11-17-2020, 05:00 PM | #1 |
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WEEK TWO: PHARAOHS ARMY 0-1 vs SINACOG 0-0 PHARAOHS ARMY WINS
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@Pharaohs Army @Sinacog Verse Due: Saturday November 21st @ 11:59PM EST Line min: 10 Max: 50 Rules:http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=145451[/b] Topic: Last edited by Adverse; 11-19-2020 at 03:21 PM. |
11-17-2020, 11:46 PM | #2 |
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The Fire of Hell - AJ The Menace
There was once' flames of HELL; hell's possessed demons Demons were in possession; the possession of possession I am a demon of possession; a possessed demon I am a demon drinking semon from flask; worthless laugh I am a demon with demon demon demon I am a demon with demon demon demon I am a demon with wicked wiccans; wicked wiccans I am a demon with wicked wiccans; wicked wiccans I am a demon mossed by HELL: possessed by HELL I am hell's demon; hell's possession; hell's possession I am hell's possession; HELL's possession Hell's possession; hell's flames; hell's flames Hell's flames; hell's flames; hell's flames I am a demon torturing demons and devils I am a demon torturing demons and devils Semon is reveled; the dreaming of metal I am a demon possessed by a demon; behemoth demons I am dreaming; the semon of gleaming is demeter's intrigue.. |
11-19-2020, 09:27 PM | #3 |
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Like a demon cock you need to Stiffen Up
Your mouth I'll Zip it Shut, then I'll Rip your Guts & Nibble'm for Lunch What do we have here? It Isn't Much You're a Wiccan Dunce, looking into your orb for Visions & Such In summation I Think it Sucks, Though I know you don't Give a Fuck I'll cremate you, then use your ashes to Fertilize This demon is Circumcised and possesses Serpent Eyes You can't escape this Curse of Mine Your Worthless Lies tarnish Earth & Fire Wind and Water rushed you Into the Slaughter I'll make you sacrifice your Daughter &Force you to burn her Coffin Your verses are Repetitive Often while mine are Incredibly Awesome Yet we both take Several Losses Magic dust into the flames leave your Sentinels Falling Liquefy their bodies in to Edible Sauces Did I Mention I'm Caustic? Crashing your plane soon as I Enter the Cockpit So Stop It! This Nonsense will never Make you a Profit I'm the Forsaken Prophet who Came from a Comet and Hates your Sonnets I Aim to be Honest and this time I'm not Late for the Contest! Last edited by Pharaohs Army; 11-19-2020 at 09:31 PM. |
11-19-2020, 09:49 PM | #4 |
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You got to be kidding me, sin what are you attempting to do? Chanting that horrid nonsense, this is a no for me. Pharaoh for the win, must I explain more?. Pharaoh relates to the topic as well as directs this as directed blow at the same thine, "I'll cremate you, then use your ashes to Fertilize
This demon is Circumcised and possesses Serpent Eyes You can't escape this Curse of Mine Your Worthless Lies tarnish Earth & Fire Wind and Water rushed you Into the Slaughter I'll make you sacrifice your Daughter &Force you to burn her Coffin" This was enough to finish it. Pharaoh for the win.
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11-21-2020, 10:56 PM | #5 |
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Well to start off I guess I owe Pharaohs Army an apology for not keeping him signed out, but since his opponent was Sinacog I guess I did him a favor in the same breath
I don’t think we really need a comprehensive breakdown here, I’m super disappointed in Sinacog because I just read the quality of work he was putting out seven years ago and it’s a far cry from the repetitive nonsense he spits now. If you’re going to be strictly biblical in your subject matter there are about a million different ways you could do it. But telling you this shit is like talking to a wall sooo PA I know you weren’t trying and though you didn’t exactly make solid references to the picture I think subtle things at it like ‘Your Worthless Lies tarnish Earth & Fire” And the cremate bars were just vague enough for me to consider it as references so it was good but it was your typical “I got Sinacog this week’ verse V/PA |
11-22-2020, 09:28 AM | #6 |
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I actually preferred Sinacog’s verse here.
Should I break down why?
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11-22-2020, 10:49 AM | #7 |
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11-22-2020, 12:13 PM | #8 |
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I didn't find anything to note from sin his shit keeps repeating it's hard to read I think he might have terrets or something, pause where PA said demon cock it's obvious he knows what he's getting into here, looking into your orb for visions and such was dope, serpent eyes was cool, I think PA won this one pretty easily LOL.
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11-22-2020, 10:47 PM | #9 |
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Sinacog: Why do you do this? You can write some incredibly dope stuff if you just care enough about what you write, you know this! Yet you seemed to fall into the stereotype and almost mocking yourself in a way this time around, lol. Don't let people get to you, dude. Come back stronger and better, you got this!
Pharaohs Army: Swag & Flow battle verse more than a topical in the traditional sense. I don't think this is your best by far, lol, but it's enough to get my vote with what Sinacog chose to post... Vote: Was kinda hoping this would be a dope battle where two people that have been butting heads would show their absolute best, and maybe shed some light on the style they've been going by. Depressively enough, that was not the case... Pharaohs Army gets my vote.
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11-23-2020, 06:35 AM | #10 |
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I don't hate Sinacogs meta-schtick popping up here and there, as comic relief its alright, I guess. In a topical battle it seems sorta misplaced tho, but each to their own.
PA didnt need to strain himself here to get the W, an adequate drop with some frisky rhyming and imagery on display. Short battle, short vote: PA. |
11-23-2020, 06:28 PM | #11 |
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I don't even know what Sinacog has been going on about since his work first appeared in the OM. But since someone dedicated a whole cypher thread to him who am I to complain. I remember combining his threads and setting him off to the side but whatever....not really what I'm looking for in the league to say much about.
PA- I've always enjoyed what you bring to the table and it is a joy to watch you work around the schemes and toy with ideas that suit your abilities. This piece was great but wasted on your opponent who most likely got drunk on night and just let loose on the page. Either way your transitioning from the jump was enjoyable to see and toward the end I really liked your placement of rhymes. Dope work. V/Pharaohs Army
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11-23-2020, 08:29 PM | #12 |
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Sinacog: I'm not sure what it is I am even reading. You just repeated your self and made no sense what so ever. Not sure if this is a joke or your trolling but this shit was fucking garbage.
Pharaoh:You pretty much wrote a battle verse. I dont blame you. Its an easy W. Your verse was far more superior than that of your weird fucking opponent. Vote: Pharaoh for pretty much obvious reasons... |
11-24-2020, 04:11 AM | #13 |
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sinacog:
was a pretty cool verse and the demons and dreams was pretty cool it the the story its was pretty cool you took alot of stabs at it was smooth in general.. a little diddy cool none the less.. pharoh army: def cooler because the story was more planned out and the lines was lengthy in a good way with some interesting the vocab the bar structure was cool rhythm the line length was tight with internals in the way of that they just fit in perfect.. vote = paroah army it was just an all round better verse with lengthy lines for more substance thanks guys good luck
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