03-30-2018, 11:08 PM | #1 |
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BLACK: AT EASE
let me
start it again. partially departed instead of arguing, depression sets like Artemis Rex talk me to death, speak at me with whispering hate i'd like to work it out but it's a little too late give me space. let me separate my digits and faces plenty o'fish swimming if you live in a lake simple games. body language, tonic/vodka and shame rocket to space, calm / persuasive is a powerful angle constant malaise, feeding Cleopatra lobster and steak trying to break a cycle set for centuries, wait what are you in essence? have we even a clue my canvas came pre-painted so i'm leaving it blue cry me 20 bathtub and we'll call it a wash lost in the fog of whatever we became after dark call your uber, smoke another Parliament ultra we're residuals of culture. what our fathers had told us was true in many senses. i've learnt to adapt analyze emotions tailor perfect reactions talking like my mannerism built for theatrics frantically scrolling for any momentary distraction emotive passion, stolen absent, repulsive bastard holding up with mona lisa frozen to mattress only half a masochist i'm mostly erratic cleanse myself in alcohol and smoky romanticism cope with my decisions like a man is supposed to handle with grace i handle in a manner morose petrify and memorize and write it in prose lock it in a safe and keep it quietly closed let it mold, desert snow, i've perfected the art of loving and rejecting only seconds apart color me with scars. marks i've earned to repent think of what i've said and feel a burn in your chest turn to the left. let the serpent collect, pay what you owe green grove, red rover, pollinated flower aroma model the flow - lobby a vote - still you're flying in coach i'm intercontinental flyer mileage dropping a post call me a trope, autumn and roses, i'm all the below panic-driven spiteful alcoholic alone natural symphonic in tone. gifted author who wrote nothing of substance but forgettable poems my conceptual level is like a decade beyond any achievement i've intercepted thus far kamikaze / protocol, subjective division either way it threatens the children. let it breathe blowing out the candles on my enemies, now rest in peace bottom-dwelling bandwidth like a centipede, allegedly there's challengers approaching in a silhouette screen manic and moronic and i'm sitting between at ease
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03-30-2018, 11:23 PM | #2 |
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this..... is a pure display of skills
cope with my decisions like a man is supposed to handle with grace i handle in a manner morose petrify and memorize and write it in prose lock it in a safe and keep it quietly closed let it mold, desert snow, i've perfected the art of loving and rejecting only seconds apart |
03-31-2018, 07:22 AM | #3 |
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Somehow some of my response for this thread ended up in your paychosis thread. Im sure you can tell it apart.
Btw paychosis was nuts. The tortured artist. She really did a number on ypu bro. Im sry man. I have one of these. Took me a couple years to legit get her out of my head and stop being so fucking depressed and shit. It was my first childs mom of course. We were together for 5 yrs. She shat, heavily, upon my grave. :( Ive been waiting for a new black piece man. Wish you would write more. Hope your endeavor with the publishings is going well bro. Im sure youll recieve great feedback with your work. Its brilliant. Pz
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for what its worth i think i meant this to be read in tandem with psychosis. so I'm shamelessly plugging both again because i'm here
thanks PS. i'd like to spend some time this week reading and commenting on lot of the work in here. i have a couple spare nights for the first time in a bit. if you are looking for feedback on one piece in particular, even if its old, please drop a link here. on some classic RTF shit.
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Well, you murdered this. I have no qualm or objection to any of it. Pure skills and lyrical prowess on display. It was emotive. Inspired. And collectively authentic. Robert frost meets Tupac in essence. Great read and another tally in the win column. Peace.
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