Swerve 0-1 vs Mr. J 0-1 {Swerve wins}

Hush · 07-13-2015, 01:00 PM

Netcees Battle League Season VIII

Rules

Due Dates:

Verses are due Thursday, July 16th 2015 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions are 24 hours

Line Limit:

Minimum of 12, maximum of 18
If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first

For additional Rules refer to rule thread

First to 5, win by at least two votes

@Swerve 1-1 vs @Mr. J 1-1

Mr. J · 07-15-2015, 02:26 AM

You might be full of heart, but that hype got you frail blood
I'll play bullet pharm, & have this iron fully embrace ya lungs

don't lie dawg, if you a killa, that outline is mixed with riddles
when that sky fall you ain't Javier Bardem you more like Chicken Little

so chill Jody, I'll have baby boy witness what makes karma sweet
ya bars is weak, s'why I'm all in your crib puttin' your baby mom's to sleep

talk is cheap, this that mercenary vibe pussy. let the lead smoke
ya girl know the type when Im right in call it a literal death stroke

basically...I'm a fem killer riding on a very sliiiiiiiiiiiim budget
direct Ben Stiller, rubbin' ya girls walls soundin' like Chip Douglas

that's the tooth fairy...I'll use your grill for the monetary figures
your dentist is HOF worthy when he inducts you an honorary flipper

12 should be good...

@Swerve

Swerve · 07-16-2015, 08:15 AM

No ext needed...

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mr.J

Swerve was cool too
but I feel like had he left out the ace in the hole & came with something different it would be evenly matched

Don't deserve to vote on my battles, homie I'll smoke ya,
You told me to leave out the Ace in the hole...so I'll replace it with a Joker.
And your name - its stupid. Fool you a fraud,
Help you kill yourself as a tribute to the suicide squad.
Shots'll ring, I got guns to pierce armor,
Bullets graze this sheep more often than farmers with Alzheimer's.
They say you're getting better, but we see this g fail,
Your advances get ignored worse than Bags' resignation email.
Ya girl's my whore, she fucking me on the side,
I've been digging that hole longer than all of El Chapo's people combined.
I'll decapitate dude, leave your vision all blurred scrub,
Use your organs like a garnish that Lama the lime would approve of.

Ace · 07-16-2015, 01:15 PM

pharm was simple.. chicken little was nice but a lil corny lol.. baby boy was wack.. death stroke was meh.. chip douglas was funny but execution was weird.. wasnt feelin the closer.. verse had a smooth flow tho
besides the opener the rest of swerve's lines were either ok or good to me.. with the bags n el chapo lines as the highlights.. he gets it based on consistancy

v- Swerve

Hush · 07-17-2015, 11:22 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mr. J

You might be full of heart, but that hype got you frail blood
I'll play bullet pharm, & have this iron fully embrace ya lungs
aight but this light man
don't lie dawg, if you a killa, that outline is mixed with riddles
when that sky fall you ain't Javier Bardem you more like Chicken Little
nice this is pretty slick man
so chill Jody, I'll have baby boy witness what makes karma sweet
ya bars is weak, s'why I'm all in your crib puttin' your baby mom's to sleep
eh
talk is cheap, this that mercenary vibe pussy. let the lead smoke
ya girl know the type when Im right in call it a literal death stroke
ok cool
basically...I'm a fem killer riding on a very sliiiiiiiiiiiim budget
direct Ben Stiller, rubbin' ya girls walls soundin' like Chip Douglas
vague, something about mary?
that's the tooth fairy...I'll use your grill for the monetary figures
your dentist is HOF worthy when he inducts you an honorary flipper
eh so so
12 should be good...

@Swerve

Quote:

Originally Posted by Swerve

No ext needed...

Don't deserve to vote on my battles, homie I'll smoke ya,
You told me to leave out the Ace in the hole...so I'll replace it with a Joker.
eh not feeling this
And your name - its stupid. Fool you a fraud,
Help you kill yourself as a tribute to the suicide squad.
ok... jab tho
Shots'll ring, I got guns to pierce armor,
Bullets graze this sheep more often than farmers with Alzheimer's.
haha ok..u should of called him a follower in ur setup, but the punch was crispy
They say you're getting better, but we see this g fail,
Your advances get ignored worse than Bags' resignation email.
eh this should of been done last week
Ya girl's my whore, she fucking me on the side,
I've been digging that hole longer than all of El Chapo's people combined.
fire
I'll decapitate dude, leave your vision all blurred scrub,
Use your organs like a garnish that Lama the lime would approve of.
ok

vote swerve

Useless · 07-17-2015, 11:25 AM

Bullet pharm was decent but nothing special. Chicken little was cool. Wasn't feeling baby moms to sleep, not a great flip. Again death stroke was OK but kinda played. Had to Google Ben stiller/chip Douglas nbthat always takes away from the line for me but it was worded weird too but once I got the concept n reread it it was decent, but still. Didn't like the closer.

This was simple but I thought it was OK. Again this was super simple. Alzheimer's was cool. Bags email was nice. Seen a better el chapo line by credit this week iirc but this one was nice too. Again Joe metts had a better lama the line bar this week but yours was still aite.

This was a good battle overall. Both verses were smooth and easy reads. But ibthink swerve got it with better wording and a cleaner verse. Mr j had a good verse too tho.

V. Swerve

Pinot Grij · 07-17-2015, 12:43 PM

Swerve won this on swag and execution alone, but none of the lines really stuck out for me.

Mr. J had that Chicken Little line, which was good wordplay, but the diss itself is pretty light. Other than that, it was a lot of "I fucked your girl" lines with no variance.

Swerve, I guess the Bags line and Alzheimer's lines were the nicest.. it was just a more consistent and constant hitting offering than J.

Vote -- Swerve

Cred · 07-18-2015, 12:34 AM

basically...I'm a fem killer riding on a very sliiiiiiiiiiiim budget
direct Ben Stiller, rubbin' ya girls walls soundin' like Chip Douglas

Vs

And your name - its stupid. Fool you a fraud,
Help you kill yourself as a tribute to the suicide squad.
Ya girl's my whore, she fucking me on the side,
I've been digging that hole longer than all of El Chapo's people combined.

Ok battle here. Seems like swerves shaking off rust & mr j jus needs to word his concepts a lil more harsher. Swerve takes this one, chapo line was nice.

Vote/ Swerve

Allen Knight · 07-18-2015, 01:00 AM

Shots'll ring, I got guns to pierce armor,
Bullets graze this sheep more often than farmers with Alzheimer's.
Ya girl's my whore, she fucking me on the side,
I've been digging that hole longer than all of El Chapo's people combined.

Vs

don't lie dawg, if you a killa, that outline is mixed with riddles
when that sky fall you ain't Javier Bardem you more like Chicken Little

v/swerve....pretty decent one, mr j had a dope ass bar. but overall swerve
was more consistent...el chapo line was flames, props to both, enjoyed the read.

07-13-2015, 01:00 PM	#1
Hush NJ Devil Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,042 Battle Record: Who Cares Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Rep Power: 84181417	Swerve 0-1 vs Mr. J 0-1 {Swerve wins} Netcees Battle League Season VIII Rules Due Dates: Verses are due Thursday, July 16th 2015 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday Battles that lack votes may close later. One sided battles may get closed early. Extensions are 24 hours Line Limit: Minimum of 12, maximum of 18 If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first For additional Rules refer to rule thread First to 5, win by at least two votes @Swerve 1-1 vs @Mr. J 1-1 __________________ Bed stuy fly Bushwick sick East ny walk

07-15-2015, 02:26 AM	#2
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,025 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349678	You might be full of heart, but that hype got you frail blood I'll play bullet pharm, & have this iron fully embrace ya lungs don't lie dawg, if you a killa, that outline is mixed with riddles when that sky fall you ain't Javier Bardem you more like Chicken Little so chill Jody, I'll have baby boy witness what makes karma sweet ya bars is weak, s'why I'm all in your crib puttin' your baby mom's to sleep talk is cheap, this that mercenary vibe pussy. let the lead smoke ya girl know the type when Im right in call it a literal death stroke basically...I'm a fem killer riding on a very sliiiiiiiiiiiim budget direct Ben Stiller, rubbin' ya girls walls soundin' like Chip Douglas that's the tooth fairy...I'll use your grill for the monetary figures your dentist is HOF worthy when he inducts you an honorary flipper 12 should be good... @Swerve __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you Last edited by Mr. J; 07-15-2015 at 04:32 AM.

07-17-2015, 12:43 PM	#7
Pinot Grij Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 863 Battle Record: 23-19 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night 2 - Write Week V - Netcees Battle League (2x) - Winter Topical II - 1-2 Punch league Rep Power: 29195060	Swerve won this on swag and execution alone, but none of the lines really stuck out for me. Mr. J had that Chicken Little line, which was good wordplay, but the diss itself is pretty light. Other than that, it was a lot of "I fucked your girl" lines with no variance. Swerve, I guess the Bags line and Alzheimer's lines were the nicest.. it was just a more consistent and constant hitting offering than J. Vote -- Swerve __________________ Topical C.R.E.A.M.

07-16-2015, 01:15 PM	#4
Ace The Bad Guy Join Date: Jun 2015 Posts: 115 Battle Record: 2-1 Rep Power: 8304532	pharm was simple.. chicken little was nice but a lil corny lol.. baby boy was wack.. death stroke was meh.. chip douglas was funny but execution was weird.. wasnt feelin the closer.. verse had a smooth flow tho besides the opener the rest of swerve's lines were either ok or good to me.. with the bags n el chapo lines as the highlights.. he gets it based on consistancy v- Swerve

07-17-2015, 11:25 AM	#6
Useless 100% Join Date: Jul 2015 Posts: 1,803 Battle Record: 9-12 Champed - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 0	Bullet pharm was decent but nothing special. Chicken little was cool. Wasn't feeling baby moms to sleep, not a great flip. Again death stroke was OK but kinda played. Had to Google Ben stiller/chip Douglas nbthat always takes away from the line for me but it was worded weird too but once I got the concept n reread it it was decent, but still. Didn't like the closer. This was simple but I thought it was OK. Again this was super simple. Alzheimer's was cool. Bags email was nice. Seen a better el chapo line by credit this week iirc but this one was nice too. Again Joe metts had a better lama the line bar this week but yours was still aite. This was a good battle overall. Both verses were smooth and easy reads. But ibthink swerve got it with better wording and a cleaner verse. Mr j had a good verse too tho. V. Swerve

07-18-2015, 12:34 AM	#8
Cred The Biggest Join Date: Jan 2015 Posts: 3,254 Battle Record: 67-32 Accomplishments - Gun Bar King Champed - Fight Night 3 - Fight Night 10 - Fight Night 12 - Battle Arena League Rep Power: 85899380	basically...I'm a fem killer riding on a very sliiiiiiiiiiiim budget direct Ben Stiller, rubbin' ya girls walls soundin' like Chip Douglas Vs And your name - its stupid. Fool you a fraud, Help you kill yourself as a tribute to the suicide squad. Ya girl's my whore, she fucking me on the side, I've been digging that hole longer than all of El Chapo's people combined. Ok battle here. Seems like swerves shaking off rust & mr j jus needs to word his concepts a lil more harsher. Swerve takes this one, chapo line was nice. Vote/ Swerve

07-18-2015, 01:00 AM	#9
Allen Knight The Bad Guys. Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 9,166 Battle Record: 106-34 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - Key to Greatness I - BA Cypher Tournament - Tag Team Tournament I - Fight Night LXXVI - Time to Kill V - Fight Night LXXX - 1-2 Punch League - Fight Night Cypher II - Key Grand Prix IV - NBL Cypher (7x) - Throwdown Cypher - Netcees Battle League (2x) - BA Cypher III - Fight Night 1 - Tag Team Tournament V Rep Power: 85899398	Shots'll ring, I got guns to pierce armor, Bullets graze this sheep more often than farmers with Alzheimer's. Ya girl's my whore, she fucking me on the side, I've been digging that hole longer than all of El Chapo's people combined. Vs don't lie dawg, if you a killa, that outline is mixed with riddles when that sky fall you ain't Javier Bardem you more like Chicken Little v/swerve....pretty decent one, mr j had a dope ass bar. but overall swerve was more consistent...el chapo line was flames, props to both, enjoyed the read.