the spark
was on the right trail but still wide of the mark
the signs were alarming as I made my descent
it was a demand to say the least, but a challenge to complete
took the wind out my sails but still landed on my feet
soon we battled in the streets
making amends in taking revenge
that was certain to start a chain of events
a race to the end as it was prophesied
spotted life, dotted I’s but it wasn’t what we signed up for
some had crossed the line as shots were fired,
missioned to stay aground
and make it out from this toxic environment
My circle closing tighter, tying up the loosened ends,
the looting stemmed
from losing friends with who we’d feud against
and that triggered a desire to win
the fire within
doing the rounds like a recycling bin
through hell fire and brimstone, we’re the horsemen,
the reinforcements
Duty called to proceed with caution
meant the melees were simply blown out of proportion
it blew em to bits, had to finish and shoot em up quick
I was losing my shit!
the man of the jungle trapped in a rumble
soon I learned to shoot from the hip
loosened abit,
no doubt the loadouts made my character switch
the damage created a savage in infamy
a passage of history I’d chosen to write
it’s sad what it did to me
but it opened my eyes
long story short this was short story longer than time
the moments revived
A warzone, foretold in the mode of the same old story
bowing out in a blaze of glory
soon, my life flashed before me..
all I remember,
was a lethal-looking semtex that came towards me
and with this lethal weapon
id seen the ending through hindsight of a new patch
second chance to be a better man
too bad, I shouldn’t of moved back, but just couldn’t hide

“ill see you on the other side, lads I’m in the Gulag,”
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Disappear Here

"And as things fell apart, nobody paid much attention." - Bret Easton Ellis

......

The Boss - Friday, 9:16am


I'm the king of this castle, still I manage to not give a damn
Really I'm seen as a total asshole that inflicts damage on a little man
My hand flicks him from where he stands; I'm what this useless chump lacks
Muscle grew from some fat, I said, "You've been let go due to cutbacks..."
His posture just slacked... His pay reflects being too lazy, inept
Then this makeshift temp started to unpack his suitcase on my desk
Presented his résumé front to back - A list of accomplishments
They're official documents but I hated that he was fishing for compliments...
I wanted him out of my office without another single complaint
Business card displayed, "The subtle eggshell color is custom made..."
"I've never even called in late!" he exclaimed; He needs to just let it go
"Time to grow up..." I said, "This isn't based on weekly attendance, you know"
Every thread was exposed, I go, "I'm sick of staring at those rented clothes"
I guess for most, being dressed to the nine's isn't tenable...
Watched him sink in his hole, daydreaming - His face clenched and ears twitched
I snapped my fingers in front of him saying, "Stay with me here, kid"
"We have a severance package to give..." Hope it gets rid of this homeless misfit
"It's nothing personal...” I said with a slick grin, “It's only business..."


The Employee - Friday, 9:16am


I have no occupation… "Cutbacks" mean something different to me, boss
I'll fall by the wayside like seesaws while asleep on this dream job
Eavesdropping I heard, "This isn't based on weekly attendance..."
Yet what my brain envisioned was an attempt to fillet all his tendons
"Your pay will reflect..." Yadda yadda... I'm imposing in a quiet sense
I laid out some photos like the spread of his wife posing by the bed
This tough guy wilted like tulips, falling to pieces like confetti specks
I grabbed a tuft of hair from my bag and out popped a pretty head
Placed it on his mahogany desk; He gazed at his wife's dismembered flesh
I gripped a knife by my side and plunged it right into his neck
Savored his facial ticks, wouldn't trade it for all the stocks that he had
I nodded and added, "That's how your wife looked with my cock in her ass"
Got a hard on for that... Us working stiffs come demanding action
Lobbing softballs like company batting practice, with underhanded tactics
"Here's your fucking severance package!" I yelled, pulling his boxers right down
Cutting off his cock and impounding it inside his yawning wife's mouth
Things were going south... To his wife my pent up hate seemed heinous
Yet I already drained all my seed in that cunt's gaping anus
Did I mention she was pregnant? Boss man reached to the door, defeated
It was ajar like where Norman Reedus keeps his aborted fetus
Mixed it with some pork then seasoned, popped the cork on some red wine
Drank and jerked off to my child porn collection before it was bedtime
Recorded the next line... A phone rang - It's only a formality, see?
I heard a female voice say, "Patrick, come back to reality, please"
That last bit is key... I said, "Evelyn?" Suddenly my boss was in front of me
Thoughts of hide and seek - The mind believes whatever the eyes perceive
I'm a cog in a gear it seems; Real violence should be left in dreams
I digest the screams of men that bleed... Squeaky wheels always get the grease
They lift with ease, unemployment lines become something to hurdle too
"In terms of YOU?" my boss said, "It's nothing business... It's only personal"
Heard this jew ask, "Is everything kosher?" - My revenge is a cold dish
I made a finger gun and went, "I'm just a rockin' and a rollin'"
Waited for the elevator doors to open... It was slower than ever
It stopped on the 13th floor - That's fucked up on so many levels...
I'm the fiction of Bret Easton Ellis with the awful high of drugs
Just the thought of that makes me up Chuck like the plot of Fight Club...
Climbed a flight of stairs, passing a guy with two black eyes for certain
A tag attached on his shirt conveyed his name as 'TyLeR DuRdeN'
He carried my burden so I chirped him... He said, "You got a death wish?"
I got the message... A clock's beckoning tick had brought confessions
"Vivid imagination, Patrick Bateman..." There's no periods in a haunted sentence
So I walked from the entrance toward a sign that read:

This Is Not An Exit

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Never black out on shrooms

Thought I’d get retarded in my college apartment.
Empty stomach & some orange juice vitamin C. (I)hope I don’t vomit.
Empty feeling, from last night’s oxy and weed.
Asked a friend to trip with me & he agreed.

Never black out on shrooms.
Flat on your back in the middle of the room.
Close-eyed Christmas fractals before I black out (& pass out)
Not going to get in to why I was trying it.
Come to; the living room carpet is a magical 3D environment.
Me and a friend, shadows on the wall for amusement.
One should have proper set and settings but I would abuse it.

Weeks & months later smoking weed is no longer enjoyable.
The paranoia and anxiety make it deplorable.
Irrational thoughts can trick the mind horrible.
What could only be described as a near-death experience.
Maybe I died. The crazy events & mental sickness had me fearing it.

I wasn’t the same.
Months later, failed out of college and still fucking insane.
Then comes the cry for help - something worse than trying to yell
Suicide attempt and the psych floor.
One night, my life is what I had to fight for.
Group sessions, people even worse than me.
2 weeks in the hospital; I yearned to be free.
All I can say is that what can heal the mind, is time.
Mine is fine, as of the conclusion of this rhyme.

All of this is true.. I also went back ta school..
ONCE AGAIN, SHOUT TO THE ARTISTS
Week 3: Elia Colombo
Week 4: Avogado6
Week 5: Joey Guidone
Week 6: Sergio Lagravalle
Week 7: Pawel Kuczynski


POWER RANKINGS:
I think there’s been a few surprises this season and some people coming out of the woodwork, proving to be just as competitive as our mainstay guys.

1. UNIVERSE 6-0
- Duh. The guy is the only champion we’ve had this season for a reason, though on paper it would be easy to point out that Universe has had a couple of no show wins, not to mention his DQ victory over Master Rock last week. It wouldn’t be hard to say Uni hasn’t faced the stiffest competition either. Mr. J was probably his hardest fought victory this season BUT a few challenges loom in the distance, GWL champion SCAR this week and not to mention whoever the victor is between Fraze and the established Lars if he manages to get past his challenge this week. We will see if he hangs on to that belt in the coming weeks but for now he is the man to beat.

2. SCAR 3-0
- Obviously this guy is in the contenders match this week so he’s the no brainer for the number two spot. Scar isn’t hitting the heights that he’s hit in some of his Open Mic pieces or when he commanded the GWL for a short while this last season but he is still a formidable foe and knows his way around a topical. He seems to be picking up a head of steam coming into the champ match. It’ll be interesting to see how he measures up to Uni, that will be the real test to see where he is at this season, but it should be respected that Scar can turn on the jets at any time and go another GWL-esque run. Put some RESPECK on his name.

3. DIABLO 2-0
- The manpoem, the myth, the legend. Lars has made a name from himself on the internet whether it be on the Don’t Flop circuit, text battling or being a topical legend. He last champed the Black August II tourney over yours truly last we heard from him. He’s been at it for an eternity but still has plenty in the tank so competitors beware!

4. FRAZE 2-0
- Fraze is a newcomer but he has a couple solid Ws under his belt including against a pretty good Mr. J. He’s in the contenders match this week, Universe has compared his style a lot to a fresh Scar. He has creativity, he’s technically sound and he writes solid narratives. He’ll be a sleeper to look out for.

5. MMLP 4-2
- MMLP is a mainstay, he’s been in a couple of Contender Matches this season and is probably prime for me if he stays signed in. His narrative driven topicals are always sly in their pop culture references as well as technically efficient in his writing. He’s dope definitely and can put himself towards the top of the list with a little more push. Let’s see what he can do in the coming weeks.

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CHAMP MATCH: UNIVERSE 6-0 vs SCAR 3-0


Universe hasn’t exactly battled scrubs this season but at times his competition has probably appeared as non-threatening. I don’t think that argument can be made here. Scar is as real a threat as they come, he’s proven in the past that he has the skill to take down Uni and he’s finally rolling, clicking on all cylinders. This will be a fight tooth and nail, Universe is in the midst of telling a continuous story while Scar is more set on telling little individual week to week narratives it will be an awesome matchup but only can win and I think Uni CREEPS by here by a small margin.
UNIVERSE WINS 55/45

CONTENDERS MATCH: DIABLO 2-0 vs FRAZE 2-0


This promises to be one to remember. We’ve got the wily veteran Diablo aka Lars aka Clutbuck aka any other fucking alias you can think of in one corner who is still at the peak of his topical abilities at the tender age of 4008, and on the other side we have a relatively new face in Fraze who made some ripples in the NBL and has definitely impressed with his two entries into the AOWL. Lars is hyper competitive, and without a torture porn collection to derail his attention he should bring it heavy this week as he usually does. He’s technically proficient and is very esteemed with the craft. Fraze has his work cut out for him and I feel like he will ultimately fall even though he’ll have an awesome showing. But we will see
DIABLO WINS 65/35

CANDY 1-4 vs BROKENHAL0 0-1
Candy has been great in this league, he’s voted, he’s showed up and he’s been competitive he actually had a very good verse against Objective last week but ultimately fell. Brokenhal0 is a keystyler in its purest form, he sees his topic, writes and then disappears into oblivion until the next week there doesn’t seem to be a thought process to it which usually bodes well for his opponents. Candy has showed the ability to write solid narratives and use colorful language I think that will give him an advantage here.
CANDY WINS 70/30


MMLP 4-2 vs OBJECTIVE 2-3


You may have seen MMLP’s request for this battle to happen and seeing it come to fruition may have you question my modding. Well, it’s not like that, this battle made the most sense for trying to diversify things this week. Both of these writers are dope, while one is just coming to form the other is trying to reach that next tier, knocking at the door continually. He’s in the conversation and if he stays signed in as previously mentioned he’ll have a legitimate shot at the title. There’s a lot of moving pieces here including MMLP already getting his verse posted, Objective has a hill to overcome here and if he’ll be able to do it is TBD buuuut my gut is going with MMLP here in a close one.
MMLP WINS 60/40


MASTER ROCK 3-3 vs MR J 3-3


Cool matchup here of two guys who have been to the champion match of this league but have both had their downs as well. Master Rock defaulted out of his shot at the belt last week by getting DQ’d for editing his verse after the allotted time to do so. Mr. J lost to a rising Fraze in a pretty decent showing. Both of these guys are tremendous writers and have showed a lot of promise, though they’re both on their individual skids I think Rock is the more inspired of the two of them and the one who at this moment has a better chance of using this match to their benefit to get back on the right track. It’ll be a good and close match for sure.
MASTER ROCK WINS 55/45

ADVERSE 0-1 vs PHARAOHS ARMY 3-3


By: An anonymous, totally unbiased source.

One sided matchup here, ladies and gents. Pharaohs Army is coming off a DQ win over brokenhal0 (a battle he clearly lost) and has spent most of his week studying Uni's verses in the archives in hopes of someday replicating such skill and ability (he won't). His biggest claim to fame was an upset win over dead man in the GWL, which still stands as the biggest miscarriage of justice since Lars' baby accused Destroyer's baby of being part of a voting ring in the Before Life. PA has shown flashes of above average-ness from time to time but he is largely cannon fodder to the top guys at this point.

The current Black August II co-winner Adverse is coming off a forfeit loss to Scar, (a battle which he won but didn't have the patience to wait for the lazy trolls that inhabit this league to vote) thus serving him up this week as a ritualistic human sacrifice to the soon to be 12-0 champ, Universe. Addy will have no problem putting a win on his record here. Unless, of course, he gets into a car accident or something... Which would actually be poetic because he'd most likely wake up on an island purgatory like his verse of the year candidate from the GWL. Art imitates death?

Let's hope not... Because then Inno would have to take back over and Pharaohs Army has a better chance of not hate voting Universe this week than Inno does at running a league smoothly...

Adverse wins 90/10




ZE OUTRO:
Thanks for another solid week guys hoping more people show to vote and that we can keep a head of steam going towards the playoffs. Keep doing your part I’ve loved reading the verses y’all come up with thus far. Had an alternate verse on MMLP’s topic but accidentally deleted it instead. Just know it was like letting a girl know how you feel and wanting to hear those three words and you do but the three words are “LOL THX FAGGOT”

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Old 01-15-2021, 04:33 PM   #2
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@Adverse I appreciate the shout out mate. Unfortunately I'm more tied up than a ball of yarn right now and will be for the foreseeable future. I'll be back on the site at some point but I've got no idea when that is. Kudos to everyone in the league for putting the effort in to represent.

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