04-05-2013, 12:51 AM | #1 |
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ALPHA-BETA (extended).
Alpha-Beta, a broca’s area big as building architecture,
begin a bold adventure, beware armed berretta argue better. acting bitter, act berserk angled back a battle axe, airborne bio attack - bacillus anthrax, but alas biological agents became amassed, bitches attached breathing apparatus after being assaulted and bashed. before a beast a basilisk, always breathing acidous, but after a body as broken as a beadless abacus, applying behavioral analysis, beating amateurs, brutalized adversaries begin applying bandages. all battles are basic and boring average, blasting at a barracks, ballistic ammunition browning automatic. barbiturate addict, binged alcohol, benzo’s, analgesics, behaviour affected, blunted avolition, became anaesthetic, bored apathetic. but afterwards became a behemoth across battle arenas, before amphitheatres, basically atheist believer, abiogenesis – before archosaurs, before animals, before amoebas. a billion ages back, aminoacid blocks, ancestral bacteria appeared before any bony arthropods. Archaea brought across by asteroid belts accompanied by acid base acetate, became animate, basic adaptations, afterwards bipedal apes. but anyway beaten absolutely black and blue, and baselessly accused, became amused by alien beings always blamed as aerial balloons, attention barely attuned, buried alive between a bonsai and bamboo. among blood and bones, and born again brandishing arrows bows and braggadocio. accurate blows, above below and beyond, aluminium bronze atomic bombs, all built by automatons and bionic arms. bludgeoned and beheaded, ante bellum, apprehension, berate anybody attempting bringing aggression. Brain awareness born, burning alms before almighty Ba’al, Any bastard attempting brawl always befalled against Borg. All bars appall, became antiwar, Bronze Age bowl anthropologist, Breathe antioxidants but adsorb bicarbonates. Androgynous bitches appear beastly, Approximately, beasts appear briefly, appendages beady, Ageless, baseless, an agnostic believing after abdominal bleeding, Ancient blasphemer as brutal as battle armies besieging. A bent arc, black alchemy batter anatomy, Audacious barbarity accelerates brain atrophy, A botched abnormality, became Alumni - battle academy. Back away basic amphibians, Bourgeois agrarians breed algal bacterium across biotope aquariums, Avian birdlike aliens buzz about broken atriums. But awareness becomes almost boring, an action befitting, Because Alpha-Beta – Always Beginning. |
04-05-2013, 08:48 PM | #2 |
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Holy shneezy-smoke-grenades...
You did your damn thing here Zygote. Rawness all around. Usually the "alphabetical" slaughter type of piece gets sour very quickly but your twist on it in just utilizing the a's and b's really worked here. I read it the whole way through and never stopped because it was awkward or forced and the rhyme scheme was fire in some places which is double-impressive because of the word limitations. I'm going to quote my favorites. Bravo, this might be my favorite of all your work, ever. before a beast a basilisk, always breathing acidous, but after a body as broken as a beadless abacus, ^Slick. before amphitheatres, basically atheist believer, abiogenesis – before archosaurs, before animals, before amoebas. a billion ages back, aminoacid blocks, ancestral bacteria appeared before any bony arthropods. Archaea brought across by asteroid belts accompanied by acid base acetate, became animate, basic adaptations, afterwards bipedal apes. but anyway beaten absolutely black and blue, and baselessly accused, became amused by alien beings always blamed as aerial balloons, ^section was ill. Ageless, baseless, an agnostic believing after abdominal bleeding, Ancient blasphemer as brutal as battle armies besieging. ^Point taken. Keep doing you |
04-08-2013, 01:44 PM | #3 |
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Idk why this is being slept on. Maybe the length I suppose but it really shouldn't be. You're one of my favorite writers on here and you didn't disappoint here. You have a style that's all your own and I've never seen anyone even come close to it. Seriously.
But in regards to this piece holy fuck man. CONSTANT alliteration of A's and B's which made for a really crazy read. Usually when people attempt ideas like this, including if I was to try it, I'd end up fucking up and going off topic for rhymes sakes but you did nothing like this. This was an epic my friend and I thoroughly enjoyed this. Props once again. airborne bio attack - bacillus anthrax, but alas biological agents became amassed, bitches attached breathing apparatus after being assaulted and bashed. before a beast a basilisk, always breathing acidous ^^^Too dope. |
04-08-2013, 05:19 PM | #4 |
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Jesus Christ.. some good advanced rhymes and schemes.
Pretty original imo, as far alliterations go.. Props
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impressive... how long did it take to write
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04-08-2013, 05:42 PM | #6 |
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yeah this was a really impressive piece of rhyme-work. i dont think people fully appreciate how well articulated this was. it takes quite a vocabulary to make conceptual writing work as well as this did, especially considering the length. ill just go ahead and pick out some of my favorite little segments. there were plenty
before a beast a basilisk, always breathing acidous, but after a body as broken as a beadless abacus, blasting at a barracks, ballistic ammunition browning automatic. barbiturate addict, binged alcohol, benzo’s, analgesics, behaviour affected, blunted avolition, became anaesthetic, bored apathetic. but afterwards became a behemoth across battle arenas, before amphitheatres, basically atheist believer, abiogenesis – before archosaurs, before animals, before amoebas. a billion ages back, aminoacid blocks, ancestral bacteria appeared before any bony arthropods. Archaea brought across by asteroid belts accompanied by acid base acetate, became animate, basic adaptations, afterwards bipedal apes. but anyway beaten absolutely black and blue, and baselessly accused, became amused by alien beings always blamed as aerial balloons, attention barely attuned, buried alive between a bonsai and bamboo. among blood and bones, and born again brandishing arrows bows and braggadocio. this entire part honestly. i could not find a single line i felt was unworthy of quote. bonsai and bamboo was probably my favorite. but the entire segment on biological life formation / evolution was pretty nuts. All bars appall, became antiwar, Bronze Age bowl anthropologist, Breathe antioxidants but adsorb bicarbonates. Androgynous bitches appear beastly, Approximately, beasts appear briefly, appendages beady, Ageless, baseless, an agnostic believing after abdominal bleeding, Ancient blasphemer as brutal as battle armies besieging. lol'd at third line and like i said, the ability to keep your rhythm / rhymes so succinct while creating great descriptives, moreover using this device, is admirable to say the least.. thanks for this one zygote. always an honor sir.. 1
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I'd like to nominate this for HOF.
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So creative, so smart, and it makes sense in alot of parts, really enjoyed the extension too it as well, one of the trickiest and smartest pieces i've seen in a bit, takes me back to the old days of boards when we really use to challenge each other to come up with off-the-wall shit.
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whoa v nice
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Lars/Barron Mind you are such a lame homie.
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You basically took bragging to another level,
No fillers straight up, It take a clever mind to understand your bars. Such a Scientific Piece. Best Bars that express the theory of your evolution. became a behemoth across battle arenas, before amphitheatres, basically atheist believer, abiogenesis – before archosaurs, before animals, before amoebas. a billion ages back, aminoacid blocks, ancestral bacteria appeared before any bony arthropods. Archaea brought across by asteroid belts accompanied by acid base acetate, became animate, basic adaptations, afterwards bipedal apes. Last edited by JESODIST; 08-01-2014 at 09:39 PM. |
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Your a very skilled writer, whose writings serve to inspire others. A vehicle of poetic prose that makes penmanship akin to the will of the heavens. Blessings.
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I'm really happy I found something that was Hall of fame worthy thanks for continuing to surprise me that there is more literature out there to engage with I'm going to post in this foru. Everyday well at least once a day if not eightythousand times begin your lives soldiers fight side by side and uppercut dope rhyming @zygote I hope to find more of your pieces to induct into please I love your writing and I really want to get to know you I want to invite you into a secret mission by dropping more cohesive writing so the reader realizes I'm talking to you like a brother or sister Id say keep up but you'd probably beat me to do something about it...yeah lol see u next week
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Did this get archived at all?
It should be.
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Wtf I just read this, this is crazy.
Dunno how I missed it.
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Very good Zygote but just a quick discovery, nothing can travel on or through an asteroid belt.
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Fuck a poll, lol
JUST AN AN OLD NAME ZYGOTE who's on his standalone here... That's all I got; that's all I've been on the internet since the mid 2010 and this a-b verse will never be touched Wise can't touch it I cant! I don't even think dead or vulgar can. Zygote hiself or lars, or no1, or witty in a trance LOL ~ *Run Machine Edit&**************eerrreddit: {Linke provided in Exactly Three Weeks Prof. Zygote} AUDIO LINK BELOW https://soundcloud.com/user-33750237...ulture-respect Last edited by Pharaohs Army; 05-04-2023 at 01:54 AM. Reason: LINK fixed had my own alphabet at first THx |
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