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Old 01-30-2019, 05:51 PM   #1
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Old 01-30-2019, 08:51 PM   #2
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Technical aspects 10 out of 10.
Subject matter and wording 5 or 6 out of 10.

You definitely nailed the style. Next time make it about booze, ashtrays, amps, and ennui.
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Old 01-31-2019, 04:54 AM   #3
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lmao I didn’t realise you were critiquing them

you just said you couldn’t do the technical things so I keyed something to show you how

ill do one with more “deadman” content next
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Old 01-31-2019, 01:12 PM   #4
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This is not good.
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Old 02-09-2019, 10:09 PM   #5
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yeah, idk man. i guess? sorta kinda?

its a flattering gesture so thanks
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Old 09-12-2020, 11:47 PM   #6
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in retrospect this wasnt all that bad. but bb does it better
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Old 09-15-2020, 11:08 PM   #7
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I enjoyed this as a lars verse.
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Old 09-16-2020, 08:20 PM   #8
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Old 09-17-2020, 11:27 AM   #9
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ngl parts were humorous. it was vaguely deadman-y after 'pearl necklace'.

also significantly better than any imitation i remember pharaoh conjuring so, to that end, job done.
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Old 09-17-2020, 12:28 PM   #10
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Eŋg is garbage.

That is all.
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Old 09-17-2020, 01:42 PM   #11
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Old 09-17-2020, 09:18 PM   #12
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hi

i searched for a stilted wordplay in this post but found none.

you got me.
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