02-16-2018, 04:20 AM | #1 |
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pinwheels
gravity got me weighed down i dont frown lets spin
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02-17-2018, 10:23 AM | #2 |
obsessed
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02-17-2018, 12:53 PM | #3 |
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I surmise you enjoy trying your hand at various different styles? Interesting shtick no doubt. This style of yours however lacks tangibility. It's hard to connect with your words when I have no idea of their purpose. There are however, tiny shards of poetic debris that offer sharp glimpses into your unique brilliance. Keep pushing the pen.
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02-19-2018, 11:20 PM | #4 |
White Earl
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Ya. What activate said
For the most part i can fins meabing in your poats. This was toufg tho. I coulsnt maje sense of it. Guessing yit was a flex. Cool in that regard. Glad to have you bak
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03-04-2018, 09:59 PM | #5 |
rhyme capsule.
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i genuinely tried and get through this but then i realised you're only good for that mercurial rhyme-babble and i thought fuck it. i'm listening to petrichor, by ludovico einaudi, and i'm not about to let this shit ruin my vibe. but thanks for trying. i liked the spaces you used between couplets.
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03-05-2018, 03:51 AM | #6 |
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thanks weird asian guy
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03-05-2018, 02:47 PM | #7 |
death to amen
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ur gettin better bro
sign up in the art of writin league n continue improvin competitively ill get u the link if u need it get at me |
03-05-2018, 04:46 PM | #8 |
rhyme capsule.
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