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Old 12-12-2017, 07:38 PM   #1
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Old 12-13-2017, 03:36 AM   #2
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lmao just watched on my way to work, good shit Inno

my verse last week was a metaphor for God creating the world in seven days.

God creating heaven and Earth (the enclosure to house the ants in), the sky (the roof with the latch) the dry land (the sand for its base) light (the candle facing a south-easterly window) the sun rises in the south east, you know? The water came from the tube in the roof that gave it the moisture the Ant Farm needed (water), he created life using those first two ants (our Adam and Eve) and then all the creatures that inhabit the world (the entire colony)

Inno was the closest to getting it I think!

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That candle line should of been more obvious to me I don’t how I missed it

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cool thanks for the props. I was psyched to go vs objective, I play by the competitive adage of "better opponents make you better".

question, to clarify: one of my glaring weaknesses (from what I'm gathering) is jumping, where like, I don't tie things together well (or... don't make it clear it's a jump) and I don't flesh out the story enough. would that be a good summary?

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cool thanks for the props. I was psyched to go vs objective, I play by the competitive adage of "better opponents make you better".

question, to clarify: one of my glaring weaknesses (from what I'm gathering) is jumping, where like, I don't tie things together well (or... don't make it clear it's a jump) and I don't flesh out the story enough. would that be a good summary?

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That’s basically what I was trying to convey.

Maybe you don’t do that in all your writing but it showed these 2 weeks. But again I think once you get the feel of what the voters look for. You’ll find a way to satisfy them as well as not compromise to much of your true writing.

@Lars and any other vet want to chime in?
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@Innovator Where are the season 8 archive? Where can i check the pent and Lars battle?
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cool thanks for the props. I was psyched to go vs objective, I play by the competitive adage of "better opponents make you better".

question, to clarify: one of my glaring weaknesses (from what I'm gathering) is jumping, where like, I don't tie things together well (or... don't make it clear it's a jump) and I don't flesh out the story enough. would that be a good summary?

figuring out what to improve on.
I think so too. I look upon you as a strong competitor tbh, I didn't expect to win this round so what I went for was a rather easy to follow story that wasn't too abstract with rather straight forward language and a story/plot that could possibly surpass the abstract and fluent language and flow.

There needs to be a certain fluent flow in the story as well, if the story is easy to follow and smooth in terms of how it progresses you can score a lot of points on that alone if it follows a common theme as well. The way I think of a jump is kind of similar to a punchline, the next sentence/paragraph feeds off of the last one and use context clues to string it all together, so when you go for a jump make sure that the next connects enough to the previous parts to keep it going to maintain the flow of the story while simultaneously jumping in time, just don't drift too far away from where you initially started unless you're consciously doing it on purpose knowing readers need to follow your lead on this as well.

Someone better might be cool enough to say something about this, whether I'm on point or not but that's the feeling I got when it comes to writing topicals. It doesn't matter if it's abstract as fuck or not, all it needs is to follow a common theme good enough for the verse itself to matter with all its lines and connections.
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That said tho, anyone know where @Mike Wrecka, @Nigma, @Adonis and @Vulgar is? All these people used to be pretty dope in these tournaments, would be cool to see them back in here. If you guys are still around, sign up.
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