Victor vs. Schism {Victor wins}

~RustyGunZ~ · 06-01-2020, 01:11 AM

Round One

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FIGHT!

DUE: Friday, the 5th of June @ 11:59 PM PST aka 3 am on the beast coast

12-16 lines, NO MORE AND NO LESS
The rest you already know, I won't accept tom foolery and fuckery

@Victor
@Hush
@schism

Victor. · 06-02-2020, 10:35 AM

check

tradanN · 06-03-2020, 04:44 PM

Going 16

tradanN · 06-04-2020, 07:37 AM

good luck

Nice seed! this isnt a free ride or cheap uber
the only time they’ll ever crown vic is n the back of a police cruiser
This is a prank, kid. n u cant call me a liar
cuz you’re such a bag of shit I could sit you on a porch n set u on fire
We feel bad for you. can’t deny the truth
last time we let victor cruz through injuries retired you
Take a shower bitch. maybe wash ur fucking face
cuz you got a musk so bad it would make elon hide in space
Whens the deadline? I'll drop early u can’t beat me
cuz i’ll have a KO biden. your just sharting on live T.V.
Gift your girl ipad’s, ipod’s and mac books. stop and listen
u can give her all v-tech. my honda is still where i smash’d ur bitch in
U got no friends, that signature is half-way true
if money makes u anti-social. what does 10 years of online battling due
Your girl don’t even shave her twat. she must be on a mission..
..to keep furlough. even prisoners would skip that conjugal visit

Victor. · 06-04-2020, 11:30 AM

Tried to pull some pussy shit

Yes indeed I’m here for blaming gatts
Hit ya chest til lungs collapse an ya screams make no sense like an answer track
I get it jumping and spit fire . Bitch I’m from a hot barrio
U lack star power and can’t dodge these big ass bullets , you not Mario
Imagine this fag tryna rap ? He can’t either
Crowd a be more pissed than a joint picnic wit KKK and ANTIFA
Hit ya more than twice .. only thing left is stains to wipe
Catch him in the cross fire ... smoked from multiple angles like a hookah pipe
Call ya bitch dual mag.. cuz on her face u can load twice
Rick flair robe nice ..Punches a fuck ya balance up worst than a strobe light
The fuck is tradann? Some weak prick I erase when the beam spit
Funny u Named ya self after ya reputation .. neither one of em mean shit
I can beat u wit a first draft .. don’t gotta edit the final verse
U been texting 10 years ... been in 100 tournaments ... and NEVER wrote a Finals verse
My style ? Lames never could beat it ...
Think it’s a game ? Uppercut lift ya out ya seat quicker than the pledge of allegiance

Lol

Steve Fox · 06-04-2020, 03:42 PM

Nice seed! this isnt a free ride or cheap uber
the only time they’ll ever crown vic is n the back of a police cruiser
Your girl don’t even shave her twat. she must be on a mission..
..to keep furlough. even prisoners would skip that conjugal visit
We feel bad for you. can’t deny the truth
last time we let victor cruz through injuries retired you

^^ Almost quoted this, but you end up using "you" enough to the point it kinda made me not. It's a bit nit-picky, but seeing you end off the bar, while using it in this manner doesn't click with me, especially when there are replacement words like "duke", "dude", "son", etc. The battler is also not Victor Cruz lol Also, the forlough/fur low bar is dope and LOTB, and I don't think I've seen it before, so the item was weird at first, but after researching, I like it.

vs.

Hit ya more than twice .. only thing left is stains to wipe
Catch him in the cross fire ... smoked from multiple angles like a hookah pipe
The fuck is tradann? Some weak prick I erase when the beam spit
Funny u Named ya self after ya reputation .. neither one of em mean shit
My style ? Lames never could beat it ...
Think it’s a game ? Uppercut lift ya out ya seat quicker than the pledge of allegiance

I don't like this style of "I'm more aggressive", but I thought the flips you did were interesting in these bars. There was wit brought to it and that allowed for the punches to hit at a more aggressive rate than Tradann's for some of his verse. Rep bar was sly, but the Hookah pipe one was really dope.

v - Victor. I have him with 3 bars to 2 in quotables, but it was actually very close. I could see this going down as an upset or Vic making it through barely, but there was not enough consistency to be a complete blowout. Both sprinkled in some lines that didn't hit as effectively, due to wording.

Answer · 06-04-2020, 04:59 PM

Nice seed! this isnt a free ride or cheap uber
the only time they’ll ever crown vic is n the back of a police cruiser

ok opener

This is a prank, kid. n u cant call me a liar
cuz you’re such a bag of shit I could sit you on a porch n set u on fire

Eh, execution is ok but I've seen the general idea done before multiple times in better ways

We feel bad for you. can’t deny the truth
last time we let victor cruz through injuries retired you

execution here is flawed, but the idea is cool

Take a shower bitch. maybe wash ur fucking face
cuz you got a musk so bad it would make elon hide in space

nah, this is a miss

Whens the deadline? I'll drop early u can’t beat me
cuz i’ll have a KO biden. your just sharting on live T.V.

no

Gift your girl ipad’s, ipod’s and mac books. stop and listen
u can give her all v-tech. my honda is still where i smash’d ur bitch in

execution is flawed, idea is ok

U got no friends, that signature is half-way true
if money makes u anti-social. what does 10 years of online battling due

kinda funny but lacks lyricism

Your girl don’t even shave her twat. she must be on a mission..
..to keep furlough. even prisoners would skip that conjugal visit

ok idea, execution is flawed

Yes indeed I’m here for blaming gatts
Hit ya chest til lungs collapse an ya screams make no sense like an answer track

regardless of my involvement of the line, I wasnt really feeling this

I get it jumping and spit fire . Bitch I’m from a hot barrio
U lack star power and can’t dodge these big ass bullets , you not Mario

the general idea has been done before on more than one occasion but this is otherwise cool

Imagine this fag tryna rap ? He can’t either
Crowd a be more pissed than a joint picnic wit KKK and ANTIFA

Not feeling this one

Hit ya more than twice .. only thing left is stains to wipe
Catch him in the cross fire ... smoked from multiple angles like a hookah pipe

Idea is dope, I think the execution could've been smoother

Call ya bitch dual mag.. cuz on her face u can load twice
Rick flair robe nice ..Punches a fuck ya balance up worst than a strobe light

this is alright

The fuck is tradann? Some weak prick I erase when the beam spit
Funny u Named ya self after ya reputation .. neither one of em mean shit

ok, too straightforward for my preferences

I can beat u wit a first draft .. don’t gotta edit the final verse
U been texting 10 years ... been in 100 tournaments ... and NEVER wrote a Finals verse

ok

My style ? Lames never could beat it ...
Think it’s a game ? Uppercut lift ya out ya seat quicker than the pledge of allegiance

Think you could've appended some more onto this to make it stronger, but solid closer

Nice seed! this isnt a free ride or cheap uber
the only time they’ll ever crown vic is n the back of a police cruiser
This is a prank, kid. n u cant call me a liar
cuz you’re such a bag of shit I could sit you on a porch n set u on fire

vs.

I get it jumping and spit fire . Bitch I’m from a hot barrio
U lack star power and can’t dodge these big ass bullets , you not Mario
Hit ya more than twice .. only thing left is stains to wipe
Catch him in the cross fire ... smoked from multiple angles like a hookah pipe
My style ? Lames never could beat it ...
Think it’s a game ? Uppercut lift ya out ya seat quicker than the pledge of allegiance

tradanN had some decent hits with his first 3 lines, then I feel like his verse fell off quite a bit. Victor stayed more consistent throughout. Hookah pipe is probably the lotb for me

v/ Victor

evaD · 06-05-2020, 12:59 PM

Nice seed! this isnt a free ride or cheap uber
the only time they’ll ever crown vic is n the back of a police cruiser
Like this, good start
This is a prank, kid. n u cant call me a liar
cuz you’re such a bag of shit I could sit you on a porch n set u on fire
lol nice
We feel bad for you. can’t deny the truth
last time we let victor cruz through injuries retired you
Another nice name play
Take a shower bitch. maybe wash ur fucking face
cuz you got a musk so bad it would make elon hide in space
Fell off here don’t like this
Whens the deadline? I'll drop early u can’t beat me
cuz i’ll have a KO biden. your just sharting on live T.V.
Think this wp could’ve been done better
Gift your girl ipad’s, ipod’s and mac books. stop and listen
u can give her all v-tech. my honda is still where i smash’d ur bitch in
Ok
U got no friends, that signature is half-way true
if money makes u anti-social. what does 10 years of online battling due
Lol decent personal
Your girl don’t even shave her twat. she must be on a mission..
..to keep furlough. even prisoners would skip that conjugal visit
Nice finish think the wpcould’ve been used differently though

Yes indeed I’m here for blaming gatts
Hit ya chest til lungs collapse an ya screams make no sense like an answer track
Decent opener and the punch is current
I get it jumping and spit fire . Bitch I’m from a hot barrio
U lack star power and can’t dodge these big ass bullets , you not Mario
Got a laugh
Imagine this fag tryna rap ? He can’t either
Crowd a be more pissed than a joint picnic wit KKK and ANTIFA
Don’t like this
Hit ya more than twice .. only thing left is stains to wipe
Catch him in the cross fire ... smoked from multiple angles like a hookah pipe
This is nice maybe lotb
Call ya bitch dual mag.. cuz on her face u can load twice
Rick flair robe nice ..Punches a fuck ya balance up worst than a strobe light
Decent
The fuck is tradann? Some weak prick I erase when the beam spit
Funny u Named ya self after ya reputation .. neither one of em mean shit
Lol
I can beat u wit a first draft .. don’t gotta edit the final verse
U been texting 10 years ... been in 100 tournaments ... and NEVER wrote a Finals verse
Decent
My style ? Lames never could beat it ...
Think it’s a game ? Uppercut lift ya out ya seat quicker than the pledge of allegiance
Seems a bit simple but decent finish

This ones close actually. Both had some nice stuff. tradanN had a strong start but fell off after like 6 lines. If he kept it up he’d have taken this. Victor was more consistently good and had my favourite bar so he edges it. Good from both though.

Vote - victor

Fracture · 06-06-2020, 03:17 AM

This was sort of okay verse

V.

Sort of okayer verse

Victor being the latter

Vote- victor

~RustyGunZ~ · 06-06-2020, 01:32 PM

Vic wins

06-02-2020, 10:35 AM	#2
Victor. Punchline Prettyboy Join Date: Jan 2014 Posts: 1,512 Battle Record: 7-0 Champed - Fight Night 6 Rep Power: 53833777	check __________________ You ain’t a young buck ... yous a dumb fuck//run up and get gun butted.. get all your gums bust Last edited by Victor.; 06-04-2020 at 11:29 AM.

06-03-2020, 04:44 PM	#3
tradanN Member Join Date: May 2016 Posts: 57 Battle Record: 0-4 Rep Power: 220470	Going 16 Last edited by tradanN; 06-03-2020 at 07:45 PM.

06-04-2020, 11:30 AM	#5
Victor. Punchline Prettyboy Join Date: Jan 2014 Posts: 1,512 Battle Record: 7-0 Champed - Fight Night 6 Rep Power: 53833777	Tried to pull some pussy shit Yes indeed I’m here for blaming gatts Hit ya chest til lungs collapse an ya screams make no sense like an answer track I get it jumping and spit fire . Bitch I’m from a hot barrio U lack star power and can’t dodge these big ass bullets , you not Mario Imagine this fag tryna rap ? He can’t either Crowd a be more pissed than a joint picnic wit KKK and ANTIFA Hit ya more than twice .. only thing left is stains to wipe Catch him in the cross fire ... smoked from multiple angles like a hookah pipe Call ya bitch dual mag.. cuz on her face u can load twice Rick flair robe nice ..Punches a fuck ya balance up worst than a strobe light The fuck is tradann? Some weak prick I erase when the beam spit Funny u Named ya self after ya reputation .. neither one of em mean shit I can beat u wit a first draft .. don’t gotta edit the final verse U been texting 10 years ... been in 100 tournaments ... and NEVER wrote a Finals verse My style ? Lames never could beat it ... Think it’s a game ? Uppercut lift ya out ya seat quicker than the pledge of allegiance Lol __________________ You ain’t a young buck ... yous a dumb fuck//run up and get gun butted.. get all your gums bust

06-04-2020, 04:59 PM	#7
Answer He / Him / His Join Date: Oct 2013 Posts: 1,675 Battle Record: 20-1 Champed - Summer Classic IX - Netcees Battle League - Fight night 15 Rep Power: 12534701	Nice seed! this isnt a free ride or cheap uber the only time they’ll ever crown vic is n the back of a police cruiser ok opener This is a prank, kid. n u cant call me a liar cuz you’re such a bag of shit I could sit you on a porch n set u on fire Eh, execution is ok but I've seen the general idea done before multiple times in better ways We feel bad for you. can’t deny the truth last time we let victor cruz through injuries retired you execution here is flawed, but the idea is cool Take a shower bitch. maybe wash ur fucking face cuz you got a musk so bad it would make elon hide in space nah, this is a miss Whens the deadline? I'll drop early u can’t beat me cuz i’ll have a KO biden. your just sharting on live T.V. no Gift your girl ipad’s, ipod’s and mac books. stop and listen u can give her all v-tech. my honda is still where i smash’d ur bitch in execution is flawed, idea is ok U got no friends, that signature is half-way true if money makes u anti-social. what does 10 years of online battling due kinda funny but lacks lyricism Your girl don’t even shave her twat. she must be on a mission.. ..to keep furlough. even prisoners would skip that conjugal visit ok idea, execution is flawed Yes indeed I’m here for blaming gatts Hit ya chest til lungs collapse an ya screams make no sense like an answer track regardless of my involvement of the line, I wasnt really feeling this I get it jumping and spit fire . Bitch I’m from a hot barrio U lack star power and can’t dodge these big ass bullets , you not Mario the general idea has been done before on more than one occasion but this is otherwise cool Imagine this fag tryna rap ? He can’t either Crowd a be more pissed than a joint picnic wit KKK and ANTIFA Not feeling this one Hit ya more than twice .. only thing left is stains to wipe Catch him in the cross fire ... smoked from multiple angles like a hookah pipe Idea is dope, I think the execution could've been smoother Call ya bitch dual mag.. cuz on her face u can load twice Rick flair robe nice ..Punches a fuck ya balance up worst than a strobe light this is alright The fuck is tradann? Some weak prick I erase when the beam spit Funny u Named ya self after ya reputation .. neither one of em mean shit ok, too straightforward for my preferences I can beat u wit a first draft .. don’t gotta edit the final verse U been texting 10 years ... been in 100 tournaments ... and NEVER wrote a Finals verse ok My style ? Lames never could beat it ... Think it’s a game ? Uppercut lift ya out ya seat quicker than the pledge of allegiance Think you could've appended some more onto this to make it stronger, but solid closer Nice seed! this isnt a free ride or cheap uber the only time they’ll ever crown vic is n the back of a police cruiser This is a prank, kid. n u cant call me a liar cuz you’re such a bag of shit I could sit you on a porch n set u on fire vs. I get it jumping and spit fire . Bitch I’m from a hot barrio U lack star power and can’t dodge these big ass bullets , you not Mario Hit ya more than twice .. only thing left is stains to wipe Catch him in the cross fire ... smoked from multiple angles like a hookah pipe My style ? Lames never could beat it ... Think it’s a game ? Uppercut lift ya out ya seat quicker than the pledge of allegiance tradanN had some decent hits with his first 3 lines, then I feel like his verse fell off quite a bit. Victor stayed more consistent throughout. Hookah pipe is probably the lotb for me v/ Victor Last edited by Answer; 06-04-2020 at 05:04 PM.

06-04-2020, 07:37 AM	#4
tradanN Member Join Date: May 2016 Posts: 57 Battle Record: 0-4 Rep Power: 220470	good luck Nice seed! this isnt a free ride or cheap uber the only time they’ll ever crown vic is n the back of a police cruiser This is a prank, kid. n u cant call me a liar cuz you’re such a bag of shit I could sit you on a porch n set u on fire We feel bad for you. can’t deny the truth last time we let victor cruz through injuries retired you Take a shower bitch. maybe wash ur fucking face cuz you got a musk so bad it would make elon hide in space Whens the deadline? I'll drop early u can’t beat me cuz i’ll have a KO biden. your just sharting on live T.V. Gift your girl ipad’s, ipod’s and mac books. stop and listen u can give her all v-tech. my honda is still where i smash’d ur bitch in U got no friends, that signature is half-way true if money makes u anti-social. what does 10 years of online battling due Your girl don’t even shave her twat. she must be on a mission.. ..to keep furlough. even prisoners would skip that conjugal visit

06-05-2020, 12:59 PM	#8
evaD Senior Member Join Date: May 2020 Posts: 697 Battle Record: 19-10 Champed - BA Show And Prove - Summer Classic XI Rep Power: 4156643	Nice seed! this isnt a free ride or cheap uber the only time they’ll ever crown vic is n the back of a police cruiser Like this, good start This is a prank, kid. n u cant call me a liar cuz you’re such a bag of shit I could sit you on a porch n set u on fire lol nice We feel bad for you. can’t deny the truth last time we let victor cruz through injuries retired you Another nice name play Take a shower bitch. maybe wash ur fucking face cuz you got a musk so bad it would make elon hide in space Fell off here don’t like this Whens the deadline? I'll drop early u can’t beat me cuz i’ll have a KO biden. your just sharting on live T.V. Think this wp could’ve been done better Gift your girl ipad’s, ipod’s and mac books. stop and listen u can give her all v-tech. my honda is still where i smash’d ur bitch in Ok U got no friends, that signature is half-way true if money makes u anti-social. what does 10 years of online battling due Lol decent personal Your girl don’t even shave her twat. she must be on a mission.. ..to keep furlough. even prisoners would skip that conjugal visit Nice finish think the wpcould’ve been used differently though Yes indeed I’m here for blaming gatts Hit ya chest til lungs collapse an ya screams make no sense like an answer track Decent opener and the punch is current I get it jumping and spit fire . Bitch I’m from a hot barrio U lack star power and can’t dodge these big ass bullets , you not Mario Got a laugh Imagine this fag tryna rap ? He can’t either Crowd a be more pissed than a joint picnic wit KKK and ANTIFA Don’t like this Hit ya more than twice .. only thing left is stains to wipe Catch him in the cross fire ... smoked from multiple angles like a hookah pipe This is nice maybe lotb Call ya bitch dual mag.. cuz on her face u can load twice Rick flair robe nice ..Punches a fuck ya balance up worst than a strobe light Decent The fuck is tradann? Some weak prick I erase when the beam spit Funny u Named ya self after ya reputation .. neither one of em mean shit Lol I can beat u wit a first draft .. don’t gotta edit the final verse U been texting 10 years ... been in 100 tournaments ... and NEVER wrote a Finals verse Decent My style ? Lames never could beat it ... Think it’s a game ? Uppercut lift ya out ya seat quicker than the pledge of allegiance Seems a bit simple but decent finish This ones close actually. Both had some nice stuff. tradanN had a strong start but fell off after like 6 lines. If he kept it up he’d have taken this. Victor was more consistently good and had my favourite bar so he edges it. Good from both though. Vote - victor

06-06-2020, 03:17 AM	#9
Fracture Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2015 Posts: 1,120 Battle Record: 9-2 Rep Power: 10222949	This was sort of okay verse V. Sort of okayer verse Victor being the latter Vote- victor