07-20-2020, 04:51 PM | #2 |
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07-20-2020, 09:23 PM | #3 |
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You write like the most sedated human, sat medicated droolin'
How's it feel to be the worst 'Verse on a site that's dedicated to them? I asked Sharp what to write about him in the mag, he wrecked this queer "Sharp: Just tell him he's improving; we've been doing that for seven years" AND you’re fat, Jesus, I wish that I could get this fella shot Cuz you’re more about stealing seconds from your fam than Interstellars plot You look like a dyke electrician who hasn't had a man in years I told Hush to handle my lightwork, he sent Ad to install my chandelier This topical queen, you think you'll get the upset maggot? Here's a better plan, go back to writing 80 bars about a Sunset, faggot
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07-20-2020, 10:02 PM | #4 |
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You got a million ways to die, diabetes, heart disease, the list isn't short, b
Or I can do him execution style with the gat, only thing certain, you won't live to see .40 Oh look another UPN head, Zuch is a beast but bruh you need to go back It speaks to how weak your craft is that you can even be overshadowed with a physique like that How the fuck can you be that big of a dude and be so damn scrawny No computer, when I'm "hacking User panels" it's with murderous intent screaming out "herrrreeee's Johnny!" I'm stomping the head of this swollen swine, teach you how to put your frontal lobe behind Recap: Acting bitch will get your shit Preston, then you dying like Travolta's wife Can you believe this guy posting a gun bar? This guy ain't gon' pop Only 'chambers we wanna see u grip" is your heart's when it finally stops |
07-20-2020, 10:42 PM | #5 |
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verse was ok
sharp is a lil light interstellar was jeebus, wow lightwork worked heavy.. solid filler close vs 40s cool physique is a goodie user panel was a bit long.. actually had a similar concept while writing, this coulda been worded way better feelin the concept again.. needed rewording tho feelin the chamber jawn but cuz ive seen variations after the first two lines of adverse shit i was like here wee goo.. unfortunate it trailed at the end.. user has superb wording that can take a ehh line into something thats decent or above avg .. which is tough to beat if ur not consistent.. this is still close tho but that interstellar line leaned me sideways, fuckin nasty v user
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07-20-2020, 11:00 PM | #6 |
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Felt everything except 7 years Ad Opener was fire Travolta cool Closer cool Ad you actually came pretty correct here but user put a bomb together here Vote user
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07-20-2020, 11:40 PM | #7 |
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Nice battle fellas this was a good read
User - opener (worded great) , interstellar is so damn dope, and chandelier Ad - Overshadow, User Panel was creative and cool, Preston I have quotables even but Users superior wording and delivery of his conepts + Interstellar botb puts him over the edge imo .. interstellar was such a dope concept ... Props to both Vote User
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07-20-2020, 11:48 PM | #8 |
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You write like the most sedated human, sat medicated droolin'
How's it feel to be the worst 'Verse on a site that's dedicated to them? cool opener, nice execution/wording I asked Sharp what to write about him in the mag, he wrecked this queer "Sharp: Just tell him he's improving; we've been doing that for seven years" played concept AND you’re fat, Jesus, I wish that I could get this fella shot Cuz you’re more about stealing seconds from your fam than Interstellars plot i wanna know what made you think into Stella was a dope wp, but aside from that this was a nice bar You look like a dyke electrician who hasn't had a man in years I told Hush to handle my lightwork, he sent Ad to install my chandelier ok This topical queen, you think you'll get the upset maggot? Here's a better plan, go back to writing 80 bars about a Sunset, faggot nah Vs You got a million ways to die, diabetes, heart disease, the list isn't short, b Or I can do him execution style with the gat, only thing certain, you won't live to see .40 wasnt feelin this Oh look another UPN head, Zuch is a beast but bruh you need to go back It speaks to how weak your craft is that you can even be overshadowed with a physique like that lol ok How the fuck can you be that big of a dude and be so damn scrawny No computer, when I'm "hacking User panels" it's with murderous intent screaming out "herrrreeee's Johnny!" i got lost after the 49th word in this stretched bar man, idk what this means I'm stomping the head of this swollen swine, teach you how to put your frontal lobe behind Recap: Acting bitch will get your shit Preston, then you dying like Travolta's wife cool Can you believe this guy posting a gun bar? This guy ain't gon' pop Only 'chambers we wanna see u grip" is your heart's when it finally stops decent closer Pretty close battle here but I have username edging it for harder hitting lions Vote UserName |
07-20-2020, 11:53 PM | #9 |
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You write like the most sedated human, sat medicated droolin'
How's it feel to be the worst 'Verse on a site that's dedicated to them? clever I asked Sharp what to write about him in the mag, he wrecked this queer "Sharp: Just tell him he's improving; we've been doing that for seven years" could take or leave it AND you’re fat, Jesus, I wish that I could get this fella shot Cuz you’re more about stealing seconds from your fam than Interstellars plot good fucking god You look like a dyke electrician who hasn't had a man in years I told Hush to handle my lightwork, he sent Ad to install my chandelier seen stuff like this before tbh This topical queen, you think you'll get the upset maggot? Here's a better plan, go back to writing 80 bars about a Sunset, faggot feels like it's missing something. little statementish for my taste You got a million ways to die, diabetes, heart disease, the list isn't short, b Or I can do him execution style with the gat, only thing certain, you won't live to see .40 dope Oh look another UPN head, Zuch is a beast but bruh you need to go back It speaks to how weak your craft is that you can even be overshadowed with a physique like that cool How the fuck can you be that big of a dude and be so damn scrawny No computer, when I'm "hacking User panels" it's with murderous intent screaming out "herrrreeee's Johnny!" weirdly worded but I love the concept I'm stomping the head of this swollen swine, teach you how to put your frontal lobe behind Recap: Acting bitch will get your shit Preston, then you dying like Travolta's wife rip. okay Can you believe this guy posting a gun bar? This guy ain't gon' pop Only 'chambers we wanna see u grip" is your heart's when it finally stops the 'want to' is a little awkward. I get that it's a key but this could've been done better Interstellar is absolutely the line of the battle if not the round/tourney but Adverse almost had this. I think with slightly better wording on one or two more of the bars he would've taken it v/User |
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user kinda threw his last 4 away. Verse could of took it if he had ONE big banger in there. but Use had his first 6 lines which were the strongest portion of this battle v user.
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