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Old 08-02-2020, 07:10 AM   #1
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Old 08-03-2020, 10:37 PM   #2
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This would fly in audio...thought flow wise shit hit, middle section was nice Fig.Should be more active...unless you have 37 names like most cats ;)

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This is dope. I agree would go a long ways in audio dope flow and vocabulary was top notch
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Good use of vocab which is something I admire in any piece. No missteps in flow. Great piece!
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Enjoyed it quite a bit as well, short and sweet. Left me wanting more tho, might be the effect you were looking for. Also like the idea of an audio of this, the way it ended I envision a back'n'forth dialogue on social commentary and reflection of self. Either way, good read, stay up.
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