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Old 05-22-2015, 09:47 PM   #1
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Why worry? New necks and the old nooses
Lets get it cracking! Im a known nuisance
My game pro but you looking for codes to it
leading the new world order with a thrown toothpick
crucify your dreams on the razors edge..
bringing the drama to where you lay your head
you couldn't be a MC if you had Don Drapers breath..
aside from Portland there's no real Trailblazers left
bitches break their neck for the freshest dick
like writers reaching for feelings with a catchers mitt
ready to write em' off, leave em' black barred, censorship
get stoned & bury them deep 'in remembrance'..
I pretend the shit don't bother me when liars lie
looking at some of the shit that these writers write
taking up space reserved for me at higher heights
your shit flames until I show you how to fire fight..
I'd ask you who the best is, but that's rhetorical
this is Agent Smith with the eyes of the Oracle
swimming in a Lazarus pit looking for immortal youth
I used to be so cordial too...you can't afford a truce
go 'head bring the fortress through, I'll torch your troops
abort the youth, make the most loyal woman courtship too.
I'm the lord to you, full vision couldn't get QwarterZ views
take 12 with everyone that ever supported you
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Old 06-12-2015, 12:23 PM   #2
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Old 07-10-2018, 05:50 PM   #3
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Why worry? New necks and the old nooses
Lets get it cracking! Im a known nuisance
My game pro but you looking for codes to it
leading the new world order with a thrown toothpick
crucify your dreams on the razors edge..
bringing the drama to where you lay your head
you couldn't be a MC if you had Don Drapers breath..
aside from Portland there's no real Trailblazers left
bitches break their neck for the freshest dick
like writers reaching for feelings with a catchers mitt
ready to write em' off, leave em' black barred, censorship
get stoned & bury them deep 'in remembrance'..
I pretend the shit don't bother me when liars lie
looking at some of the shit that these writers write
taking up space reserved for me at higher heights
your shit flames until I show you how to fire fight..
I'd ask you who the best is, but that's rhetorical
this is Agent Smith with the eyes of the Oracle
swimming in a Lazarus pit looking for immortal youth
I used to be so cordial too...you can't afford a truce
go 'head bring the fortress through, I'll torch your troops
abort the youth, make the most loyal woman courtship too.

I'm the lord to you, full vision couldn't get QwarterZ views
take 12 with everyone that ever supported you
Highlighted part was my favorite, flows always smooth like butter and I enjoy ur more braggadocio pieces
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Old 07-17-2018, 03:50 AM   #5
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This would fly in audio...your flow is bananas @ times, content wise it's nice...dug that QwarterZ line.

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Old 09-15-2018, 10:55 PM   #6
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I'd ask you who the best is, but that's rhetorical
this is Agent Smith with the eyes of the Oracle
swimming in a Lazarus pit looking for immortal youth
I used to be so cordial too...you can't afford a truce
go 'head bring the fortress through, I'll torch your troops
abort the youth, make the most loyal woman courtship too.
I'm the lord to you, full vision couldn't get QwarterZ views
take 12 with everyone that ever supported you
& now I know how you picked the name Quarterz

I liked this especially the quoted part. Super clean rhymes and schemes, I thought. I'm rusty so that doesn't hold much water.

Some lines seemed hastily written/ spit out just to keep it moving, like "bitches break their neck for the freshest dick", like I get what you're saying but the wording just strikes a dissonant chord. But I know you focus on the flow and like to keep it off the top, so no complaints with that in mind

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Old 09-23-2018, 06:03 AM   #7
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lmao Mr J this might seem completely random but is your name Ross?

i think we may know someone mutual
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Old 09-24-2018, 08:53 PM   #8
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Nah. But I do know of a Ross.
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