08-21-2021, 07:35 PM | #1 |
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-IONS rough draft. To be recorded.
From your verse I Sense Devastation
I'm under Sedation from Several Medications Practicing Intense Meditation for personal Edification Salutations My Speculation is that my Reputation is good in this Secular Nation In front of this Congregation Much to my Imagination, & Elation you're a text Abomination The Gyration of the test tube didn't stop the Titration Now, I commence with Great Communication which will Make you do Gesticulations from my Incantations Here to win your Devotion I will be the cause of your Ruination Concocting Magic Potions from Plants in the Ocean Allow me to give an example of my Ascension I'll put you in Detention if I'm ever Mentioned Allow me to give a Demonstration of my Teleportation It will be a great Sensation when I perform your Annihilation Put your body in the ground after Asphyxiation, then begin Excavation I spit it faster than a Croatian, or an Asian, but I'm So Patient You can hear me on the Radio Station (or Television), coming at you from a great Elevation Make music in Synchronization after Preparation, Volition, Conviction, and Determination It will result in Elation and a conscious Separation Good enough for your Satiation What will be your Condition after I give you the Prescription, and Ammunition? It’s Description is inscribed with my Diction And ALL my Intuition I give you Permission to stick to your Convictions Put you on the best Nutrition so your body runs like a clean Ignition Put you on shrooms so you have substantial Visions Let’s go ahead and Demolition (the Demarcation on) the Partition Don’t worry it won’t be a Violation and it won’t cause Friction You’ll have to Ration your Elation if you go on Vacation for Recreation This beat is Activation w/ a lil’ bit ‘o Sophistication It’s like a volcanic Eruption, or a tornado’s Suction Think about the Coalition that created the Emancipation Proclamation After the Succession of Secessions, for slavery’s Cessation After its Creation came its Elimination You should have the Suspicion that rap is my Infatuation It’s a game of Attrition No need for Contrition or Stagnation It’s all about Evolution in this Vocation Stagnation will result in Emaciation My Inclination is I’m a Bastion of Revolution |
08-22-2021, 04:02 AM | #2 |
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I mean what you’re doing here is cool, I like how the words play off of each other it was nicely done in that respect, felt kinda like Eminem’s infinite. Kind of just a showmanship of vocabulary and I did enjoy it in that aspect. Feel like the flow might get lost in audio just because of the sheer amount of content you’re packing per bar, although I haven’t heard you deliver it over a beat yet so I’ll reserve my opinion on that.
It was cool for what it was, don’t think it necessarily broke any molds but it’ll all come down to how everything is delivered on the audio side of things if it’s a truly good product or not Keep spitting |
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