05-25-2020, 07:56 AM | #1 |
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Ayo,
I'm the creature that creeps in the darkest of nights I'm the reason he sleeps with the sharpest of knives If you park in his drive & check the garden you'll find Parts of his mind, eyes, two sai's & a few sizes of nines So even Darwin couldn't find the start of my kind & as hard as you try I'm still carvin' your sides Guardian of rhymes, harder than martians to find I find it hard to say goodbye like I'm partin' with mimes I've been marketin' my crimes, to gain rep I hope This ain't the best I've wrote, I'm feelin' death is close I like the breasts of hoes, caressed the chest of most Boastin' I'm a doctor promotin' a second hand stethoscope I grabbed your pancreas, when I sank my fist in your stomach shit I bled your head you were almost dead, once I bludgeoned it Your brains on an oven mitt, hide the gloves quick Simpson Grab any artery in your heart, 'cause I love sickness mixed in I'm Witty like with six of the sins, mockin' most rappers Hit you from every angle like I'm tossin' protractors Bitch you better row faster, shits creek is no matter To laugh @ when it comes from my cheeks & it splatters On the weak, batterin' emcees 'til my tongue rots Half you cats are squarer than the pants on Sponge Bob & I love a dumb blonde, comin' from the slums lawn Especially when the rum's gone, that's when the Devil's son's spawn. |
05-29-2020, 01:25 AM | #2 |
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What is this hate on Exis week, show some love to the most hated on site...
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05-29-2020, 11:14 AM | #3 |
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Lyricism is on point here tbf, I see the structure u implemented throughout as well, I didn't sleep on tht. Nice touch of the A B A B start, smooth
Mad verse! Boastin' I'm a doctor promotin' a second hand stethoscope - made me LOL |
05-29-2020, 12:07 PM | #4 |
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Just gonna say it was an enjoyable read as far as Im concernd, rhymes and transitions smooth & consistent, the doctor line was dope, liked the guardians of rhyme segment as well.
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06-02-2020, 09:11 AM | #6 |
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Just gonna up this once...R.I.P to George Floyd, God bless my brother.
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06-02-2020, 09:18 AM | #7 |
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WTF does george floyd have to do with this
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06-02-2020, 09:28 AM | #8 |
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Nothin'...just payin' my respects.
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06-02-2020, 11:25 PM | #9 |
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This was different. Almost doesnt read like an exis verse at all. Dope scheme
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06-03-2020, 01:05 AM | #10 |
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Thanks fam, was sorta tryna get out of my comfort zone...Atleast I tried.
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06-03-2020, 03:59 AM | #11 |
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I like how you kind of have this gangster rap vibe to you but you use more elaborate language, and also have some spots of witty metaphor here and there as well. While the flow reads like typical thug shit to you have some spots that shine on their own. Good stuff Exis
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