11-09-2018, 10:05 PM | #1 |
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Adonis vs Broken halo[ADONIS WINS]
NWL:Season I: Week VI
Verses ares due: FRIDAY at 11:59 PM EST Voting ends: SUNDAY at 11:59 PM EST Line Limit: Minimum:10 lines, Max: 30 Voting on 2 battles is required. TOPIC: “Suicide is the first step...” @Adonis @brokenhal0 Last edited by Inno; 11-27-2018 at 10:15 PM. |
11-13-2018, 04:33 AM | #2 |
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suicide pacts we taking whats left
taking my life so i could make it in death knife straight to the neck barrel straight to the head temple faded with lead get me a noose lemme hang myself how bout i jump off the roof impact make my skin crack and with that my life i end that or so i thought .. next thing i felt was electricity flowing threw my hopeless corpse ringing ears my senses dissolved yet sight wasn't lost my thoughts became louder life passed by at the rate of 10,000 miles per hour i could here myself but no one responded hooded beings stood over my body lifted me to infinity i lossed it same planet different objects my identity became unconscious now im fading into universal chaos so begins the second step if you wanna play god your spirits now a breeze monsters catch it with a spiral spinning machine immortality has never been a cynical dream suicide is the first step to an invisible means jumped off a bridge and couldn't flow so i died...drowned two middle fingers as i sank down only cool people die wild foul suicide smiles depression in a waking state change your place stalk the weary loneliness was the great escape suicide is the first step to saving grace lie on my mayan alter i will alter your mind while implying torture waking up in a morgue drawer... suicide the first step to peace descend to dantes inferno as my erection ascends to heavens peaks from the desperately deceased and the besting of the beast it's like a quest for a holy grail knights tale second death im repping like a vet in war caught so many bodies suicide was never a threat at all my first words manifested death with source my mother slipped broke her neck after she swept the floor raw flesh is suicide kept in stores for your paws to feast on babyboy im a neon line of freon nitrous oxide till i die fly there's no such thing as death when I'm not hypnotized by the flesh suicide is the first step.... Last edited by brokenhal0; 11-13-2018 at 05:20 AM. |
11-15-2018, 07:09 PM | #3 |
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This is a story of un-luck and how being trapped can be freeing
In this world man dreams of whipping wind with his wings In a place where his feelings aren’t shamed for being speech Where emotion’s a sleeve that he's not expected to keep He’s not over expressive or flamboyant in thought But feelings aren’t bottle-necked in his throat as he coughs This is a happy realm, come; let us explore for a sec. Cause inner self has been hidden deep in its depths Where the further you get… the closer to death Ironically, bringing you closer to self… Such strange intellect The chasm of soul is a labyrinth untold Callous and cold, love and hate both balanced in core We’ve traveled the surface but the truth is below So he searches his soul for a grip on control He finds his way through the chambers, though endless they seem But suddenly, a simple mirror that gleams He approaches it cautious, unsure of it’s meaning Afraid of his soul, but seeing is believing The darkest truth is still truth, however painfully raw He traveled his mind and he saw the shame in his flaws So he broke the mirror to bits cause he was lost in perception Figured, if he truly were evil, why not carve out his love… With these shards of reflection Topic: Suicidide is the first step
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I'm tryna fuck like A-don-is TUPAC SHAKUR Last edited by Adonis; 11-15-2018 at 09:25 PM. |
11-17-2018, 02:57 PM | #4 |
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Giving it up to Adonis for the win.
Overall this was a tough decision, I believe both came with their best. Halo had a fantastical story and brought me to a different place. The ride was engaging as well as full of surprises especially how he faced the subject matter. Adonis had an approach where your left with questions as well as brought it to a psychological reflecting moment to the mindset one may suffer in the state of being. Last edited by Master Rock; 11-17-2018 at 05:20 PM. |
11-26-2018, 01:15 AM | #5 |
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adonis came through with more of a story, his opponent has a lot of verses in the cypher with better dynamics. you cant spend a lot of time dancing around the topic bruh, you gotta hit it head on and spend the most of your syllable count developing the idea..
good win adonis. |
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