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Old 07-10-2013, 05:44 PM   #1
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Bear witness, you’re seeing an animal attack, this free’s off the heezy
Known for going in, but I’m great outdoors too, check how I’ll leave this scene grizzly
I space out and think of some godly shit, I’m wild and ruthless
Get defouled and booted…like “now remove em, and let me finish my bowel movement”
Get the picture? Cause now it’s crucial, get ready for conflict
I bomb scripts, you’re a pest and I’m set to blow, this is my final tick
Ya’ll know I’m the man with frees…you busy yahself with saying how you don’t suck
And I’m thinking, “you got too much time on yah hands…and knees”
My cities are monstrous, this is an onslaught, like the ones taught at Montauk
They say my punches warped, huh?
I’ll time travel and my fist will meet your face before the force does
I’m wilding heavy, style is deadly, take cover..thats what your girl does with her face down in the chevy
I cum to a red light and she stops, the light turns green and I say “bitch, that was the warm up, now I’m ready”
You don’t want it, here I’ll give it to you, I’m a seer in queer removal
Dear boo boo, I’m the shit, pass it along to the rest of your peers and groups too
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Old 07-10-2013, 06:27 PM   #3
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@Ric Solar Flair


I just to the clinic and keyed this up to make it a show



Who is he Kiddin'? W/ all his writtens, a phase of elementary,
A king of all kings , my bars confine the most dangerous; penitentiary.
A bear on is hein ready to disguise W/ scars and bruises,
Twisted metal, a rebel I delivery an onslaught, start callin' me toothless.
I get spazzed...
Fuck your pretensive acts,
I'll swivel the axe and cut you in half
Deliver ya ass off to the media class,
Enshrine the bitch in you- a double standard delivered to your parents for cash.
Fuck a mask- I'm the type to aim while loading the bags,
I'm good with the hands
while you an Adam eaton fan
Even my best bet, u can't even handle being a man.
Dr.doom I'm always a threat at ya door,
I mean.. u hard as rock but torch bitches and more,
You stretch ur way to existence but ur invisible at the core,
Ur a comical act that can never win alone- the fantastic four.
Fuk rougers and AK's my fist'll vaca where u wish u could see.
A nightmare on elm street I'll Freddy Krueger ur dreams.
We both be kings of our own terms but I'll give u this work- we are not equal,
I'm a god that others read up on, while you a god of Hebrew...
.. Someone that wasn't believed in- not even by his own people.
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Old 07-10-2013, 10:10 PM   #4
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Opening but two voting links each please @Ric Solar Flair @Storyteller

some flex/and topical battles could use votes if you're more interested in that
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Old 07-10-2013, 10:15 PM   #5
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Old 07-12-2013, 04:19 AM   #8
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I just to the clinic and keyed this up to make it a show



Who is he Kiddin'? W/ all his writtens, a phase of elementary,
A king of all kings , my bars confine the most dangerous; penitentiary.
A bear on is hein ready to disguise W/ scars and bruises,
Twisted metal, a rebel I delivery an onslaught, start callin' me toothless.
nice visuals/double entrendres combined with strong flow and sprinkled with the swag I like to see
I get spazzed...
Fuck your pretensive acts,
I'll swivel the axe and cut you in half
Deliver ya ass off to the media class,
Enshrine the bitch in you- a double standard delivered to your parents for cash.
I liked that you changed schemes but I didn't think the content had the flow or swag to pull it off sorry. Nice ideas but just didn't work for me
Fuck a mask- I'm the type to aim while loading the bags,
I'm good with the hands
while you an Adam eaton fan
Even my best bet, u can't even handle being a man.
Dr.doom I'm always a threat at ya door,
I mean.. u hard as rock but torch bitches and more,
You stretch ur way to existence but ur invisible at the core,
Ur a comical act that can never win alone- the fantastic four.
lol pretty cool stuff in here, liked the concept/theme here was creative and paid off, nice flow but lacking in internals I think
Fuk rougers and AK's my fist'll vaca where u wish u could see.
A nightmare on elm street I'll Freddy Krueger ur dreams.
We both be kings of our own terms but I'll give u this work- we are not equal,
I'm a god that others read up on, while you a god of Hebrew...
.. Someone that wasn't believed in- not even by his own people.
hahahahaa what a close, better flow, better swag and a great hit at the end as the cherry on top
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Bear witness, you’re seeing an animal attack, this free’s off the heezy
Known for going in, but I’m great outdoors too, check how I’ll leave this scene grizzly
lol liked the concept to this, very nice, creative, clever double entrendre
I space out and think of some godly shit, I’m wild and ruthless
Get defouled and booted…like “now remove em, and let me finish my bowel movement”
Get the picture? Cause now it’s crucial, get ready for conflict
I bomb scripts, you’re a pest and I’m set to blow, this is my final tick
Story teller came well with what he did, but your killing it in the flow department right now, this shits rollin off the tounge son
Ya’ll know I’m the man with frees…you busy yahself with saying how you don’t suck
And I’m thinking, “you got too much time on yah hands…and knees”
lol
My cities are monstrous, this is an onslaught, like the ones taught at Montauk
They say my punches warped, huh?
I’ll time travel and my fist will meet your face before the force does
I’m wilding heavy, style is deadly, take cover..thats what your girl does with her face down in the chevy
I cum to a red light and she stops, the light turns green and I say “bitch, that was the warm up, now I’m ready”
You don’t want it, here I’ll give it to you, I’m a seer in queer removal
Dear boo boo, I’m the shit, pass it along to the rest of your peers and groups too
lol this was a hit and miss sort of end, liked the whole light cum shiz am, didn't like the force shit or the very end line, the flow/scheme got a bit tired by this point with mostly one word rhymes, but overall this was a solid drop

Tough shout, I think in the the Flow department I would def edge it to chyeeh but I think his scheme become too obvious by the end. Think the swag and hits etc was more obvious in rics but then I liked the more complex ideas of storyteller.... You were probably equal on kicking the dirt to opponents face...

Im going to have to vote....

Chyeeeh, I think the fact that is flow felt so much more on point cant be overlooked, Story def beats him in any other category but it by such a slim margin, where as chyeeeh really hit the nail on the head with flow for most of this...



Vote Ric Solar Flair, @Storyteller this should be a drawn out voting process, I don't see much in it, I hope my vote explained that well enough
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This was cool... Thought u both could a came better tho..

Chyeahh - mad swag n decent flow I was feeling this whole under the covers/green light sht n felt the time travel line as lotb.. Flow was on for most part a few shakes tho..

Story - ur flow was pretty solid, swag was decent for u... I liked the fantastic for line.. Ur flow was slightly better then chyeahh to me, however Snf is suppoa d to be more bolstering ur self then dissing opponent, so I felt some of the lines should'a been approached differently

close battle typically I favor flow, however since only marginally going to story, I gotta go w chyeahh on swag bc story kinda approached some of his concepts wrong imo... Pretty close tho, good battle

v/chyeaah

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Old 07-12-2013, 01:44 PM   #10
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Old 07-12-2013, 02:35 PM   #13
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But two more votes please people
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Chyeah was ok. Pretty smooth wording, some cool concepts. Storyteller's was kind of bland and some clunky wording threw me off. I understand that it was a key, but Chyeah's verse felt more polished and more swag and flow'y-ier.

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This was tough to call

For an snf battle I couldn't find much swag or mostly flow anywhere tbh

Ric had more of each by a small degree though
Story was clearly rittled with typos cause he went in off the phone, which I could failry easily enough sort out.. but I think chyeahhh edged this by a hair. Not a very long hair either.

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