09-18-2020, 01:30 AM | #1 |
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Roadkill
"The highway of life was littered with the roadkill of those who didn't know when to change lanes." - Karen White
...... A cheater for life. I'd rather escape by the skin of my teeth, over bite Allocate your weakness? Please, I'll locate your weakness tonight Dog I'll stand in front of large groups and call you the police of this site Cuz when I read them your writes they're all the ones people dislike You're a comedian, right? I'm the drive 'em off the median type It's a homeless bum on a soapbox versus incoming meteorites All you do is critique out of spite... Breaking new ground is harder So I'll need an Alter-Rain Vehicle like Native dances for starters This terrain is awkward, but I still met up with a training partner... Who's like watching paint dry surrounded by Mediterranean artwork "Stilted wordplay”? YOU Sir Come Sized Up, I chopped off your dick (How's that?) Like Darth Vader to Skywalker the way I cut off ya Force Kin Your whole schtick is bitchin' behind bars; Orange is the New Black No difference in balls or in jizz... but that's what this newb lacks (eunuch verse) Eŋg I'm looking at you... Crapping on 'How to Textcee' was quite the struggle You crying uncle, I'm just sharing my Ex per tease like a cuckold I'm above you geek, AND too deep man... but that's a unique handle So keep playing hide n' Seek, K? Like Netflix after the Louis scandal You tickle me, Emo... I'll fuck up fake Sid Vicious in the hook as well Isn't it Tickle Me Elmo? It is, but by mentioning you I already took the L You're God awful, got-all-full of yourself and showed your temper, nerd Don't mess with those who are better - the rule of thumb like Roman emperors Eŋg doesn't stand for English? Word. We can't even have a conversation Nyquil? I'll be nodding off for days the way I'm a body Language Probably still stuck in your momma's basement, I bet you're a little pissed Sorry that's just the impression I'm under... How's THAT for "derivative"? This is your pink slip, Eŋg... But let's face it, no one will even care Cuz you've dropped about 4 rhymes in your entire netcees career And you're right dude, I haven't read them; I ignored every word spewed You're just out of my purview... and per view I can tell you a perv, ew I don't have to unearth a 'rhyme capsule' to get some dirt on you If it's not for your smart ass replies no one would've ever heard of you I’m anxious for Legal Proof that this faggot even grasps the basics Guess y'all can call me Goliath the way I'm chasing Affidavits... Asked this kid to answer my battle call, good God he looked soft Opportunity knocked... left a flaming bag on his doorstep then took off You shook dog, it's a fact, like Tommy Lee Jones in Men in Black A young Buck but you Average Doe… another deer in headlights, gassed So when I Commandeer your Vehicle I'll put the pedal to the metal fast Windshield cracked, fix the glass? No one Fawns over your pathetic ass Quick impact; Taxidermist, use this Thread after your neck is snapped So even though this Diss-Mantled you... I'm still wondering where your head is at... Splat.
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09-18-2020, 11:29 PM | #2 |
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this seems a bit ill advised, to me. your strengths as a writer are completely gone in a piece like this and all of the critiques eng highlighted are brought to the fore. also, eng will never care about this. you're kind of playing yourself by taking a one off comment by him and asking for a pink slip then writing a lengthy diss verse in 2020. so it obviously bothered you quite a bit whereas eng said it and never thought about you again other than to troll. you automatically lose just due to power dymanics/level of care. don't get wrapped up in the negative feed. he, in his own way, was just reacting to your positive run in the GWL and outspoken personality, saying you hadn't risen to the level of writing your posting indicated. there was some cool wording in this but almost all of it was outside of punchline wordplay, such as it is for a topical head. I say move on.
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09-20-2020, 01:41 PM | #3 |
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Universe has the same free time and need for approval as I did when I was 16 and still living with my parents.
Decent writer, tho. |
10-16-2020, 08:59 PM | #4 |
rhyme capsule.
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> "Stilted wordplay”? YOU Sir Come Sized Up, I chopped off your dick (How's that?)
Like Darth Vader to Skywalker the way I cut off ya Force Kin flames |
10-23-2020, 11:57 AM | #5 |
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damn
cake & dull loki bodied this dude accidentally on purpose how two nonchalant replies got more heat than the verse? shittt |
10-23-2020, 08:57 PM | #6 | |
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10-25-2020, 05:46 PM | #7 |
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so wheres your rebuttal ENG
dont pussy out on us bro
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10-25-2020, 06:57 PM | #8 |
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English was never good, lmao. He's decent.
Dead Man, lmao. Universe, you're good. |
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