09-19-2019, 12:25 PM | #1 |
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Throats be gone
No more talk, throat's be gone. Time to chalk some pokemon
We all got a lot going on Please just don't stop holding on Live wire blast out the mike myers mask Nothing to sell but when in deluge. Gotta climb higher, fast Angel wing pentagram. Schemin up better plans Dreaming of neverlands Couple winks to sink in the plethora sands I like to breathe through this pencil's glands Ben's a monster, vitriolic. Took a trip in and went and got it Dirfting to symbiotic Upon each limb's a goblin Luna's husk juice is cupped Mutant love in the mood for super-fucking You in a rubber dingy raft when you rub the genie lamp And subzero freeze the amp Who you think jammed the sword in stone? Planet warzone, I'll make a fan of your bones Vortex blender. Horny, restless. The more the messier Floral pendulum, portal bending. the aura threatens em Jason is moody, should have stayed in a group Get puree'd into smoothies. This not a play or a movie No trick up your sleeve. You ain't the azn in Goonies Faces glazed and oozing It's thine favorite.. jungle fever. Rapunzel weaver Chase it with a cup of ether I've seen castles in grains, atlantis in rain Black holes in stains Balance in brains and the chalice in chains Plus that precious palace in pain, sapphires in shame Giggity giggity, quagmire game Rekindle the past fire's flame to see into Channel path through candle wax Eyes flicker white-lights of cataracts Toxic disguise, they don't want us to rise so they box us with lies Eyes are quick sand. Viper with lightening spit glands Hawk appears, to witness me chalking pyramids That lift into walk-in mirrors Twisting, dropcicle wizards always hotbox the blizzard Cover pussy with poprocks and lick it Optical mystiks jot thoughts that are often explicit Vividpen. Premonition of conjugal visits My god your exquisite. Time stops for minutes Mind launch epiphanies that put the brights in sparks This light's an art- not designed for likes and hearts Life's horrific, such a beautiful scare Can damn near smell the moon in the air Sense-orgy. They all drop on you at once like musical chairs
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09-19-2019, 11:14 PM | #2 |
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Good stuff man, your flow is bananas in places as is the imagery...Sorry can't quote off this phone but really liked the Pokemon & Ben's a monster lines...Nice shit bro.
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09-27-2019, 10:42 PM | #3 |
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"I like to breathe through this pencil's glands
Ben's a monster, vitriolic. Took a trip in and went and got it Dirfting to symbiotic Upon each limb's a goblin" That's the good stuff. "I'll make a fan of your bones" "It's thine favorite.. jungle fever. Rapunzel weaver Chase it with a cup of ether" "Thine" was nuts, in the context of the slang and gritty tone. Both lines are so evocative. Great. "Time stops for minutes" That's great. Purposely understated to underline the point, and maybe a bit sarcastic/satirical. The ending was good. I think this was a great piece. From 'castles in grain' to 'conjugal visits' felt a bit forced, or just adding on. But the genius strokes of phrasing and personality throughout made it such a fun """"read"""". Enjoyed it.
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