10-08-2016, 04:41 PM | #1 |
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Battle Arena Tournament - Schadenfreude vs Slechtn
Verse 1
Run him over when I'm backing up the whip with intentions of wrecking this coward When His family find his body under the trunk, it's not fred flintstone taking a shower. I'll place the tool right up his mouthpiece to the point that he can't handle it Rest my case & put this scrub in a bag ...that's a toothbrush travel kit. I'm a street slugger & I'll prove it when I grab a bat to crack his head in order the bat'll keep goin' to his head, over & over more than war veterans with PTS Disorder If he tries to cross me, he'll get The Works so better hope or pray I'm leaving it's too late to save himself, ...he's that layperson that's always tardy to the Opus Dei Meetings Holding him & his wifey hostage will cause craze & the media following me won't stop till the paris tied up & i'm stealing the spotlight like the kim k robbery Verse 2 Just call it quits or duck this, either way u’ll lose kid, cuz whether it’d be 10 mins or a whole data plan, it’s never a full gig. Shit’s a no-go, pole ready for it to jump, the tool a pogo this a new Ruge & it’s cocked, riding ‘round to put U in a box - Uber logo. Keyboard Killa, shooting shit online ain’t nothing to brag fag while I’ll always apply the Pound ‘fore I type a word, that’s a hashtag. Gun bar? Gun ownership’s not some’n this fraud can claim get to talking BANG, stick w/ me every step of the way, it’s a walking cane. Out yo gotdamn mind to give these sick thots homes Captain Save’Em took more bitches off the track than a Kid’s Bop song. |
10-08-2016, 04:50 PM | #2 |
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10-08-2016, 10:24 PM | #3 |
39 NS, lost in votes once
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Dope battle. I'll be back.
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10-09-2016, 08:20 AM | #4 |
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Dope shit but that hashtag and cane lines were nasty
I got verse 2
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10-09-2016, 11:21 AM | #5 |
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Verse 1
That toothbrush shit was nasty tbh n that kim k joint was decent but seen so many it kinda had me on edge mentioning it. Verse 2 Uber logo was fire n that walking can was correct I was fuckin with both bangers heavy. This was actually a nice battle here but Im givin the edge to verse 2 personal preference. |
10-09-2016, 11:33 PM | #6 |
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I liked the opener in verse one. Other than that the bars were wordy to me. PtSd coulda been dope but was way too wordy on the actual punch.
Second had a couple bangers. Walking cane n uber logo were cool. Second verse had less misses imo n was worded much cleaner. V second verse |
10-10-2016, 09:11 AM | #7 |
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1 - Fred flinstone cool concept could've used better tie in, rest case scrub in bag was ok, battle was nice, didn't like Opus Dei, Paris Kim K concept gets an ok only Bc it's current event.
2 - gig is aight, uber logo cool, stick w me every step nice, pound hastage nice, kids bop song I don't get the reference but I get the concept Nice battle here. Pleasantly surprised. After reading verse 1 I thought no way this gets beat but verse 2 was a bit more consistent & worded well. Verse 2
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10-10-2016, 12:44 PM | #8 |
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10-10-2016, 07:41 PM | #9 |
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I'll place the tool right up his mouthpiece to the point that he can't handle it
Rest my case & put this scrub in a bag ...that's a toothbrush travel kit. I'm a street slugger & I'll prove it when I grab a bat to crack his head in order the bat'll keep goin' to his head, over & over more than war veterans with PTS Disorder Vs Shit’s a no-go, pole ready for it to jump, the tool a pogo this a new Ruge & it’s cocked, riding ‘round to put U in a box - Uber logo. Keyboard Killa, shooting shit online ain’t nothing to brag fag while I’ll always apply the Pound ‘fore I type a word, that’s a hashtag. Gun bar? Gun ownership’s not some’n this fraud can claim get to talking BANG, stick w/ me every step of the way, it’s a walking cane. V/Verse 2, this was a good battle both had some good shit, i think verse 2 had one more banger, Props to both. |
10-10-2016, 08:28 PM | #10 |
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Verse 1
I'll place the tool right up his mouthpiece to the point that he can't handle it Rest my case & put this scrub in a bag ...that's a toothbrush travel kit. Verse 2 Keyboard Killa, shooting shit online ain’t nothing to brag fag while I’ll always apply the Pound ‘fore I type a word, that’s a hashtag. Gun bar? Gun ownership’s not some’n this fraud can claim get to talking BANG, stick w/ me every step of the way, it’s a walking cane. nice battle right here, both had some fresh concepts. only thing that really separated them was I felt verse 1 was a touch too wordy at times. Verse 2 came off real crisp which def made punches hit harder and walking stick was illy. good battle gents v/ Verse 2 |
10-10-2016, 11:21 PM | #11 |
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i liked bat'll keep going to his head
that was dope verse two had a lot more going on tho hashtag and cane lines were dope v/2 |
10-11-2016, 01:35 AM | #12 |
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the first four lines from the first verse were slick
I thought everything else was decent, didnt like the closer it felt like a stretch for me even though it just happened. the second verse was pretty slick, I fuck with the Uber line hash tag line could have been utilized better imo. didnt really enjoy that closer either..the cane line was smooth. the 2nd verse had a smoother flow for me... the first verse could have taken this but I feel the 2nd delivered some memorable lines although I fucks with that flintstone line...good play on that
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10-14-2016, 02:52 PM | #13 |
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Run him over when I'm backing up the whip with intentions of wrecking this coward
When His family find his body under the trunk, it's not fred flintstone taking a shower. I'll place the tool right up his mouthpiece to the point that he can't handle it Rest my case & put this scrub in a bag ...that's a toothbrush travel kit. I'm a street slugger & I'll prove it when I grab a bat to crack his head in order the bat'll keep goin' to his head, over & over more than war veterans with PTS Disorder vs Shit’s a no-go, pole ready for it to jump, the tool a pogo this a new Ruge & it’s cocked, riding ‘round to put U in a box - Uber logo. Keyboard Killa, shooting shit online ain’t nothing to brag fag while I’ll always apply the Pound ‘fore I type a word, that’s a hashtag. Gun bar? Gun ownership’s not some’n this fraud can claim get to talking BANG, stick w/ me every step of the way, it’s a walking cane. could go either way both had fire quotables tbh gotta go with the one who had a better execution here mvgt schad
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07-02-2017, 07:28 PM | #14 |
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I won, why was this never closed?
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07-05-2017, 06:53 AM | #15 |
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lmao im late seeing this shit and dont suppose it matters now but didnt you have a line like that Flintstone shit @Hush?
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10-06-2017, 04:36 PM | #16 |
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Both had spectacular bars and came hard at each other
I LIKE verse two more Vote verse 2 |
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