12-21-2018, 11:50 PM | #1 |
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Master rock vs asylum[Rock wins]
NWL:Season I: Week IX
Verses ares due: FRIDAY(next week) at 11:59 PM EST Voting ends: SUNDAY at 11:59 PM EST Line Limit: Minimum:10 lines, Max: 30 Voting on 2 battles is required. TOPIC: @Master Rock @asylum Last edited by Inno; 01-10-2019 at 07:13 PM. |
12-22-2018, 06:57 AM | #2 |
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12-28-2018, 11:32 PM | #3 |
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12-29-2018, 12:39 AM | #4 |
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I'm seeking a way to get away from it all
yet in this vastness, my troubles seem a bit too small Is it your divine breath that controls the wind that transcends me beyond to a state where I have been? I search for clarity but my own thoughts are clouded by its continuous spin conflicted with a war that persists to be fought from within as the smoke clears as well as the rain lost in the sea dreams suddenly is gone the pain searching for peace comfort and clear skies But am I deceived by the whispers of devils lies? wondering about the star's connection to our lives while all I see is the celestial being attempting to pull my soul towards the sky deja vu I run away premonitions searches for who am I? let me drift away in the calmness of the day will I find forever? mediate in the moment and I'll pray But yet in this moment is where I'll choose to stay
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01-01-2019, 02:38 PM | #6 |
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nice verse. That's the kind of stuff that would run through my mind just floating.
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01-03-2019, 02:46 AM | #7 |
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okay not a bad verse, lost in the vastness and all, i liked the theme, however your flow was off in some spots due to typo and wording. for example, this couplet...
"as the smoke clears as well as the rain lost in the sea dreams suddenly is gone the pain" could've been smoother with some punctuation and improved wording. V/MasterRock @asylum so sorry for your incident bro |
01-05-2019, 04:41 AM | #8 |
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so i dried out in land and tried out the sea
never found out the truth or a reason for being each step you takes in granite like steps from a God we make impressions past most understanding yet so redundant in thought it might seem obscene but every check has a balance i'm just living in a dream i inspect from another dimension aint a challenge so much as another extension get cut by a knife like a slice deep in tension most never think twice but we increase, breathe relentless aleviate stress like a lochness that blew a valve i'm sicker than ya crew locked up in a room bumpin tical two grand for a true man with a new plan know i'm conquering where few can yall on that ham and pinapple while i chew spam stay true fam. listen to realness that speaks I'm truer to form than Andes with peppermint peaks twice as obscene piercing the sky with the night in my dreams daylight meets forces darker forcing margins of battle'n dwarfing'em goblins this swarm you can't stop when it's thumpin out the top ten bumping it to hopsin stay woke like jake brakes in the hollywood hills while we bottle the thrills serve em up to foreign countries labeled like we gotta just chiiiillll but it's way maximum security cuz we tax'n the majority'n supportin freedom see 'em tryin to stop it with my optics n stay fly like hebrew coptics cuz these people breed demonous monsters in the dreams of cerebral pondscum we drink brews till gone, sir. i'm beyond sure chillen in the swamp thinkin i'm drinkin too much and beyond words the ponds purified with a slight ripple when i getta pinch a bright nipple see that booty tight wigglen i might giggle tryna warm up but my frozen dick spits icicles you cry pitiful while i dry ridicule you quite miniscule this after beef, versus were due at the last of week but my fat physique has ya bastards peekin n seekin great enlightenment i just stay snuffin you bitches out like that kites been sent to a high extent i'm raisin higher than hot balloons huffin noxious fumes plottin astronomic doom beefin while ya in ya room sleepin in the broom closet beefin with wicked witches there's no room in a sequence that leaves you stricken believe me when spitten leave you stuck in a 3d'like image leave you in my dreams w hile i finish............... |
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