My Favorite Fucking Fling.

[Geno]

So this is a true story. Kind of scattered and maybe a tad repetitive. But its something I'm going through rite now and its hard to push it out exactly how I want. Been writing this the last three days. Usually don't take that long for me to write but havnt had time. So id sit and write every time I got a couple minutes. Here it is

My Favorite Fucking Fling.
The typ'a day I wanna hang n trip, chillin with this bangin bitch
Gave'r kiss, perfect set of angel tits, watermelon flavored lips
Had to go escape her kids, came and hit the beach with me
A place we ain't been recently, we both were dressed indecently
Bikini string around her waist, was loose enough to come untied
The type of ass you fall in love with, once you hit it from behind
Dimple prints above'r hind, fuckin fine, love'r in the summer time
Want her and my love was blind, with two kids that wasn't mine
There's something kind of perfect bout the way we got along
Got a strong sense of heaven, in her presence while i play my songs
Skin was baby soft, maybe wrong, way we lost it during sex
Cleanest girl I've ever met, even loved her morning breath
Sounding like a sorted mess, swore we'd get together more
Never met a purer person, she was certain, said that I'm forever yours
Let the whores hate baby, make'm crazy, loving all the jealousy
And I just wanna be the one, until you don't remember me
Or ever having sex with me, its been about an hour now
Since I plowed her down, dropped her off around her house
Now I'm out about to pick the old lady up, bitch is just a crazy nut
Debating wheather breaking up, would be the better way for us
There isn't any saviour from, the outcome that's awaiting us..
Don't be stupid, play your part, better that than playing dumb
This is not a stadium, this game is packed with crazy lies
Sex is unprotected, if she's pregnant -is the baby mine ???

Damn.. that's a crazy thought, stop with all this baby talk
Sexy clothes, takem off, her body makes my brain get lost
I can not explain it dog, stuck, I fucked it, what you think
Everytime I'm driving by, she sees and wants to come with me
Am I in love to some degree? Or just in lust for company
What it is -is what it is, ain't gotta call it nothing deep
But i don't fucking need another kid, that would hit my rib
Can hardly afford the two I have, what type of shit is this
Ignorance, or lack of innocence, mental imprisonment
the typ'a karma that's been haunting me as every minute ticks
But this was imminent, and been in both our fucking dreams
She told me when she wasn't single that she even wanted me
But that's an equal covetry, cause i have always felt the same
Aint fucked before because of mine, nd she was someone elses dame
Damn, its someone else to blame like every time I wanted her
And here I am with someone else, cheating cause I'm un-mature
Nothing less for something more, this is where my fall has come
I've Never felt as good as this, or as bad, and all at once
Still, shes one of them that's worth it, but the burden has to die
Should I tell her what's been going on, or keep her passified
This is deeper than the mind itself can conquer all alone
I need help, I need her, I'm exhausted, what a joke
I'm the hopeless kind of person women feer when they're attatched
Is he real, is he true, or just coming here for ass

But the summers only just begun, already I'm in question
By the time this autumn hits, will I have what I've been getting
Never letting go is what's been going through my mind
Bout to pick her up tomoro, go somewhere just to unwind
We can find our favorite rendezvous, this cabin that we want
Where I can tell her everything, I can tell her I'm in love
I'm in trouble, I'm an idiot, a dumby, and I'm all of the above
What the fuck, why not, why lie, why not keep it all alive
If I open up, tell the truth, she should see the reasons why
Reason I've been kind of weird about her coming home with me
Cause my aunt and uncle live alone, I'm with another fling
Someone that doesn't bring me all the happiness inside
What she gives me and provides, is miraculous, a high
I don't wanna be alone, or with someone else but you
Are some things that I would say, before the things that ima do
I'm unscrewed, I'm a dude, me and him, him and you
All of us, let's improve, lessons died, lessons grew
Who's that message to, now I'm talkin to myself
This the type of thing I mean, thatts a coffin of my hell
Racing thoughts and often yell, like I'm lost within a shell
Its my bell that's been ringing tones, singing growth, bringing hope
A shadow of yourself I've seen, its a ghost, living though
In me so deep that I've realised on thing..
When its all said and done, shes my favorite fucking fling

[DexLabb]

i thought it was a bit repetative and drawn out so got a bit boring. but i think you got something you know? like your internal rhymes are ur strong suit. the "lessons died, lessons grew" that would sound good on audio

[Illume]

Originally Posted by DexLabb

i thought it was a bit repetative and drawn out so got a bit boring. but i think you got something you know? like your internal rhymes are ur strong suit. the "lessons died, lessons grew" that would sound good on audio

You have no right to demean this rhyme. You have a fully over-inflated sense of your own talent, alongside a delusion that you've accomplished something and you fuckin harp on constantly about how you're the shit yet I've heard literally NO decent rapping from you cause all your posts are shit lyrics and an audio track.

Shut the fuck up already.

It was a decent rhyme. Plus it look like it took time. Just needed tweaked and played with. The flow was good in parts, not in others. Content was someways creative. And it was real. More than I've seen from you, you jumped up, fake-ass, commercializing faggot.

[Geno]

lol.
neverbes

[DexLabb]

whew illume put it down!

[Vulgar]

I thought this was pretty decent, Geno, with highlighted moments. Your style isn't a chore to read and I liked how the structure was broken up into three verses. I got to know the main character's voice well, partly because I'm already acquainted with your track personality from SoundCloud. lol @ pick the old lady up. It would have been cool to see you get into why the relationship / marriage got stale, or why the main character lost interest in his present girl. There's usually specific reasons, and you said she was crazy, but crazy about what? More info would be more engaging and provide more opportunities for humor.

Nothing less for something more, this is where my fall has come
I've Never felt as good as this, or as bad, and all at once
^This is where you shine. Set ups, phrasing and rhythmic accuracy.

Nice drop sir.

Keep doing you

[Split]

I like when people aren't afraid to talk for a long time in their pieces. Good one