07-14-2013, 12:22 PM | #1 |
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Heartless
you are heartless
you not gonna find someone good as me you not gonna find someone nice as me don't understand why you treat me this way, I give you the everything you take my love for granted. you don't do the things you use do, you don't even show me love. lately I been feeling unappreciated We use to be lovers, where it go wrong? you were my soul, heart, everything, King, Best friend, Friend. you were all I had, I stayed with u even tho you treated me bad. moving on cuz I deserve better. |
07-14-2013, 01:35 PM | #2 |
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07-14-2013, 02:10 PM | #3 |
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some humble advice, when doing straight up poetry...try to explore the soul of the person or noun u be writing about to give depth to teh piece....you showed the symptoms but to cut in our minds we need to have u put personification on some object to show us...
not bad tho....keep droping
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07-15-2013, 10:38 AM | #4 |
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Appreciate you guys reading this & thanks coup.
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