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Old 11-25-2019, 02:11 AM   #1
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Lightbulb Now Streaming: The Rabbit Hole

What if I told you that John Wick was really Neo
and Agent Smith still exists as an Asian named Zero?
Different code. Same people. Download the program.
The archetype is hero. Morpheus is obvious.
The “choice” is still the same.The Matrix never ended
but Zion became the Bowery’s domain.
An underground network with thousands of trained
assassins and scouts that once bounced in a rave
that was housed in a cave 1,000 miles deep
beneath the mountains that grazed
the scorched atmosphere made of gaseous rain.
Acids and metals that would flash into flames
when they splashed on the grave .. of Trinity
“Remember me if Helen be thy name.”
The Oracle and Architect from whence did emerge
I meant Winston is merged. The purge is underway
and the victim is Earth’s organic sentients
that are remnants of dirt. Made out of clay.
Replaced by a version of digital perfection.
Who’s purpose is infectious due circuitry connections.
The Terminator’s lurking. Skynet is learning.
The Empire strikes. My lightsaber’s burning.
A dystopic future. Robocops and shooters.
Cybertrucks and scooters.
2049: humanity is fewer. you might just be a clone.
An elusive fugitive being hunted by a drone.
Your phone is not a phone, it’s the Mark of the Beast.
Moloch is hungry. You’re looking like a feast.
You sacrificed your essences. Beelzebub is pleased.
The Lord of the Flies reports to the fleas.
The fleet of Baphomet that was forged in a morgue
by a horde of machines. That’s Frankenstein porn
and Darth Vader’s dream. Cybertron’s leaking
and it’s running out of grease cos an organic forest
is the source of its disease. It’s covered in the green.
Malnourished by the trees.
Maleficent with wings and Star Scream combat
while The Swamp Thing attacks and Decepticons react.
It’s Nature vs the Borg: an apocalyptic clash!
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Old 11-25-2019, 02:55 AM   #2
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Good rhymes and cadence and it's obvious you like sci fi movies. Will hit up your other recent piece in a few days.
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Honestly liked this, it was kind of a mind trip, it reminded me of like some old Lupe, "Streets on Fire" sort of, yes the sci-fi influence is aparent and i liked it that way. I don't know how well this would work, or if it even would work in audio form but it was a hell of a read for a written piece. Thought provoking and engaging.
@Sinacog you should attempt something ambitious like this fam, his style is sort of like your own and i think you could take some pointers from this piece
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Hey fam, long time no speak...Thought the opener was awesome.You always lace your pieces with imagery that not only resonates with me but whoever reads it man...

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