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Old 05-28-2018, 11:57 AM   #1
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sitting in my room, I feel the walls getting darker
depression get the best of me, see at the time I never met my father.
my moms was always gone or, at work, so I just chilled at the house
or, doing shit I wasn't allowed, yeah , now that I look at it now,
Mom and Dad they never was proud,
Insomnia keeping me up, the thoughts in my head are too loud
Getting bullied in school, I never fit in the crowd
started acting out and getting into fights
asleep in the day but I was awake in the nights
my dreams they never was nice, always ended in frights
See my head it was never quite right
I couldn't hang with the kids because I was never quite white
I was quiet, but when I start talkin, shit always ended in riots
there was no need to deny it, my head was going crazy from not
having anything to occupy it, started thinkin suicide, I guess I wanted it over, I guess I wanted closure
but somethin stopped it, yeah I guess thats kind of a shock then?
took enough pills that it made the beat of my heat thin,
guess god didn't want me to end, huh? Guess my life was made for
somethin other than sin huh?
homeboys act friendly at my face, secretly tryna stab behind my backside
honestly I needed something so that the shit in my head could flat line
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This was dope. Do u have the audio for it?
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This was dope. Do u have the audio for it?
not yet i might soon, stumbled onto it in my notes and figured id share it.
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there was no need to deny it, my head was going crazy from not
having anything to occupy it, started thinkin suicide, I guess I wanted it over, I guess I wanted closure
but somethin stopped it, yeah I guess thats kind of a shock then?
took enough pills that it made the beat of my heat thin,
guess god didn't want me to end, huh?


this to the end was pretty good. the other half was meh at best.
it was bouncy though if you trying to record it, I can see it getting spins.
for audio this would have a nice response with a proper beat.
smooth transitioning, the presentation overall is decent, keep writing
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