Re-emergence

[Objective]

Soil start to flake as the ground crackle,
thundrous sounds arise from mind shackles.
Tectonic plates break apart and make waves,
great lakes dissipate when rivers form in strange ways.

The introduction of water terraforms conjunctures of landscape,
observe how a pen shape and motion ocean structures to hand made.

Past dark days carved barren alleys and canyons
now nurturing new life, valleys and stray stallions.
Roots worm their way with light speed frequency,
what was deserted now turn bright green.

Sequencing a light spring turtledoves expose their white wings
sightseeing the earth below of new life and what it might bring

welcoming the write king.

[Alice]

Short but nice. That tectonic plates part threw me off a bit cause it feels like there’s a break in place rhythmically, but it’s obvious why you used it content-wise. Some of the references were kind of expected given the overall theme, but your word choices were unique in some parts like in the terraform line. Ending was different to the rest. Decent.

[JustRap]

This was interesting. A few grammar issues unless it was done on purpose or I'm missing something but otherwise this would have been a fun piece to rhyme too. I'm not sure the content is up my alley though lol that's not to say anything negative more of my own capability than anything about you. Stay up