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Old 09-18-2020, 01:30 AM   #1
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A cheater for life. I'd rather escape by the skin of my teeth, over bite
Allocate your weakness? Please, I'll locate your weakness tonight
Dog I'll stand in front of large groups and call you the police of this site
Cuz when I read them your writes they're all the ones people dislike
You're a comedian, right? I'm the drive 'em off the median type
It's a homeless bum on a soapbox versus incoming meteorites
All you do is critique out of spite... Breaking new ground is harder
So I'll need an Alter-Rain Vehicle like Native dances for starters
This terrain is awkward, but I still met up with a training partner...
Who's like watching paint dry surrounded by Mediterranean artwork
"Stilted wordplay”? YOU Sir Come Sized Up, I chopped off your dick (How's that?)
Like Darth Vader to Skywalker the way I cut off ya Force Kin
Your whole schtick is bitchin' behind bars; Orange is the New Black
No difference in balls or in jizz... but that's what this newb lacks (eunuch verse)
Eŋg I'm looking at you... Crapping on 'How to Textcee' was quite the struggle
You crying uncle, I'm just sharing my Ex per tease like a cuckold
I'm above you geek, AND too deep man... but that's a unique handle
So keep playing hide n' Seek, K? Like Netflix after the Louis scandal
You tickle me, Emo... I'll fuck up fake Sid Vicious in the hook as well
Isn't it Tickle Me Elmo? It is, but by mentioning you I already took the L
You're God awful, got-all-full of yourself and showed your temper, nerd
Don't mess with those who are better - the rule of thumb like Roman emperors
Eŋg doesn't stand for English? Word. We can't even have a conversation
Nyquil? I'll be nodding off for days the way I'm a body Language
Probably still stuck in your momma's basement, I bet you're a little pissed
Sorry that's just the impression I'm under... How's THAT for "derivative"?
This is your pink slip, Eŋg... But let's face it, no one will even care
Cuz you've dropped about 4 rhymes in your entire netcees career
And you're right dude, I haven't read them; I ignored every word spewed
You're just out of my purview... and per view I can tell you a perv, ew
I don't have to unearth a 'rhyme capsule' to get some dirt on you
If it's not for your smart ass replies no one would've ever heard of you
I’m anxious for Legal Proof that this faggot even grasps the basics
Guess y'all can call me Goliath the way I'm chasing Affidavits...
Asked this kid to answer my battle call, good God he looked soft
Opportunity knocked... left a flaming bag on his doorstep then took off
You shook dog, it's a fact, like Tommy Lee Jones in Men in Black
A young Buck but you Average Doe… another deer in headlights, gassed
So when I Commandeer your Vehicle I'll put the pedal to the metal fast
Windshield cracked, fix the glass? No one Fawns over your pathetic ass
Quick impact; Taxidermist, use this Thread after your neck is snapped
So even though this Diss-Mantled you...

I'm still wondering where your head is at...

Splat.
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Old 09-18-2020, 11:29 PM   #2
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this seems a bit ill advised, to me. your strengths as a writer are completely gone in a piece like this and all of the critiques eng highlighted are brought to the fore. also, eng will never care about this. you're kind of playing yourself by taking a one off comment by him and asking for a pink slip then writing a lengthy diss verse in 2020. so it obviously bothered you quite a bit whereas eng said it and never thought about you again other than to troll. you automatically lose just due to power dymanics/level of care. don't get wrapped up in the negative feed. he, in his own way, was just reacting to your positive run in the GWL and outspoken personality, saying you hadn't risen to the level of writing your posting indicated. there was some cool wording in this but almost all of it was outside of punchline wordplay, such as it is for a topical head. I say move on.
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Old 09-20-2020, 01:41 PM   #3
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Universe has the same free time and need for approval as I did when I was 16 and still living with my parents.

Decent writer, tho.
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Old 10-16-2020, 08:59 PM   #4
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> "Stilted wordplay”? YOU Sir Come Sized Up, I chopped off your dick (How's that?)
Like Darth Vader to Skywalker the way I cut off ya Force Kin

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Old 10-23-2020, 11:57 AM   #5
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damn

cake & dull loki bodied this dude accidentally on purpose

how two nonchalant replies got more heat than the verse?

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Old 10-23-2020, 08:57 PM   #6
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damn

cake & dull loki bodied this dude accidentally on purpose

how two nonchalant replies got more heat than the verse?

shittt
Eng you're worse than I ever was, with the 2 accounts and multiple personalities.

I got over it and stopped. I wonder if you have that ability.
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Old 10-25-2020, 05:46 PM   #7
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so wheres your rebuttal ENG

dont pussy out on us bro
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Old 10-25-2020, 06:57 PM   #8
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English was never good, lmao. He's decent.

Dead Man, lmao.

Universe, you're good.
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