02-21-2018, 06:57 PM | #1 |
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Featuring Darcy
Swiming out into the Sunset
Performing like a known vet Struggling out of the known wreck With my partner on my side Brother let us not divide Seeing the open sky All clear not wondering why Purposely high now let us try Gliding on the glistening slide A listen and smiled Look what he has done Who he has become King in a throne Now in a Spiritual form To Witches sworm Possessed inside the invisible dorm Bowling was the way to get close to kids Ressurected when The Angel touched his ribs Devil is my uncle Pays by the bundle Paving the ways that I mumble There is A New Me You`ll see Am the one who Will be free Merry glee merry glee let us be Today and forever more Come here infernal whore Let us reighn the hellish core Do what is said the Truth is dead Only alive in the palms of gloomish head So follow or be doomed instead March with armies conquering The last encountering When fully healed All ruin the shield Bound to forever win The Eternal sin Walking talking thinking Chanting singing wanting living Survive the feeling Tonight am sealing The Wizzard is here Give me a stare Llllllllllllllllllllllllll Keep still be real Accept this deal A fusion of worlds Without the use of swords An brutal hoards Aligh on the path Cosigned to the Wrath Understandable thought The God was brought What is the future When the assault is nuclear All you want is there No one is here Don`t wonder where All is clear now prepare To reap the untold treasures in chest So repent it is best Nothing and nobody is The growing Abyss Crowned hear the hiss Judgement day for few The tear is new Something unexplained tearing through So escape to the Blue when they state a cue
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02-22-2018, 10:45 AM | #2 |
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Interesting.
Although, to be completely honest, I can't say that I followed your story from A to Z. I understand it's about the Armageddon, but I'm not entirely sure what to make of the sequence of events that happen throughout the the narration. There just doesn't seem to be a clear or linear direction. Most of your ideas read cluttered. With the only thing holding them together being the underlying Judgement Day like theme you explored. In any case, you definitely have a knack for dark and gloomy poetry. This piece in my opinion read like lyrics to a heavy metal song. Which is interesting to the least. |
02-23-2018, 06:46 PM | #3 |
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Let’s start a squad @DarkEgo ?
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03-01-2018, 05:52 PM | #4 |
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This is a special post featuring a real writer and friend
I expected to see a couple more feed back on the trend She is on her 40s and aging slowly In every way Holy She keeps it between the few This time Am not talking about a wicked crew When you need Ma checks on your post just ask If you all keep hating then we won`t last This is what we are made off its part of the soul Captivating the open mind when the bars unfold Stay close and speak your thoughts on the piece Brothers now peace All repay each comment with a complete verse and vent
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