WEEK ELEVEN: BROKENHAL0 (5-4) vs SINACOG (0-4) HAL0 WINS 4-0

[Adverse]

AOWL Season X WEEK ELEVEN

@Sinacog @brokenhal0

Verse Due: SUNDAY JUNE 26TH @ 11:59 PM

Line min: 10

Max: 40


Rules: http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=150311

Topic:





GOOD LUCK

[Sinacog]

It was a beautiful afternoon; on a Sunday stroll; reaching goals//
TEACHING GOALS; REAPING POLES/POLLS; I'm a standard ghost//
I'm a nephlim from hell; heaven sent from melt; essences of hell//
I killed thousands of angels and demons from a halo is screaming//
It was a nether dimension when I felt the aroma of woman//
SHE APPEARD TO ME IN A LAKE; the seer form a lake//
I thought she was beautiful; splendid splendor//
A EVIL SPIRIT; wanting my erection; dissection//
I loved her for that; it made he suck my frontal lobe//
THE SUN OF GHOST; the pun's awoke; the pun of jokes//
I love my woman with all my heart and soul; the heart of soul//
I made out with my woman near the river where tons of ghosts//
In the middle of November; it was December//
It the middle of January it was Februaury//
I am the writer from spirit world; hear my words//
FEAR MY WORDS// I never lost a battle; acost of battle//
THE SOUGHT OF RATTLE: THE TOWER OF BABEL//
I killed archer's and marksman on the tower of babel; the hour of battle//
I am the swordsman of extreme recluse; tieing noose//
I killed a billion swordsman with forfiet//
SORDID RHYMES: CHORUS LINES//
FORDID RHYMES; FORBID RHYMES/
I sang to a tower of woman; the hour of spitting//
SPITTING BARS AND BARS AND BARS; killing the rhythm..//

[brokenhal0]

''Pulled In Left Out''

''seduction for the captivated''

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4NcpBRv3AZ4

Women in silky robes stepping out of fishing boats
searching for love in lochness made monsters out the misanthropes
alligator gars in lake michigan taking out fish in droves
no one noticed until the fishermen went missing and his wife had to sit at home
you can find me skinny dipping at the swamp where all the swimmers go
the sinners know in dreary motel rooms lying naked drinking a miller lite
with the dimmer low.

A dinner date by the river with a different hoe playing with her tits
while shes playing with her dish picking out the fishes bones
her breath smelled like the fishing boat fins where her hips should go
pay for play and he played until the rains washed away the lycanthrope
serenade her crotch with a finger poke send her off with a extra stroke
sadly it was flaccid delayed and pitiful we all laughed bashful
standing by the bay badly asking for a lay was never difficult
it made him say hooray and carry on his day more miserable.

Im alone prophetic pathetic poem another human who stared into a puddle
and was overcome by the reflection of there own decrepit soul defected gold
ghouls pulling you into a spectral hole mimicking whatevers deemed legible
even in winter the rivers east of eden never froze
even when algae peaked in monsoon season there was no sign of geese or gulls
so he remain weakened sowing seeds of misdeeds on saint peters coast
as she overlooks the cliff and hangs her clothes crows above her head squeal
with teeth exposed walking invisible planks to the pub to smoke weed with coke.

See those bars have jars that clean out infections
see she felt free and while feeling freedom she fell out the tree in seconds
she was the concession stand standout the bay watch blonde with big boobies
at the beach giving free handouts with fake coolies
don't play a man who can single handily souffle a sand trout
the same man that made out with mermaids off the shores of glasgow
the insane man who serenaded a virgin nurse into giving birth in a madhouse.

Behind his nightmares she appeared as a hidden shadow in a sheer blouse
to his bewilderment it was himself in a mirror universe sleeping in a glass house
hidden in the homeless huts of the harlem river an immortal mermaid sings a song
enter the mentality of endlessness you never thought you could sing along.

As the lake of morality flows some drown trying to get along maybe i can get a loan
maybe i can grab a log & stay afloat the sediment sharp and the waves are low
I think your pulling my leg and the surface is 8 below
it's been along day you should leave the hate alone
I get it , it's penned up aggression every day another brain to dull
don't be so apprehensive you don't have to dunk you're face alone
did you get the message im missing the connection to my herring bone
you hearing me two hearts daring to share the same line on the spirit phone.

Disconnected this conception immaculate inseparable dissection discourse daffodil
best I can do is shrink my testicles with out letting my bladder spill
she just wanted to eat some vegetables and do acid on the carousel.

Sink your battleship shits and giggles phonetic symbols
skinny dipping in the swamp sirens with human arms feed me fish & pickles
fluttering silence amongst the plants as rats scurry above the fickle
I get a whiff of curry as I watch a beetle get carried by bulldog ants up the willow
they look like little nipples gotta get back before nightfall
that's when the dead crawl out the river and want to hear the riddles.

[Sinacog]

Clear.

[Candy]

sin:

probably one of your top three verse - dude i love the creativity of it.. the colourfull depiction of what is what and the general story telling of the story itself the vocab was strong and the delivery was your usual on point all in all short but sweet but saying that though it was still of good size to be an enjoyable read.. thanks

broken:

dude super dope dude.. i loved this story such an adventure i mean the whole set for sail and the mermaids song part was off the chain.. the story of the characters tale was depictive and forfilling the boat and the food captured was cool really felt like you were there.. the rhyme scheme was dope and the general structure and flow was on point.. dope dude

vote = brokenhal0

just an all round stronger story more flushed out for one sometimes its better to tell less but in this case it was definitely one point in the right direction.. plus the story was just that much better to overwhelm this match for a vote.. gl guys i loved them both

[NYCSPITZ]

One thing that’s gay about This league is ppl stay dickriding wack verses. “Omg so creative” man pick up ur balls, say what’s actually on ur mind or stfu…if the verse is good say it’s good, if it’s bad don’t out yourself as a people pleasing low iq fag “omg so good”& dumb shit like that…

Sinacog is clearly trolling here as usual. Half trolling, more like. It’s kind of funny, with the capitalization and glib repetition of half assed basic concepts, the funny thing is it sounds dope in parts, then he goes back to trolling. I think if sinacog ever stopped trolling he could write a dope verse but I doubt he ever will. Overall this was basic, of a trolling nature and not good.

Halo same thing you’re all over the place. Weird lines like you’re fondling a woman while she eats her fish?…yeah, doesn’t seem well thought out. I thought you had nice sections to your verse like sinacog did, you trolled less, you put in more effort at using vocabulary and setting, even if it was mostly nonsensical. For effort and some streaks of beautiful lightning within the sky of manure——>>

Mvgt halo

[Frank]

Sinacog

What does it mean to keep up a charade? To put on a façade? To pretend that you're crazy? Sinacog's "mockery style" was legitimized by Jesters & Jokers, whose main objective was to amuse the king. They often acted silly and didn't take themselves seriously to appease, The King. Then, you had the Towns Babbling Idiot (The Village Idiot) whom unlike the Jesters & the Jokers: who's stupidity and buffooneries were generally fondly accepted, the babbling idiot was frowned upon and casted a side like a leaper to be hung and stoned for the public for his foolishness. Sinacog's beheading here is extremely befitting!!!!!! He is the equivalent of a Head-Less Chicken!!!!!!! Stop the shenanigans, You Nincompoop: C'mon M********* Worthless ******* Show your king you're not an idiot. This slapstick satirical malarkey ENDS NOW!!!!!!#$%^&*

Broken Halo

Love the way Broken Halo always plays the role and writes to the picture. He writes exclusively to the picture, so his detailing never really detours too far from the assigned picture... He can dissect a picture like nobodies business: simply by using direct and pin point descriptors that are unique to his picture. Here, Broken Halo wrote whimsically and "fluently" in a trippy manner that evoked a sense of surrealism:

Women in silky robes stepping out of fishing boats
no one noticed until the fishermen went missing and his wife had to sit at home
you can find me skinny dipping at the swamp where all the swimmers go
A dinner date by the river with a different hoe playing with her tits
while shes playing with her dish picking out the fishes bones
her breath smelled like the fishing boat fins where her hips should go
pay for play and he played until the rains washed away the lycanthrope
standing by the bay badly asking for a lay was never difficult

MVGT: Broken Halo

[Adverse]

I’ve had my fill of Sinacog, verses never even hit the ballpark of the topic, forced ass rhymes and what not with a very occasional dope inclusion here and there. Frustrating with knowing he could write an excellent piece if he wanted to. I don’t know

Hal0 verse reminded me of the one Frank wrote awhile ago in the contenders match vs NYC. Sirens always make for good writing and you had some next level stuff here, your entire first stanza was wow. But you include some of your bread and butter shock imagery which isn’t necessarily bad it just throws the verse off the rails in my opinion. But in all honesty you didn’t need much to take this. Pretty much a bye week. Good work

V/Hal0