simply put

Bodey · 10-15-2013, 09:09 AM

your mediocrity is blossoming more raunchily than awesome weed
my philosophy's like Socrates... no answers for this bald inbreed
i'm droppin these hypnotically and never fallin off the beat
it dawns on me i got 'em pondering as if they hit super sonic chronic leaf
but oh, I'M the delirious one since birth
though YOU see material funds as worth
left me with an inferior buzz at work
during heavy period blood in skirts
you used to fear this and run like herds
from these lyrics i've spun, dispersed
your spirit was hung, the worst
drowned in a serious flood of words...

my flow is just...

makin paraplegics flip, dissolvin the puke on a bulimic's chin
darken up every anemic's tint while followers of jesus strip
this writing could almost make a policeman hip... ehh almost
open up your spleen and shit until our feces stick
so at least you can be someone even as a piece of shit
agreed, i'm sick. forever diseased with fits of this seasoned spit
breathin in the spliff and releasin wisps of hits as it's seepin in
sneakin fire back from these elitist tricks, label me Prometheus

see?

i'm too fresh with it, embellishin the pen and wit
compelling twists of pencil shifts, sicker than a septic whiff
i stretch the grid, flex its width, eventually the best emits
you get the gist? respect this shit, you're just another desperate clique
writin like dyslexic kids on mescaline, quit sippin that depressant sip
i'm attention deficit, obsessive-- which became an epileptic glitch
regression stitched to my essence, gripped at every potential pleasure since
so i'll move the pen until that wreckage lifts, hitting evanescence quick

Bodey · 10-15-2013, 09:12 AM

a lot of these were verses i came up with in collabs but i tried to find my own way to combine them as a nice flex. so if you recognize some of hte lines, that's why. but i dont think i ever got feed on these specifically.

Mr. J · 10-15-2013, 11:14 AM

This was pretty nice the opener was pretty slick
I really enjoyed the second half. very well written
reminds me of me when I can't sleep the flow was keen
The little braggodocio vibe you have fits the message you convey
keep it up

Inno · 10-15-2013, 12:27 PM

Godam that opener was fucking ill ass shit yo..fucking a
Thay was a dope display of rhyming right there...the rest of
The verse followed suit and carried well with great wording
And fluidity. Matter fact ever first line from each stanza could
Stand alone...really dug this shit, first time reading...well not really
I read thaty clit (anytime a girl says clit, its sexy lol) but that was ok
This was outstanding. Great job with this...quick note I thought from
The since birth line and on to the end of that first verse...that was some
Sick ass wordage and flow....good shit...

Bye the way..how do you say badi?

Bad-e?

Bod-e?

Bay-die? Lol just wondering lol

Bodey · 10-15-2013, 12:30 PM

bahh dee alley. now say it fast. thats how you say my last name.

and thanks for the feedback guys. i been meaning to write new shit, a lot of these lines are almost a year old but i dont think i've ever posted them by themselves outside of the collab i did so i wanted to see what people thought.

PancakeBrah · 10-15-2013, 12:45 PM

This was OK.

Just Write · 10-15-2013, 01:57 PM

Good shit badii has some gems scattered throughout. Opening was my favorite. Keep writin girl

Geno · 10-15-2013, 05:43 PM

This was great bodey

That heavy period blood/skirts line made me want your naked body more than ever. Good read, glad ur active. Still gonna collab soon, something epic though. Stay tuned

Thinking of titling it"before bodey and cide"

Darth Yoda · 10-16-2013, 12:20 AM

I liked the middle part, when you said "ehhh" haha!

e11even · 10-16-2013, 07:40 PM

oh shit!!! you're Bodey?! nevermind why I'm so excited I just found that out lol. Btw, very very cool shit. I lol'd:

"makin paraplegics flip, dissolvin the puke on a bulimic's chin
darken up every anemic's tint while followers of jesus strip
this writing could almost make a policeman hip... ehh almost
open up your spleen and shit until our feces stick
so at least you can be someone even as a piece of shit"

Dope. Better than the few things I read from you. Keep it up!

Bodey · 10-17-2013, 01:02 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Genocide

This was great bodey

That heavy period blood/skirts line made me want your naked body more than ever. Good read, glad ur active. Still gonna collab soon, something epic though. Stay tuned

Thinking of titling it"before bodey and cide"

haha for sure. i'd love to collab audio-wise someday but i'm nowhere near your level and never will be as far as delivery and lyrics go. but hell yeah, i'm diggin that title for sure. somethin tight. you orchestrated the first collab pretty genius the first time so i already know it'll be dope

@everyone else, thank you so much for the feed, much appreciated

Pakistani Hand Cannon · 10-17-2013, 10:13 AM

was aiiiiight

Zen · 10-17-2013, 12:37 PM

I thought this was actually pretty fucking dope. The middle verse was the best, the opener on the first verse was fuckin ILL, and I felt it fell off when it came to the last verse. Overall though this was some solid writing. Would sound fucking good on a track.

CopyPat · 10-17-2013, 03:00 PM

hey bode. this was pretty good. there was def ALOT of good shit in here, but idunno what it was something felt a little off about it, some parts seemed a bit forced i think?? don't get me wrong for the most part it was decent. just seemed a tad contrived, didn't seem to come as fluidly as it normally does from u. keep posting.

10-15-2013, 11:14 AM	#3
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,025 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349678	This was pretty nice the opener was pretty slick I really enjoyed the second half. very well written reminds me of me when I can't sleep the flow was keen The little braggodocio vibe you have fits the message you convey keep it up __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

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Just Write Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,709 Battle Record: 9-12 Rep Power: 4997613	Good shit badii has some gems scattered throughout. Opening was my favorite. Keep writin girl __________________

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Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,325 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036758	This was great bodey That heavy period blood/skirts line made me want your naked body more than ever. Good read, glad ur active. Still gonna collab soon, something epic though. Stay tuned Thinking of titling it"before bodey and cide" __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

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e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247256	oh shit!!! you're Bodey?! nevermind why I'm so excited I just found that out lol. Btw, very very cool shit. I lol'd: "makin paraplegics flip, dissolvin the puke on a bulimic's chin darken up every anemic's tint while followers of jesus strip this writing could almost make a policeman hip... ehh almost open up your spleen and shit until our feces stick so at least you can be someone even as a piece of shit" Dope. Better than the few things I read from you. Keep it up! __________________ Ahem.

10-17-2013, 03:00 PM	#14
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 707 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742221	hey bode. this was pretty good. there was def ALOT of good shit in here, but idunno what it was something felt a little off about it, some parts seemed a bit forced i think?? don't get me wrong for the most part it was decent. just seemed a tad contrived, didn't seem to come as fluidly as it normally does from u. keep posting. __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.

10-15-2013, 12:27 PM	#4
Inno Ad mini tator Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 10,005 Battle Record: 26-54 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - Black August - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 85899400	Godam that opener was fucking ill ass shit yo..fucking a Thay was a dope display of rhyming right there...the rest of The verse followed suit and carried well with great wording And fluidity. Matter fact ever first line from each stanza could Stand alone...really dug this shit, first time reading...well not really I read thaty clit (anytime a girl says clit, its sexy lol) but that was ok This was outstanding. Great job with this...quick note I thought from The since birth line and on to the end of that first verse...that was some Sick ass wordage and flow....good shit... Bye the way..how do you say badi? Bad-e? Bod-e? Bay-die? Lol just wondering lol

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PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 13,052 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899406	This was OK.

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Darth Yoda Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 408 Battle Record: 6-2 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF Rep Power: 20182436	I liked the middle part, when you said "ehhh" haha!

10-17-2013, 10:13 AM	#12
Pakistani Hand Cannon Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 1,212 Rep Power: 5303580	was aiiiiight

10-17-2013, 12:37 PM	#13
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,104 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079719	I thought this was actually pretty fucking dope. The middle verse was the best, the opener on the first verse was fuckin ILL, and I felt it fell off when it came to the last verse. Overall though this was some solid writing. Would sound fucking good on a track.