Emptyness

Geno · 05-27-2016, 10:37 PM

So many steps, to many thoughts that roll through my head
This hole in my chest, feels bigger than ever, im sober again
shit that needs to be wrote with a pen, open, closer to death
older, ghost in the flesh, demons dont age, growing in depth
ive got a beautiful girlfriend, that doesnt know who i am
That doesnt know i pretend, im not nuts -when i totally am
i got scars in my heart, its been broke, it never totally mends
it takes its toll in the end, tense, a roller coaster of rage
if this ride doesnt stop soon, ill jump towards my only escape
living life like im only insane, lonely, ill just throw it away
in a room full of people, like theres no one that stayed
Like nobody here really knows im controlling the pain
all this shit in my head hurts, worse when i hold it at bey
iono what to say, or how to convey words in emotional ways
im an ocean of hate, that keeps splashing over with waves
that my fiance thinks laughing overs ok, not knowing its fake
not knowing this face, only smiles when i know its on stage
when i know that explaining, is what ill do when its ok to say it
when i know its the safest, knowing, i dont know when that day is

Quarter O · 05-27-2016, 11:46 PM

Dope

Vulgar · 05-30-2016, 09:55 PM

Thanks for sharing this Geno. Your writer's voice shines through well because of the elements of honesty and tenets of your personal life being brought to light. My favorite bar was this one:

shit that needs to be wrote with a pen, open, closer to death
older, ghost in the flesh, demons dont age, growing in depth
^The rhyme scheme was notable here, nice acceleration.

I've felt emptiness and solitude recently too so I could identify with this. It was a good venting piece. Keep writing.

big baby · 06-01-2016, 10:22 PM

Will edit with feed

Exis · 06-04-2016, 06:59 AM

The beautiful girlfriend that doesn't know who I am resonated with me, Idk why been single for a minute lol...the emotion is nice...had some real good multies in this which I always appreciate when they isn't forced...should collab again sometime.

Tight spit,

Stay upwards my friend.

Geno · 09-27-2021, 07:47 PM

Forgot i wrote this. So many pieces on here i just dont remember and never saved

White LGI · 09-27-2021, 08:29 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by White Earl

Forgot i wrote this. So many pieces on here i just dont remember and never saved

It is forgettable

Geno · 09-28-2021, 06:34 AM

Lol, probably is

veritas · 09-28-2021, 08:51 AM

This was dope tbh. Liked the girlfriend line.

05-27-2016, 10:37 PM	#1
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,325 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036758	Emptyness So many steps, to many thoughts that roll through my head This hole in my chest, feels bigger than ever, im sober again shit that needs to be wrote with a pen, open, closer to death older, ghost in the flesh, demons dont age, growing in depth ive got a beautiful girlfriend, that doesnt know who i am That doesnt know i pretend, im not nuts -when i totally am i got scars in my heart, its been broke, it never totally mends it takes its toll in the end, tense, a roller coaster of rage if this ride doesnt stop soon, ill jump towards my only escape living life like im only insane, lonely, ill just throw it away in a room full of people, like theres no one that stayed Like nobody here really knows im controlling the pain all this shit in my head hurts, worse when i hold it at bey iono what to say, or how to convey words in emotional ways im an ocean of hate, that keeps splashing over with waves that my fiance thinks laughing overs ok, not knowing its fake not knowing this face, only smiles when i know its on stage when i know that explaining, is what ill do when its ok to say it when i know its the safest, knowing, i dont know when that day is __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

06-04-2016, 06:59 AM	#5
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	The beautiful girlfriend that doesn't know who I am resonated with me, Idk why been single for a minute lol...the emotion is nice...had some real good multies in this which I always appreciate when they isn't forced...should collab again sometime. Tight spit, Stay upwards my friend. Last edited by Exis; 06-04-2016 at 07:02 AM.

09-27-2021, 07:47 PM	#6
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,325 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036758	Forgot i wrote this. So many pieces on here i just dont remember and never saved __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

09-28-2021, 06:34 AM	#8
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,325 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036758	Lol, probably is __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

05-27-2016, 11:46 PM	#2
Quarter O Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2015 Posts: 109 Rep Power: 0	Dope

05-30-2016, 09:55 PM	#3
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604317	Thanks for sharing this Geno. Your writer's voice shines through well because of the elements of honesty and tenets of your personal life being brought to light. My favorite bar was this one: shit that needs to be wrote with a pen, open, closer to death older, ghost in the flesh, demons dont age, growing in depth ^The rhyme scheme was notable here, nice acceleration. I've felt emptiness and solitude recently too so I could identify with this. It was a good venting piece. Keep writing.