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Old 09-19-2019, 12:25 PM   #1
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No more talk, throat's be gone. Time to chalk some pokemon
We all got a lot going on
Please just don't stop holding on
Live wire blast out the mike myers mask
Nothing to sell but when in deluge. Gotta climb higher, fast
Angel wing pentagram. Schemin up better plans
Dreaming of neverlands
Couple winks to sink in the plethora sands
I like to breathe through this pencil's glands
Ben's a monster, vitriolic. Took a trip in and went and got it
Dirfting to symbiotic
Upon each limb's a goblin
Luna's husk juice is cupped
Mutant love
in the mood for super-fucking
You in a rubber dingy raft when you rub the genie lamp
And subzero freeze the amp
Who you think jammed the sword in stone?
Planet warzone, I'll make a fan of your bones
Vortex blender. Horny, restless. The more the messier
Floral pendulum, portal bending. the aura threatens em
Jason is moody, should have stayed in a group
Get puree'd into smoothies. This not a play or a movie
No trick up your sleeve. You ain't the azn in Goonies
Faces glazed and oozing
It's thine favorite.. jungle fever. Rapunzel weaver
Chase it with a cup of ether
I've seen castles in grains, atlantis in rain
Black holes in stains
Balance in brains and the chalice in chains
Plus that precious palace in pain, sapphires in shame
Giggity giggity, quagmire game
Rekindle the past fire's flame to see into
Channel path through candle wax
Eyes flicker white-lights of cataracts
Toxic disguise, they don't want us to rise so they box us with lies
Eyes are quick sand. Viper with lightening spit glands
Hawk appears, to witness me chalking pyramids
That lift into walk-in mirrors
Twisting, dropcicle wizards always hotbox the blizzard
Cover pussy with poprocks and lick it
Optical mystiks jot thoughts that are often explicit
Vividpen. Premonition of conjugal visits
My god your exquisite. Time stops for minutes
Mind launch epiphanies that put the brights in sparks
This light's an art- not designed for likes and hearts
Life's horrific, such a beautiful scare
Can damn near smell the moon in the air
Sense-orgy. They all drop on you at once like musical chairs
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Old 09-19-2019, 11:14 PM   #2
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Good stuff man, your flow is bananas in places as is the imagery...Sorry can't quote off this phone but really liked the Pokemon & Ben's a monster lines...Nice shit bro.

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Old 09-27-2019, 10:42 PM   #3
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"I like to breathe through this pencil's glands
Ben's a monster, vitriolic. Took a trip in and went and got it
Dirfting to symbiotic
Upon each limb's a goblin"

That's the good stuff.

"I'll make a fan of your bones"

"It's thine favorite.. jungle fever. Rapunzel weaver
Chase it with a cup of ether"

"Thine" was nuts, in the context of the slang and gritty tone. Both lines are so evocative. Great.

"Time stops for minutes"

That's great. Purposely understated to underline the point, and maybe a bit sarcastic/satirical.

The ending was good.

I think this was a great piece. From 'castles in grain' to 'conjugal visits' felt a bit forced, or just adding on. But the genius strokes of phrasing and personality throughout made it such a fun """"read"""". Enjoyed it.
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