02-28-2016, 04:15 AM | #1 |
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Pinky nail key shawt
Bitches say my nut tastes like malt gravy
Ditches glazed with blood of old ladies... 40 glisten like my cocaine, tree, and my F one fifty. The F stands for fifty. Because I don't have any of those things:/ I'm looking for a phallus erector, slash scrotum inflator. A salivating morning announcement lady who's reeling from how bad her date went. Na I'm looking for a funny black doctor that grew up in tha hood And who will prescribe me weed and lean and whatever feels good :) My efforts evaporate. Untethered. At random and In tandem the plan is always brought together. I never let it but it happens. Should Falcons born in this time be called millennial falcons? Yes. I'm Calvin Kent, the super hero model prick that made his dick big with his powers. Sick. I thought of it so of course it's something I'd do. If you think odd of it, you can suck on it dude. You'll probably change your mind. It tastes like the proof. Bitches drop it like meeting one of the devils demon henchman in an elevator with a lever set to descent. The ensuing sulphuric vapors smell like her pussy I hate it. It's a cunnilingus public service. If ever I ate it, I'd put a rubber on my tongue and reluctantly graze it... My singed eyebrows peppered her minge *DROPS MIC*
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02-28-2016, 04:18 AM | #2 |
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Fuck u
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02-28-2016, 05:22 AM | #3 |
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dope.
specially middle part |
02-28-2016, 02:41 PM | #4 |
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Fuck u faggot suck it suck it good.
Plan on giving feedback at some point today or tomorrow.
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02-28-2016, 05:08 PM | #5 |
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Shit fye
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02-28-2016, 05:50 PM | #6 |
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Thought this was quite nice, you had several entertaining lines in this, particularly towards the end. Flow was rather unconventional but interestingly smooth. Good work here.
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03-01-2016, 11:51 AM | #7 |
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This was cool, it seems like you fell off the map for awhile...welcome back
I feel like for a key this was better than most thought out pieces Ive seen here my point being is some of it is off-putting, but you find a way to make it enjoyable I chuckled at the doctor line because it was the most random thing Ive seen so far but as we carry on you have some interesting ideas, I wasnt feeling that closer though the elevator so on & so forth, that just seems like an underdeveloped idea... either way for a key this was pretty cool & worth the read.
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