02-21-2018, 02:02 PM | #1 |
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where these kats at to Match my Last Moves, Smash the Wack Crews.. Hand me Daps Too or go Back to Rap School.. i aint Grabbing my Pants to Flash some Dance Moves, ..with hands on my nuts like a Pack of Cashews.. my Ink is an Art like I'm Branding Tattoos, I'll Rip you Apart going Track for Track Dude! if you dont Have the Haps? well, ..you Can Advance Too, just Have a Plan.. Master That and Pass the Bad News, That's a Fact..! ..the Bads we Have Entraps our Past in Back Rooms, but the Tracks we Have Exactly Mapped a Path Through.. (..And we Have Proof!) my Aftermath'll make the Planet Crack in Half Too! while I'm Packing up some Hash then Blasting Past the Half Moon, That's True! you'd never Beat the Bone, See me Fold or Speak a Flow Wack, I'mma Beast who Grows to Peaks Unknown, I've Reached the Snow Caps.. got the Deepest Poems, Reaping Souls.. you People Know That..! start Receiving Blows, then Retreat and Hope to Keep a Close Stance, No Chance! to Compete with Bone.. Believe in Hope and See your Own Path, but Keep it Dope.. I'm Defeating Hoes with Free's or Note Pads, Completely Though.. you'd Need to Clone Emcees with Pro Stats cuz I'm not an Easy Foe.. Speech Explodes to Eat your Whole Camp! just Know THAT! y'all Rhyming Poor! while I was Born Rapping, either Try to Form your Mind some More or Find the Door Slamming! I'll, Slide a Sword Inside your Corpse til I get Bored At It... you'll, Find the Floor when I get Your, Spinal cord Crackin'! (Bitch!) ..I am Lord..! Disguised a Normal Guy Reborn Frantic, to Guide this Sport! so Write and Score your Final Four Brackets! ..I've Explored the Lines you Force.. no Time for Your Antics..! cuz I can .. Lighten Your Status with the Slightest War Tactics! eezee |
02-21-2018, 09:12 PM | #2 |
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Damn son Al write you a cheque cause you deserve the money
The way we connected lyrically got me thinking that you more than honey Here with you every step of the way come rescue me in the depths where I lay To the Devils I pray and try to hear what they say They are here to stay and stare those there astray Melting under the heat like they made of clay There existing but not in this form Bit as a gnome standing on the giant horn Legions of Angels dangle from the tail Its not a fairy tale says the voice Of a sibling that play with toys That possess Magical powers present in the grandest of tower Awaiting armageddon to come in the darkest of hour Growing on the land like a flower Now growing feet and making the course It was made for the worse and its so Sacred its cirse Not just taking the purse but the lifeforce that escape from the pores Of a blazing core, The beast unleashes the strangest of roar A trail for the bore come play in the floor All types of vanities decorating for sure The price you pay for not taking the poor Into your hands to take whats there and make it some more Speak in the language of the people in anguish That are trying to cause tbe Spirit to vanish Into a plane of existence completely outlandish A dream that is lavish now becoming reality Don`t complain we all know its insanity Overblown profanity a cloned abnormality Incrementing in size to the point its unstoppable A win against it is highly improbable when there is no obstacle The stage is phenomenal in all ways its Demonical Mourning all the fallen entities that awaken to slaughter enemies In Godly premises silenty building momentum for the spectace The felon is detestable but a touch in the heart Can cause a pulse in the ark where they worship the dark Reviving the thirst you invoked it atlast now transport to the past Your soul and reverse the present time Coming from a peasant mind that faced battles of several kind Complex with rhyme is the mental patient on eternal displacement Nice raps brother you are like no other
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02-21-2018, 09:37 PM | #3 |
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nice imagery eeg..
but yoyo, the Age of Delusion has, Made us Illucid, and the, State of the Union is a.. Stage of Illusion..! its a Game that their Using just to Sway our Influence, and Playing us Music that's Making us Stupid.. ! HAARP Rays'll be Shooting and they've Made some Improvements so our Brains have been Ruined With the Way that they've Tuned It! their, Spraying Pollutants that Stay Undiluted and.. Planes will Exclude It in a Way thats Confusing, they’re..! Making our Foods With the Dangers Included.. ..Creations from Using the Strains of a Mutant! were, Facing a Movement of a Nation's Intrusion, cuz, “Change" was a "Tool", obama's Made to Re-Use It, yo! Pain is a Nuisance so lets Pray that we Lose It, but were made to be slaves to the Bank Institutions! and.. Invasions are Useless, its just Endangering Units, but.. ....A Revolution is the Blatant Solution!! eezee |
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OAN. Check this link whenever you can (Crack The Mic!), I think you might dig it. Stay solid, L. Peace. |
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02-25-2018, 02:28 AM | #5 |
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Your style is interesting to me..i like it but i kinda don't... it's weird. I can definitely appreciate what you're doing. It seems like you came from a battling background?? At least that's how your style comes across anyways. Your multi syllable scheming is really great. And trust me i like that shit big time. But as complex as that is, the actual vocab you use is honestly pretty weak man. I Think at this point you obviously have a great grasp of flowing etc, but it would be infinitely better if you could start incorporating some better words in your material man. Yes you're rhyming like 8 syllables or whatever but it's kinda just boring and really not THAT complex.. all the words you used are like preschool when you have a degree in scheming.. feel me?? Not saying now you gotta turn around and start pulling random obscure words from the dictionary but you need to challenge yourself man. It would be sooo much more enjoyable for your audience. Use turns of phrase, figures of speech etc, use proper names of people places and things. It'll be way more fun for you too!!
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03-04-2018, 09:54 PM | #6 |
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you remind me of me when i was about 17 and learned multis but tbh, back then, i never wrote something as clever as 'hands on my nuts like a pack of cashews' - you also probably rhyme more consistently than i did 10 years ago, too.
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05-19-2018, 03:06 PM | #7 |
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appreciate the time and feedback fellas, copy, I def feel you bro, will keep that in mind for sure, thanks for your honesty
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05-20-2018, 05:45 PM | #8 |
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i was being flippant, i think. sorry.
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05-24-2018, 10:41 PM | #9 |
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I liked it...think your content is kinda basic, but havin' said that so is mine lol.It def does have an ol' school vibe to it...which was great imo...it's refreshin' to read different styles of text, I guess that's what makes printed out verses so appealin' to me.
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06-04-2018, 02:39 AM | #10 |
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@Darker Ego, one more outburst & Im slapping a fine on your head bruh.
I dont know how to do it yet, but Ill figure it out you cornball... Hey man, the guy that wrote this I thought this was dope...you got some smooth flows son. the wording was on point and the back & forth transitioning was slick overall this was a great piece to just enjoy imo. random indeed but worth the read.
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06-08-2018, 07:07 PM | #11 |
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Your good at rhyming multi's. But I agree with CopyPat you need some better words.
Some of your phrasing is very basic and just trying to complete a rhyme without making sense. That being said you can continue a scheme for quite a while so I can see your talents. |
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