12-08-2013, 03:59 AM | #1 |
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pretty sure that i love you. but i know that it hurts rose out of concrete, rougher than diamonds, gold in the dirt over subway grates, windswept, the flow of your skirt had me rotary, circular, stuck. rolling inert nobody's first. i guess nobody wins, nobody's wrong you'll never even know that i wrote you a song fuck. i've written you dozens notepad of assonances filled with assumptions over analytic discussion, droning, like an idiot. substance dependent, sinister soul. shadow puppeteering cryptic baroque paper pioneering the boat. Aaliyah kissing me slow mellow synthesis, prose is prozac. but my symptoms are few are far between like full eclipses at noon scented perfume. it all seems so egocentric, it's true but i promise, evermore, raven, this is for you. give me youth. it's the finer things i'm saving to buy that have me feeling paranoid & hateful inside be that close to the ledge. let your sentiments fly cliffside is where your earnest femininity shines all wax poetic aside. take that step. leftist or right winged warrior, airborne like breathable lies goretex and maker's mark. the seasonal grind the TV says it's freezing. let the people decide balancing romantic with a need to survive thought you wanted a bond. you had a needle in mind puzzled like broken china, force the pieces to fit bat an eyelash and i'll lease you a whip. jesus, it's sick adulthood's a trip. i remember being seven and six envisioning shit, suicide before i'd ever been kissed reoccurrence persisted. viva la venereal cysts your lips burn like kerosene, we melt. candlesticks in the fireplace, ashes, bloody ashes we fade another Encyclopedia Dramatica page jottings cinquains on parchment and graves, walking away long past my parliament phase. black tar coughing decay i wanted to stay. truly, i did. i wasn't confused just afraid to take a leap. i couldn't stomach the view i love you more than life. that was always the truth but it was either live in solitude, or suffer with you.. i'd rather burn than choke. DEADMAN
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12-08-2013, 04:17 AM | #2 |
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I'm a bit drunk and thinking about things and about to go to bed. This was everything I needed in my life at this time, aside from a cigarette of my own.
Thank you. I'll come back with better feedback.
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12-08-2013, 12:59 PM | #3 |
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whew. some parts of this were fiercely beautiful. i dug it.
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12-08-2013, 01:16 PM | #4 |
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I wish you'd use periods. Sometimes I'm unsure where your flow ends or begins.
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12-08-2013, 01:20 PM | #5 |
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The passion was very strong with this one
Makes me want to read it to people around I've read my sister some of your writings before Lol
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12-08-2013, 05:47 PM | #6 |
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I want a visual of Wise's sister.
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12-08-2013, 05:58 PM | #7 |
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jealousy is in the air i can tell /// i will never understand the shit but OH WELL...
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12-10-2013, 11:47 AM | #9 |
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i think we can all agree that wise should have a .gif of his sister reading this and touching herself as his next signature.
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12-10-2013, 01:30 PM | #10 |
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Be honest. The first half was awesome. Overall great, but the last half wasn't as dope as the first. But loved that beginning a lot!
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12-10-2013, 03:02 PM | #11 |
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I can see if she's down..
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12-10-2013, 05:15 PM | #12 |
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freezing outside/people decide was dope. agree that it fell off at the end but you closed on a strong note. miss this shit
I know for a fact Wise' sister is down, btw
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12-10-2013, 08:53 PM | #13 |
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For days I've been wondering if it's Wise' or Wise's. Oats has reinvigorated my inner turmoil.
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12-10-2013, 11:08 PM | #14 |
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It's Wise's.
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and thats interesting cuz we're usually on similar pages and the final segment was one of my favorite bits of this.
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This was amazing the whole way through, I hope to see more of this.
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saving this from the second page
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the only thing i've read on this site that deserves a HOF, a HOF that matters, not the watered down ish. the best since i've read my last blacketh piece probably, ha. thought provoking. beautiful. inspiring.
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12-14-2013, 05:34 PM | #20 |
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Who cares about flow.
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