Lenox vs DMS - DMS WINS

[Cred]

The Summer Classic ‘18
The Premier Text Battling Tournament

@Lenox @DMS

Rules

Due Dates:

• Verses are due Thursday,
  July 26th, 2018 @ 11:59 PM PST.
• Check Ins are due Tuesday, July 24th, 2013 @ 11:59 PM PST
• Voting ends Saturday, July 28th, 11:59 PM PST.
• Battles that lack votes may close later.
• One sided battles may get closed early.
• Extensions are normally 24 hours
  (unless requested otherwise, that is),
  can be no longer than 48 hours
  and have to be granted by your opponent.

Line Limit:

• Min. = 10 lines
• Max. = 16 lines
• The max. can be higher if different is agreed upon by both. If no line agreement is made you CANNOT go above 16 lines

General Rules:

• 1st person to post can't edit after the 2nd person posts.
• 2nd person to post can't edit after a vote has been made.
• Feeding = DQ.
• Recycling = DQ.
• Biting = DQ.
• No freeposting, swaying or bitching.
• Unless a picture battle is agreed upon,
  linking to your opponent's picture or posting it
  means you will disqualified.
• A check in IS mandatory.
• Competitors should agree on a line limit in their check in.
• If no line limit is agreed on, then the 2nd person to post
  must match the 1st person's line amount.

[DMS]

Check
10 lines.

[Lenox]

Drive by on this faggot, leave em soaked up from pistols.
use the sploof as a silencer.. it’ll do more then just blow smoke out the window.
constantly mixin up the web & real life. I kill homo fakes for quarters..
removal of the brain & body. my guns handin out disassociation disorders.
dismembered bongo, then removed dopes face with a steak knife.
John Lee Cowell.... I murdered both of these bitches in plain sight.
3-0 vs no comp? against the gods u getting shots from the muzzler.
everyone know I’m the supreme, blientele & I’ll have em duckin shots like WSG’s brother
fuck ya bitch in her mouf, leave her kneelin & twitchin,
I’ve taken DMX out more than America’s legal system

[DMS]

Lenny retire? I don’t blame him, the only time Lenny is fire is when Lenny’s the pyre
Every verse like he trynna sing on highs, good news, faggot, you’re about to see the heavenly choirs.
Bitch I squirt til you’re a metal type, so you better have the balls
Bullets rip flesh and make you hotdog meet, my Beam’s like my name, I let ‘er cap it all
You think this 19 year middleweight has ever bucked eh gauge?
Since 1999 this fucks been fake, so if John seen a goon, it was a schmuck on stage,
His mom’s a drunk whore, so to stop the empty feeling he saw the drug lords on the street and got complete
But in that culture, he’s an outcast, so I’ll have Mexicans seizin’ him and covering him in shells like Taco Meat,
So tell John, Len in trouble, him getting beat’ll be likely,
His crews getting killed and his verses are all an apparent confession: “ I only write with a needle inside me.”

[For Battling]

Drive by on this faggot, leave em soaked up from pistols.
use the sploof as a silencer.. it’ll do more then just blow smoke out the window.
pretty cool
constantly mixin up the web & real life. I kill homo fakes for quarters..
removal of the brain & body. my guns handin out disassociation disorders.
decent here, if you had tied in the gun with something else it would have hit better
dismembered bongo, then removed dopes face with a steak knife.
John Lee Cowell.... I murdered both of these bitches in plain sight.
alright, good current concept but had potential for more. Still a good line tho
3-0 vs no comp? against the gods u getting shots from the muzzler.
everyone know I’m the supreme, blientele & I’ll have em duckin shots like WSG’s brother
i don’t know the reference or get the wordplay tbh
fuck ya bitch in her mouf, leave her kneelin & twitchin,
I’ve taken DMX out more than America’s legal system
DMX concept had a lot more potential, this was a bit lazy


Vs


Lenny retire? I don’t blame him, the only time Lenny is fire is when Lenny’s the pyre
Every verse like he trynna sing on highs, good news, faggot, you’re about to see the heavenly choirs.
had potential but didn’t like how you finished
Bitch I squirt til you’re a metal type, so you better have the balls
Bullets rip flesh and make you hotdog meet, my Beam’s like my name, I let ‘er cap it all
decent as a s&f
You think this 19 year middleweight has ever bucked eh gauge?
Since 1999 this fucks been fake, so if John seen a goon, it was a schmuck on stage,
schmuck lol. Maybe there’s something I’m missing but I’m not feelin this
His mom’s a drunk whore, so to stop the empty feeling he saw the drug lords on the street and got complete
But in that culture, he’s an outcast, so I’ll have Mexicans seizin’ him and covering him in shells like Taco Meat,
lmao wow this is dope af actually
So tell John, Len in trouble, him getting beat’ll be likely,
His crews getting killed and his verses are all an apparent confession: “ I only write with a needle inside me.”
sheeeesh this is harsh. Deep. Nice one


Cool little battle here, I actually had Len winning the whole way until I read DMS last two bars which were fuckin brutal. Taco meat was fire and that closer is a dopeeee ass personal lol.


Vote DMS

[DynamiCz]

Drive by on this faggot, leave em soaked up from pistols.
use the sploof as a silencer.. it’ll do more then just blow smoke out the window.

This was decent opener here

constantly mixin up the web & real life. I kill homo fakes for quarters..
removal of the brain & body. my guns handin out disassociation disorders.

This was coo, I like this

dismembered bongo, then removed dopes face with a steak knife.
John Lee Cowell.... I murdered both of these bitches in plain sight.

Decent, Could of worded with more impact

3-0 vs no comp? against the gods u getting shots from the muzzler.
everyone know I’m the supreme, blientele & I’ll have em duckin shots like WSG’s brother

Niceeee one here Lenny

fuck ya bitch in her mouf, leave her kneelin & twitchin,
I’ve taken DMX out more than America’s legal system

Had to read a couple times, this could have had some crazy impact behind but you worded it so simple, still a hit for me tho!

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Lenny retire? I don’t blame him, the only time Lenny is fire is when Lenny’s the pyre
Every verse like he trynna sing on highs, good news, faggot, you’re about to see the heavenly choirs.

Decent, stretched tho here

Bitch I squirt til you’re a metal type, so you better have the balls
Bullets rip flesh and make you hotdog meet, my Beam’s like my name, I let ‘er cap it all

Nahhh, didn't like this one

You think this 19 year middleweight has ever bucked eh gauge?
Since 1999 this fucks been fake, so if John seen a goon, it was a schmuck on stage,

Niceee here fam

His mom’s a drunk whore, so to stop the empty feeling he saw the drug lords on the street and got complete
But in that culture, he’s an outcast, so I’ll have Mexicans seizin’ him and covering him in shells like Taco Meat,

This was actually nastyyyyy

So tell John, Len in trouble, him getting beat’ll be likely,
His crews getting killed and his verses are all an apparent confession: “ I only write with a needle inside me.”

Lmao, another good one


This battle actually was cool here, both came out to handle business I see. I got DMS, his last bars ending out his verse was crucial hits in imo. Lenox had some good bars too, but they wasn't strong enough for what DMS had. Props to both tho!

V-DMS

[Lenox]

Wat

[Lenox]

Yea I’m officially done

[For Battling]

Stfu you stupid pussy

[Ghost1]

LMFAOOOOO

nah len don't do it!

[Hush]

Originally Posted by Lenox

Drive by on this faggot, leave em soaked up from pistols.
use the sploof as a silencer.. it’ll do more then just blow smoke out the window.
... fuck is a sploof???
constantly mixin up the web & real life. I kill homo fakes for quarters..
removal of the brain & body. my guns handin out disassociation disorders.
....that setup straight trash . Respect the set up
dismembered bongo, then removed dopes face with a steak knife.
John Lee Cowell.... I murdered both of these bitches in plain sight.
....who ?
3-0 vs no comp? against the gods u getting shots from the muzzler.
everyone know I’m the supreme, blientele & I’ll have em duckin shots like WSG’s brother
....oh no . Hell nah. Fucks a muzzler??
fuck ya bitch in her mouf, leave her kneelin & twitchin,
I’ve taken DMX out more than America’s legal system
...umm ok best line

Originally Posted by DMS

Lenny retire? I don’t blame him, the only time Lenny is fire is when Lenny’s the pyre
Every verse like he trynna sing on highs, good news, faggot, you’re about to see the heavenly choirs.
... ok
Bitch I squirt til you’re a metal type, so you better have the balls
Bullets rip flesh and make you hotdog meet, my Beam’s like my name, I let ‘er cap it all
...that setup mad gay yo
You think this 19 year middleweight has ever bucked eh gauge?
Since 1999 this fucks been fake, so if John seen a goon, it was a schmuck on stage,
...huh?
His mom’s a drunk whore, so to stop the empty feeling he saw the drug lords on the street and got complete
But in that culture, he’s an outcast, so I’ll have Mexicans seizin’ him and covering him in shells like Taco Meat,
... good setup good wording . Line is wack tho
So tell John, Len in trouble, him getting beat’ll be likely,
His crews getting killed and his verses are all an apparent confession: “ I only write with a needle inside me.”
...huh ? The Beatles concept was cool but nah

DMs has some potential

He wins

[bleak]

Lenox bro I told u that u have to expand on ur concepts. The spoof shit can work if u make it clear what a spoof is using context. You have tried to make these disorder bars work every battle and it never does so u gotta switch it up. Focus on an affliction, something we can cling to instead of just ur own jargon. Trust me my guy shit here is all about imagery and shit doesn't connect if the voters don't see what u were trying to do. It may be flames to you but if the voter isn't on the same page as u then it's never gonna land.

You gotta have at least one other worded version of every bar unless that first one is just naturally fire. And you can't assume that everything u write is naturally fire when a site full of ppl is telling u otherwise. You can't blame it on the voters when it's literally everybody.

And yes, DMS had stretched lines but that taco shit was HARSH. He used a lot of space but it was effective. You are too worried about adapting to an NC style. That shit happens naturally, word counts go down and u become more effective in a confined space. AK the king of mini bar but he wasn't good overnight lol

DMS

[Hush]

Originally Posted by Lenox

Yea I’m officially done

Is it cause ur not good at txt or because u lost ?

[sral]

Gotta go with dms here

will break it down if needed

[Inno]

drive by on this faggot, leave em soaked up from pistols.
use the sploof as a silencer.. it’ll do more then just blow smoke out the window.
did you mean loofa? Maybe that’s what u meant, decent setup punch missed

constantly mixin up the web & real life. I kill homo fakes for quarters..
removal of the brain & body. my guns handin out disassociation disorders.
decent setup and punch, concept was good just didn’t execute

dismembered bongo, then removed dopes face with a steak knife.
John Lee Cowell.... I murdered both of these bitches in plain sight.
ok concept, decent punch here but nothing special

3-0 vs no comp? against the gods u getting shots from the muzzler.
everyone know I’m the supreme, blientele & I’ll have em duckin shots like WSG’s brother
nah this was wack

fuck ya bitch in her mouf, leave her kneelin & twitchin,
I’ve taken DMX out more than America’s legal system
Probably your best line, decent closer

Lenny retire? I don’t blame him, the only time Lenny is fire is when Lenny’s the pyre
Every verse like he trynna sing on highs, good news, faggot, you’re about to see the heavenly choirs.
setup was horrible, punch was ok

Bitch I squirt til you’re a metal type, so you better have the balls
Bullets rip flesh and make you hotdog meet, my Beam’s like my name, I let ‘er cap it all
i don’t get this at all, wtf did u really think “I squirt” worked for you at all?

You think this 19 year middleweight has ever bucked eh gauge?
Since 1999 this fucks been fake, so if John seen a goon, it was a schmuck on stage,
isnt lenox 18? So there’s no fucking way in hell hes been fake since 99 wtf?

His mom’s a drunk whore, so to stop the empty feeling he saw the drug lords on the street and got complete
But in that culture, he’s an outcast, so I’ll have Mexicans seizin’ him and covering him in shells like Taco Meat,
decent but way to much wording just to get to taco meat, blah

So tell John, Len in trouble, him getting beat’ll be likely,
His crews getting killed and his verses are all an apparent confession: “ I only write with a needle inside me.”
decent concept that you destroyed with to much wording

I got lenox, his verse was somewhat enjoyable and had a bit of a good flow going. DMS Had nothing I liked tbh. I’m still thinking about that “I squirt” W.T.F.?

Lenox

[Flow]

I honestly just found 90 percent of everything going over my head. D at least had some creativity eg his closer, although his set up to punch connection isn't great. Going back to your closer the word play in the set up I'd have preferred in the punch. Although the John Lennon wordplay is probably not the best the concept to the bar in general is good. But way too wordy. Lennox had the closer but the rest was trash. I dunno.

Vote D on potential