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Old 04-14-2024, 05:45 PM   #1
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....i wrote this in remembrance
Place The jersey up, 10 of 10.
The squad can pretend again
Til J hit like that good medicine.
That ol' feeling starts to fadeaway
Lay up under the netting...
If you don't get the ref, play the game
Back before MJ made a name.
I doctored how you play today.
Rock you babies then made a change.
Shitted on the comp in a major way.
But now...
They play hide and seek with the tarantula.
Denied when flipping beef.. no spatula
No neck, no Dracula, no big end act to ya...
Guess the scene's stolen, now back to ya...
They keep coming back to the same room
Got the same expression that proclaims 'doom'
You can all stop when I say to
The...
Pattern scattered in a way pigeons seek.
The way kids leave trails and witches meet.
Ideal motives but you think it's trick r treat
Ironic how the outcome is so bittersweet.
Picture me rambling off, sideshow bickering
When it pays more just to say 'ticket please'
Gambling vigorously, got losses you didn't see.
Channeling mannerisms of ol Philip Se...
You don't see this often.
Autumn imagery, that's fallen symmetry.
For y'all who tend to go all in innocently.
Hope that fat boy slim while Walken timidly.
Got that boy dancing on ceilings & whatnot.
Experience being fucked..with an evening of love loss.
Most don't get none, and when the host get done.
Well...there goes your wish huh?
You don't see this often.
Philip Seymour Hoffman with a pen.
Their whole act got me to drink again.
Put the cognac in the sink with gin
And right when I put where my finger is.
These suckers come up...
Like pink elephants.
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Good read. Quite punchy with some good quotables in there. Tight Pen as per

expected a direct war and peace reference
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