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Old 06-30-2018, 03:15 AM   #1
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Dope (pun intended). But it was. I loved the unconventional way in which you framed and wrote this tale of a heroine addict. The different angles you used. The shards of insight you provided and the glimpses into his life that you offered. It all made for a complete and we'll rounded perspective on the users obsession. I dug it. Good stuff, man. Really good.
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in every nag champa was the scent of a ghost
Not sure what this means

these are letter deposits. anthropological statement
watching rain fall like constellations swallowing Jameson

again I'm lost

accouterment
I had to look this up

This is good stuff dead man. I particularly liked the first 3rd of it.

You write very well; even if i say it fast it flows. In some cases even better.

It's good but it's not as good as hawk on a leash.

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Old 07-11-2018, 07:25 PM   #4
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“In every nag champa was the scent of a ghost”

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I did try to look up champa. Something about southeast asia, I didn't think it was it. Thank you destroyer for trying to inform me.
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tbf to him i've known it as agarbathi my whole life and wouldn't know what nag champa was if it wasn't emblazoned on some boxes.
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isn't the point. point is why the fuck does dull boy and half the fucking baked have to spoon fed him wkkinarticles when the fucking ENTIRE INTERNET IS LITERALLY RIGJT THERE ALL HE HAS TO DOIS FUCKING SEARCH


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noah FUCKING IDIYOTE. JUST STFU AND SEARCH. retard
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noah FUCKING IDIYOTE. JUST STFU AND SEARCH. retard
I didn't know it was 1 phrase nag champa.
I read it as
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champa was the scent of a ghost.

So I didn't know what I was fucking searching I searched nag and champa separately.

He didn't have to give me the wiki, Destroyer already told me what it was, so cool your jets and go back to writing about the big bad wolf or prairies or whatever the fk.
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