07-14-2013, 07:07 PM | #1 |
...DA GAWD...
|
Write Night I Finals: Pohfig Vs. NYCSPITZ [POHFIG WINS]
TOPICAL KEYS TO GREATNESS @pohfig @NYCSPITZ
Welcome to the FINALS. Here are the 5 topics you get to choose from.. Behemoth Nightmare Phantom Subsidiary Ledgers Downward Spiral Purpose of death... Your choice of either topics 20 minutes to write 16 lines G'Luck and make it dope
__________________
WP Po'ethics Last edited by Spoken; 07-14-2013 at 07:12 PM. |
07-14-2013, 07:24 PM | #2 |
SYRACUSE
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 4,033
Battle Record: 31-37
Champed - Write Night II
- Alias Topical Tournament
Rep Power: 4743544 |
Purpose of death
Some stare into the abyss, preaching that God-worship tarnishes worth others contend that deeds lead to Earthly karmic rebirths but existential truths aren't swayed when garnished with words Pyramid tomb ether flow- King Tut harnessed it first neural connection personalities burn slow and melt at your death But to John there's one consciousness which experiences itself in the flesh His declaration of independence reads "the vices of men" a liquor bottle constitution, that his trusty liver rightly amends his mind's congress sways from vicious thug to knightly in trends... between lucid lunacy lamps and the mightiest ken. Existential opiate trip, merge politely with zen slowing down the dying force his lungs slightly expend Dark angels descend and surround him, tightly in tens until his father passes by and sees the plight of a friend "That would have been the end, son" but John's spright in defense: Death gods seem more exciting than the whitest events . Last edited by NYCSPITZ; 07-14-2013 at 07:28 PM. |
07-14-2013, 07:27 PM | #3 |
Robin Williams of Fallen Victims
Join Date: Feb 2013
Posts: 1,502
Battle Record: 25-11
Accomplishments - NC Hall of Fame
Champed - Netcees Writers League (2x)
- NWL Season 1
- Write Night I
- Art of Writing League (2x)
- Write Week IV
Rep Power: 6862273 |
He'll....
Eat you alive while beating your child Snarl at your dog while it pee's in the wild Causing it to all but twitch and piss on its own leg He could pull your strings - or pick at your omens -Viciously show them until you faint from loss of blood Then reawaken you and make you double-cross your love. But he's never there - just in your head with a threaded stare Bolting up to all your dreaded scares When getting air as a break - he can grasp you all he wants by making you change thoughts and flash you in a taunt You can rub your eyes, and clean off the glasses with the fog or tell yourself that the paranoia is from the massive stash of pot He's more than that - a piece of you that torments back He'll take a past incident and mold it with a forward flash. He's the people and things you've damaged and truly attacked He's your worst nightmare - a phantom of you in the past |
07-14-2013, 07:52 PM | #4 |
...DA GAWD...
|
@NYCSPITZ this was great the rhyme scheme was on point and some nice metaphors exposed from an angle that usually is played but here was quite refreshing on the takes you had chosen. The content tho at times I felt to be a little over zealous and convey from the diction you were aiming for... But overall fucking awesome read
@pohfig it has been a great deliver to read such work from you recently and this was a prime example of such ease and simplicity yet when worded precise and with a vibe and delivery very catching it just moves with one motion. Heavy meaning and such a stron message!! Mvgt: Pohfig... Was just as a whole superb clean and crisp both did fucking awesome and I appreciate the work put in... Thank you guys
__________________
WP Po'ethics |
07-14-2013, 09:18 PM | #5 |
Guest
Posts: n/a
|
Vote pohfig
|
07-14-2013, 09:55 PM | #6 |
Don't believe the hype
Join Date: Feb 2013
Posts: 572
Battle Record: 4-5
Rep Power: 0 |
v/pofig
__________________
What is public must be legit, fit for average consumption, don't forget. What is private is handled by pirates, prying loose profits from prosthetics. To tell the difference between: first remain unseen with a steady breath and hope, then listen to the cracks in the wall with a stethoscope. |
07-15-2013, 12:12 AM | #7 |
...DA GAWD...
|
__________________
WP Po'ethics |
07-15-2013, 02:00 AM | #8 |
Guest
Posts: n/a
|
nyc - pretty dope verse, some nice alliertation, kinda lost me with the whole gospel of john, not me as much as my interest, i just wasn't crazy about the content tbh, and ur word choice isn't where it typically is, prolly cuz of the key
pohfig- much cleaner verse, the start was dope, and so was the conclusion, the middle wasn't bad but did kinda dull out at a point, but it was enough to win imo v/pohfig next time the topic for finals shouldnt b option based imo, bc honestly i liked pohfigs topic better then nyc, and the leway given with topical choice can affect the voters preference, just something to keep in mind, |
07-15-2013, 03:04 AM | #9 |
Senior Member
Join Date: Mar 2013
Posts: 226
Rep Power: 0 |
Close battle
Wack multi topic shit Pohfig took it for me by a decent margin
__________________
no matter what side you see it's only one side
______________________________ __________________ _________ _____ ___ _ |
07-15-2013, 03:57 AM | #10 |
...DA GAWD...
|
@Knucklehead @Meth please accomp
__________________
WP Po'ethics |
|
|