11-22-2020, 09:05 PM | #1 |
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WEEK 8: Brokenhal0 2-4 VS Coop 0-1 COOP WINS
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11-23-2020, 08:35 AM | #2 |
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11-23-2020, 06:13 PM | #3 |
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Yo Ill put your head threw the shredder like some deli meat
The fuck you telling me Have your wifey tongue kiss my smelly feet I 'coop'erate your dreams while you co-operate police compensate your failures with more mistakes and grief Your a rat who wouldn't take the cheese im the cat whose claws gonna make you bleed trapped no place to leave ill cut you in line in micky d's ill lace your weed to make you sneeze slam your head into a table and break your knees i heard you eat glizzy's and party with men with fake tittys a real copycat end up missing where ya body at in the trunk of my uncles pontiac Fuck a handgun where my shotty at ill split your body back kill any Co-oPerative trying to lock me up with a shiny badge send the wolfs to your farm king cooper on you chickens next morning they gone hows does it feel to be a loser with your written's Labeled a snitch cause you always waiting to tell your whole style basic as hell ill stuff my fist up your girls pussy until her labias swell Last edited by brokenhal0; 11-23-2020 at 06:22 PM. |
11-26-2020, 01:34 PM | #4 |
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This a joke, right??
ANOTHER troll account??? Cmon, this poor lil bastard's a sure disaster No one has the will to read your shit. We'd have to be dying of more than laughter You can try, but hell, time will tell you could never outfight or beat me Cuz a broken clock's right only twice a day, but a brokenhalo always writes weekly Then he rages when he loses. God don't like angry! But I'm not tryna preach Just count your losses, brokenhalo.. mouse, keyboard, & anything else within reach Chicks give him 3 strikes then he's gone. (If they don't flake on his broke dates) S'why he's got so many Turkeys he can supply Thanksgiving for his whole state A fuckin heathen, as long as this punk is breathing he couldn't fill sinacog's spot Your great desire's the lake of fire? You still won't know how it feels to be hot & you're short, annoying & dumb like Dominions. You're Despicable dude So even if you had that voting machine ^, there'd still be no switching to you |
11-26-2020, 01:43 PM | #5 |
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Didn’t like anything from Hal0.
Coop, liked the first 6 lines. Turkey line was a little bland and closer was eh. Other than that though, liked the verse. Way more than enough to win. Good shit. Vote Coop |
11-26-2020, 02:11 PM | #6 |
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Coop got this
Halo out here cutting the McDonald’s line That’s ain’t wavy baby Vote coop
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11-26-2020, 02:19 PM | #7 |
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Your first 2 bars stood out to me the most and clock was LOTB you were gonna win this all day long tho.. BH I’m still not enjoying anything, man |
11-26-2020, 03:17 PM | #8 | ||
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Close: closer Ok verse. Part of the issue is concepts. Some of the ones you picked are light/simple and limit the impact of your bars. In other places, your concept is ok but doesn't have wording to hit harshly. Better setup with help with this. Also just play around with a couple different ways to get to your punch, you might find a better approach after the first one. A step up from last weeks verse in execution but need more creativity to get past tougher opponents. Vote: Coop. He wins this pretty easily but still has a couple places to improve. |
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11-26-2020, 03:31 PM | #9 |
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Brokenhalo reminds me of 15 yr old frac on microsoft word breaking my verse up. Not very effective in a league full of hitmen... But keep at it. Maybe put your lines together... The spaces take steam off. Also there arent even any real ideas going on here. Make her lick your smelly feet?
Coop... I notice youre a pretty harsh critic so im expecting pure fire. Not the case. You def outshines halo but almost by default. The intro was lotb so you won off the merit of that. Clean flow throughout but hindered by boring concepts. Minion lines.... Vote- coop
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11-26-2020, 04:02 PM | #10 |
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Vote coop
He took it with better hits and having an idea on how to put bars together..halo ain't there yet Dude need to get the basics taught to him and learn how to deliver a punch.. no hate. They're just isn't really anything in his verse to judge as a punch
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11-26-2020, 04:20 PM | #11 |
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I laughed out loud at your opener And surprisingly you can rhyme better than some here that are considered above avg. Unfortunately you need more than that. I.e. witty ideas, personal jabs, nameplays that work (co-operative is forced), etc. Keep at it. Read champ matches. You'll get it Coop Then he rages when he loses. God don't like angry! But I'm not tryna preach Just count your losses, brokenhalo.. mouse, keyboard, & anything else within reach Opener almost + a couple other that were close/better attempts than bh Voting Coop |
11-26-2020, 04:34 PM | #12 |
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Both verses weren’t good tbh. Can’t believe coop critiques shit dropping this. Broken had nothing
Coop had some ok attempts but nothing was heat for me. Enough to take the win Halo gotta be a sin alias V/coop |
11-27-2020, 11:48 AM | #13 |
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I actually laughed out loud at Brokenhalo’s opener and the fake titty’s lines. There’s an understated hilarity there that I actually like more in some ways than the standard setup/punchline couplet by couplet verses that everyone posts these days.
Unfortunately, overall, the verse was just too simplistic to win. Frankly, Coop’s verse wasn’t much better, it was structured well enough to win. I’m not sure that verse would beat any other verses in the league this week, but it was good enough here. Coop wins.
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11-27-2020, 01:14 PM | #14 |
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This battle wasn't very good wasn't feeling anything from broken, coop had the turkey bar, I liked he cut out the fluff though, it's obvious he did enough to win.
v/coop. is broken sinacog? Last edited by Eviction; 11-27-2020 at 01:24 PM. |
11-27-2020, 01:48 PM | #15 |
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v/ brokenhalo
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11-28-2020, 07:08 PM | #16 |
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Yo Ill put your head threw the shredder like some deli meat
The fuck you telling me Have your wifey tongue kiss my smelly feet ^^^ tf lol Vs Some good constructed bars that were not bad i guess. V/coop
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11-30-2020, 10:48 AM | #17 |
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Yo Ill put your head threw the shredder like some deli meat
The fuck you telling me Have your wifey tongue kiss my smelly feet holy shit I 'coop'erate your dreams while you co-operate police compensate your failures with more mistakes and grief this is a statement, gotta put a punch there. why u'll leave him in grief Your a rat who wouldn't take the cheese im the cat whose claws gonna make you bleed trapped no place to leave same as before ill cut you in line in micky d's ill lace your weed to make you sneeze slam your head into a table and break your knees not intimidating at all, gotta put some sting here i heard you eat glizzy's and party with men with fake tittys a real copycat end up missing where ya body at in the trunk of my uncles pontiac same Fuck a handgun where my shotty at ill split your body back kill any Co-oPerative trying to lock me up with a shiny badge ok this makes more sense send the wolfs to your farm king cooper on you chickens next morning they gone hows does it feel to be a loser with your written's some imagery here but not quite makes it Labeled a snitch cause you always waiting to tell your whole style basic as hell ill stuff my fist up your girls pussy until her labias swell ok so kind coming from you vs. ANOTHER troll account??? Cmon, this poor lil bastard's a sure disaster No one has the will to read your shit. We'd have to be dying of more than laughter statement You can try, but hell, time will tell you could never outfight or beat me Cuz a broken clock's right only twice a day, but a brokenhalo always writes weekly nahh forced Then he rages when he loses. God don't like angry! But I'm not tryna preach Just count your losses, brokenhalo.. mouse, keyboard, & anything else within reach ehh Chicks give him 3 strikes then he's gone. (If they don't flake on his broke dates) S'why he's got so many Turkeys he can supply Thanksgiving for his whole state mm not getting the punch here A fuckin heathen, as long as this punk is breathing he couldn't fill sinacog's spot Your great desire's the lake of fire? You still won't know how it feels to be hot sorry man not feeling this & you're short, annoying & dumb like Dominions. You're Despicable dude So even if you had that voting machine ^, there'd still be no switching to you ok but awkward wording that feet line was legendary.. this battle was close as fuckkkkkk i gotta re-read this so i'll come back to edit my vote |
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