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MMLP · 12-01-2015, 09:23 AM

CRAZY!!!!! well done Mr. Wit

check this @sraL

Pharaohs Army · 12-01-2015, 12:36 PM

...the truth is destruction, the world is flowing loose in a fluxion of useless production, consumed with consumption, so what he has to do is to loosen the suction of a blueprint keeping the youth in a dungeon, a movement is comin', so he'll never call a truce 'cause he won't follow the rules of corruption, he sees the wolves in discussion...

Witty · 12-01-2015, 12:59 PM

Is that good or bad? Lol

Pharaohs Army · 12-01-2015, 01:58 PM

my fav part

Frank · 12-02-2015, 02:43 PM

Nice work

Witty · 12-10-2015, 05:28 PM

Thank you.

Witty · 01-27-2018, 09:35 AM

Since we're all about the multi's recently.

Lyriscologist · 01-27-2018, 12:02 PM

wow, interesting piece, very well constructed with content to match.. left me with an uneasy feeling, but, in a good way lol well done sir! solid

dull boy · 01-31-2018, 11:35 AM

This is dope. Glad it got bumped because I hadn’t read it. Easily my favorite brand of rhyming. It got a little repetitive with the subject matter, but this was fun and I wish more people would write this way.

Elemental P · 01-31-2018, 05:12 PM

This was actually better then what I was expecting. I like your flow and rhyme scheme use. Nice imagery mixed with some.cool metas. The beginning of it for up to 12 bars were my fav . Really a nice written piece here.

Eŋg · 03-04-2018, 10:17 PM

you're not bad but i honestly am comprehensively better than you.

you could probably outdrink me, though, so there's that.

12-01-2015, 12:59 PM	#23
Witty Lime Life Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 16,794 Battle Record: 30-41 Accomplishments - Only Slightly Retarded Champed - Lyric Olympics - Summer Classic Rep Power: 82986458	Is that good or bad? Lol __________________ He listens to voices inside of his mind Explicit and poisonous violent crime.

12-02-2015, 02:43 PM	#25
Frank Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 3,228 Champed - NWL Season 2 - Art of Writing League (5x) - Lime Green Poetry Association - AOWL Season 6 - AOWL Season 10 Rep Power: 3853343	Nice work __________________ *VETWORK*

12-10-2015, 05:28 PM	#26
Witty Lime Life Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 16,794 Battle Record: 30-41 Accomplishments - Only Slightly Retarded Champed - Lyric Olympics - Summer Classic Rep Power: 82986458	Thank you. __________________ He listens to voices inside of his mind Explicit and poisonous violent crime.

01-27-2018, 09:35 AM	#27
Witty Lime Life Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 16,794 Battle Record: 30-41 Accomplishments - Only Slightly Retarded Champed - Lyric Olympics - Summer Classic Rep Power: 82986458	Since we're all about the multi's recently. __________________ He listens to voices inside of his mind Explicit and poisonous violent crime.

12-01-2015, 09:23 AM	#21
MMLP Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 600 Battle Record: 15-16 Champed - Write Week 9 Rep Power: 9768087	CRAZY!!!!! well done Mr. Wit check this @sraL

12-01-2015, 12:36 PM	#22
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,962 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	...the truth is destruction, the world is flowing loose in a fluxion of useless production, consumed with consumption, so what he has to do is to loosen the suction of a blueprint keeping the youth in a dungeon, a movement is comin', so he'll never call a truce 'cause he won't follow the rules of corruption, he sees the wolves in discussion...

12-01-2015, 01:58 PM	#24
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,962 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	my fav part

01-27-2018, 12:02 PM	#28
Lyriscologist Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2018 Posts: 101 Rep Power: 95178	wow, interesting piece, very well constructed with content to match.. left me with an uneasy feeling, but, in a good way lol well done sir! solid

01-31-2018, 11:35 AM	#29
dull boy consults Lloyd Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 4,075 Battle Record: 0-8 Champed -1-2 Punch League Roast Rep Power: 39345600	This is dope. Glad it got bumped because I hadn’t read it. Easily my favorite brand of rhyming. It got a little repetitive with the subject matter, but this was fun and I wish more people would write this way.

01-31-2018, 05:12 PM	#30
Elemental P Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2018 Posts: 856 Rep Power: 4507453	This was actually better then what I was expecting. I like your flow and rhyme scheme use. Nice imagery mixed with some.cool metas. The beginning of it for up to 12 bars were my fav . Really a nice written piece here.

03-04-2018, 10:17 PM	#31
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,146 Rep Power: 0	you're not bad but i honestly am comprehensively better than you. you could probably outdrink me, though, so there's that.