WEEK 8: Dave 4-3 VS INF 4-3 DAVE WINS

[UPN Zuch]

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[evaD]

10

[Saint]

X2 this season 10 works

[evaD]

I’ll post in the morning

[evaD]

You wanna avenge ur last L well a decent starts what we’ll need to see
But if INF hit the ground running I’ve just picked him off as he flees the scene
I’m a trailblazer. If someone said he’s dope I wanna know whom?
Wack faggot wouldn’t pull up trees in James’ tomato grow room
Your rhymes are overly complex bullshit, but it isn’t clever in any kinda way
When I flip rhymes it’s money.. we can’t make head nor tails of what you’re tryna say
I’m in the top punches every week.. you haven’t made it since.. NEVER
In fact if you wanna see inf in it you’re gonna be waiting around forever
I can’t call em good but I’ll say motivational if it’ll help
Those concepts got me wanting to read up.. on the fastest way to kill myself

[UPN Zuch]

@INF I’m closing this in two hours.

[Saint]

Lil bro follows in Zuchs footsteps but lack wins in perspective
Easy to use a Sun Angle when he's in a Sticks Shadow w/ no sense of direction
Goin pics vs Des proved shopping shades needs better vision
Being broke Hertz. Them lower Frame Rates couldn't display a Fresher Image
User doesn't move too well.. critiquing lines a minor nuisance
Ya ask for Joint Support to "go over shit" & he's NEVER Inclined to do it
Homo actin straight. secret project so strange & it's spooky
Ur Philadelphia Experiment is modeling life after Tom Hank's in the movie
Shove the piece in Dave's mouth forces me to clasp the trigger
Surprise w/ another Ring... a couple light his roof up like a Romantic Dinner

[Scout]

Evad

You wanna avenge ur last L well a decent starts what we’ll need to see
But if INF hit the ground running I’ve just picked him off as he flees the scene

Nothing really worked after the opener. Love your creativity, but this week seemed winged. Infinite works but even I've seen it done before on him


Inf

Lil bro follows in Zuchs footsteps but lack wins in perspective
Easy to use a Sun Angle when he's in a Sticks Shadow w/ no sense of direction
Goin pics vs Des proved shopping shades needs better vision
Being broke Hertz. Them lower Frame Rates couldn't display a Fresher Image
Shove the piece in Dave's mouth forces me to clasp the trigger
Surprise w/ another Ring... a couple light his roof up like a Romantic Dinner

Hated all the caps, but also somewhat agree with it because a lot goes over heads..and more would without them
It's really no different than the use of bold, italics, rhyme hyphens, quotation marks, etc.
But all that should be the past and we should be smarter in 2020
Or maybe I should take notes?
Anyway, you did more than enough to win this one. Tbh the difference in preference here is night and day though, it seems. So who knows

Voting Inf

[Coop]

evaD

You wanna avenge ur last L well a decent starts what we’ll need to see
But if INF hit the ground running I’ve just picked him off as he flees the scene
Ok
I’m a trailblazer. If someone said he’s dope I wanna know whom?
Wack faggot wouldn’t pull up trees in James’ tomato grow room
Wasnt feelin it
Your rhymes are overly complex bullshit, but it isn’t clever in any kinda way
When I flip rhymes it’s money.. we can’t make head nor tails of what you’re tryna say
Clever
I’m in the top punches every week.. you haven’t made it since.. NEVER
In fact if you wanna see inf in it you’re gonna be waiting around forever
Ok, like the np. Doper if true
I can’t call em good but I’ll say motivational if it’ll help
Those concepts got me wanting to read up.. on the fastest way to kill myself
Too basic

Couple hits, couple misses. Flip rhymes was probably the best one, and resonated more after reading infs verse lmao A solid 6.5/10.


VS

Inf


Lil bro follows in Zuchs footsteps but lack wins in perspective
Easy to use a Sun Angle when he's in a Sticks Shadow w/ no sense of direction
Hmmm. I like
Goin pics vs Des proved shopping shades needs better vision
Being broke Hertz. Them lower Frame Rates couldn't display a Fresher Image
A little too much going on
User doesn't move too well.. critiquing lines a minor nuisance
Ya ask for Joint Support to "go over shit" & he's NEVER Inclined to do it
Not feelin the concept
Homo actin straight. secret project so strange & it's spooky
Ur Philadelphia Experiment is modeling life after Tom Hank's in the movie
Great, now I gotta go look some shit up..... Ok kinda funny but kind of a weird reference to tie in the punch. "Your philadelphia experiment"... like, no one says that
Shove the piece in Dave's mouth forces me to clasp the trigger
Surprise w/ another Ring... a couple light his roof up like a Romantic Dinner
Above avg gun bar


Kinda tough to judge. I like the creativity, but some bars were just a little overdone. And those caps gotta go. 6.5/10




Your rhymes are overly complex bullshit, but it isn’t clever in any kinda way
When I flip rhymes it’s money.. we can’t make head nor tails of what you’re tryna say
I’m in the top punches every week.. you haven’t made it since.. NEVER
In fact if you wanna see inf in it you’re gonna be waiting around forever

VS

Lil bro follows in Zuchs footsteps but lack wins in perspective
Easy to use a Sun Angle when he's in a Sticks Shadow w/ no sense of direction

I got evaD in quatables, then Romantic Dinner > Ground Running >>>>>hertz > read up = philly

Wtf this is close. Usually when it's close I give the edge to the person who's more clever, which in this case was Inf by a mile. But evaD's bars being relatively more simplistic didn't hurt him, and the 2 v 1 in quotables will be the slight edge in this one.

Vote: evaD

[fraze]

Originally Posted by evaD

You wanna avenge ur last L well a decent starts what we’ll need to see
But if INF hit the ground running I’ve just picked him off as he flees the scene
ok. a little light but still cool
I’m a trailblazer. If someone said he’s dope I wanna know whom?
Wack faggot wouldn’t pull up trees in James’ tomato grow room
wording is nice but i have no clue wtf james is
Your rhymes are overly complex bullshit, but it isn’t clever in any kinda way
When I flip rhymes it’s money.. we can’t make head nor tails of what you’re tryna say
this is ok
I’m in the top punches every week.. you haven’t made it since.. NEVER
In fact if you wanna see inf in it you’re gonna be waiting around forever
nice wp. liked this. wording is nice too
I can’t call em good but I’ll say motivational if it’ll help
Those concepts got me wanting to read up.. on the fastest way to kill myself
not feeling this

Quotes: hit the ground running, head or tails, inf in it,
Close: n/a

Couple lines missed to me but still a nice read, you have smooth wording.

Originally Posted by INF

Lil bro follows in Zuchs footsteps but lack wins in perspective
Easy to use a Sun Angle when he's in a Sticks Shadow w/ no sense of direction
concept is cool, but rhyme and wording are a little forced.
Goin pics vs Des proved shopping shades needs better vision
Being broke Hertz. Them lower Frame Rates couldn't display a Fresher Image
like the concept. wording hurts you a little but i'll give you this one
User doesn't move too well.. critiquing lines a minor nuisance
Ya ask for Joint Support to "go over shit" & he's NEVER Inclined to do it
not feeling this
Homo actin straight. secret project so strange & it's spooky
Ur Philadelphia Experiment is modeling life after Tom Hank's in the movie
this strikes me as a weird thing to say about someone
Shove the piece in Dave's mouth forces me to clasp the trigger
Surprise w/ another Ring... a couple light his roof up like a Romantic Dinner
not feeling this

Quotes: low frame rates
Close: sun angle

I like the creativity but I think you need really crisp wording for some of the concepts you're using to work. If you're going for more complex ideas the easier you make it for readers to follow your train of thought the less chance you lose them along the way. You do a good job of using setup to lay the ground work, just need to work on using wording to stick the landing. I like your style tho man, keep doing your thing.

Vote: Dave Dave wins with better execution and wording but INF dropped a solid verse. INF had more creative ideas but Dave executed on his concepts smoothly enough to take this pretty comfortably.

[Wanderer]

Dave

Hit the ground running was cool
Top punches / infinite was dope to me
Heads nor tails was an almost..

The first 2 I quoted were the standouts. Not the best verse I’ve seen from you. However, it was all smooth and read well

Inf

Sun angles was cool
Romantic dinner was cool

Inf your creativity is crazy and this verse was a better one from you but they were the only two I was feeling. I can’t get over your wording at times.. particularly set ups. It’s like sometimes they just don’t make sense grammatically and are forced to either rhyme, be short or tie in with your punch.

I think this was a close battle but on preference I’m giving the edge to v/evaD

[Mac]

You wanna avenge ur last L well a decent starts what we’ll need to see
But if INF hit the ground running I’ve just picked him off as he flees the scene
okk

I’m a trailblazer. If someone said he’s dope I wanna know whom?
Wack faggot wouldn’t pull up trees in James’ tomato grow room
lol

Your rhymes are overly complex bullshit, but it isn’t clever in any kinda way
When I flip rhymes it’s money.. we can’t make head nor tails of what you’re tryna say
ehhhh a bit of a stretch

I’m in the top punches every week.. you haven’t made it since.. NEVER
In fact if you wanna see inf in it you’re gonna be waiting around forever
this was neattttt

I can’t call em good but I’ll say motivational if it’ll help
Those concepts got me wanting to read up.. on the fastest way to kill myself
ehh

vs.

Lil bro follows in Zuchs footsteps but lack wins in perspective
Easy to use a Sun Angle when he's in a Sticks Shadow w/ no sense of direction
not feeling this

Goin pics vs Des proved shopping shades needs better vision
Being broke Hertz. Them lower Frame Rates couldn't display a Fresher Image
ok concept but this lacks something

User doesn't move too well.. critiquing lines a minor nuisance
Ya ask for Joint Support to "go over shit" & he's NEVER Inclined to do it
cool

Homo actin straight. secret project so strange & it's spooky
Ur Philadelphia Experiment is modeling life after Tom Hank's in the movie
okk

Shove the piece in Dave's mouth forces me to clasp the trigger
Surprise w/ another Ring... a couple light his roof up like a Romantic Dinner
lol


got dave here with the infinite LOTB.. nice lil battle but I got dave here, Inf had some good concepts but I didn't dig the execution

v. evad

[UPN Zuch]

Dave one of my favorite writers.


With that said, he keyed this one. It’s not up to his level at all. I know you signed out and are busy and I get that. Thank you for showing up though. Some decent stuff but like I said, just not your standard.

INF opener was cool, your verse was structured well and you had some heat that wasn’t as complicated as normal.


Good battle guys. Sorry partner Dave.


Vote INF