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Old 03-23-2020, 07:30 PM   #1
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Line Limits: 10-12. Can go longer if agreed upon. If no limit is agreed upon, second person must match first person's verse length.

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Old 03-23-2020, 07:47 PM   #2
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Old 03-23-2020, 09:38 PM   #3
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Dope 12 is fine with me unless you wanna do more. This is my check
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Old 03-30-2020, 07:33 PM   #4
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Old 04-01-2020, 11:25 PM   #5
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Adverse's Verse

This gat hit like an asteroid, one blast will fade him quick
How ironic because you're gettin Jurass Kick'd back to your RAPTOR alias
We're more than a decade apart old man, i fear for your health n back
Jared Foggle you'll get yourself in trouble fuckin with that 12 year gap
Speaking of, dude's a dirty fuck, only thing to gain is herps from his sex game
Any hole that Indigo in start sproutin warts n turnin purple the next day
Saw your videos, lookin like Mexican Post Malone, if y'all think that's a coincidence WAIT
He misses that 1-2 ring, so pass it here, next punch will tattoo the chip on his face
Our match is least attractive on the card, this ain't Adverse versus the next King
For a topical artist your narrative stinks..
...37 yrs old and just now "emerged on the text scene"?
Most unwillin to spar with a villainous heart knifework cut you into a million parts
I'll have pieces of innocent across seas successfully avoiding any criminal charge



Inno’s Verse

Who’s this fagot, pull the the 9 and send bullets to his face
Tag his toes n leave him frozen n unknown that’s cold case.
Bitch you fucked up sparing with the god you could never pivot
Slap this bitch like a pimp n ride, no xzibit when I leave him frigid.
After I’m thru, no body parts shit they’ll be asking where”d he go
Niggahs gone be looking for you like that bitch Carmen San Diego.
Rip through yah dome piece no mercy when I let the AK burst!
Now watch as I make him count bullet holes , thats an adverse
I ain’t done, stand over his corpse and let the eagle ruffle feathers
They gon claim genocide off one body like I’m bad weather.
This prick couldn’t stand toe to toe, a fighter with no pride
shit you gon need drugs just to keep up...take that as advice....
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Old 04-01-2020, 11:55 PM   #6
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This gat hit like an asteroid, one blast will fade him quick
How ironic because you're gettin Jurass Kick'd back to your RAPTOR alias
was worded fine, and i've been gone a long time... but that seemed pretty played
We're more than a decade apart old man, i fear for your health n back
Jared Foggle you'll get yourself in trouble fuckin with that 12 year gap
that was dope... jared subway reference is probably old but that was dope to me... nice one
Speaking of, dude's a dirty fuck, only thing to gain is herps from his sex game
Any hole that Indigo in start sproutin warts n turnin purple the next day
pretty good, I get it the flower... didn't hit real hard but cool concept
Saw your videos, lookin like Mexican Post Malone, if y'all think that's a coincidence WAIT
He misses that 1-2 ring, so pass it here, next punch will tattoo the chip on his face
I don't know what ya referencing so I can't say if its good or not
Our match is least attractive on the card, this ain't Adverse versus the next King
For a topical artist your narrative stinks..
...37 yrs old and just now "emerged on the text scene"?
ok but seemed like filler
Most unwillin to spar with a villainous heart knifework cut you into a million parts
I'll have pieces of innocent across seas successfully avoiding any criminal charge
that was alright


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Who’s this fagot, pull the the 9 and send bullets to his face
Tag his toes n leave him frozen n unknown that’s cold case.
seems filler.. ok start i guess but not really a good punchline
Bitch you fucked up sparing with the god you could never pivot
Slap this bitch like a pimp n ride, no xzibit when I leave him frigid.
dope flow... but a 2001 pimp my ride line?
After I’m thru, no body parts shit they’ll be asking where”d he go
Niggahs gone be looking for you like that bitch Carmen San Diego.
lol, alright... was ok... loved that carmen sandiego game
Rip through yah dome piece no mercy when I let the AK burst!
Now watch as I make him count bullet holes , thats an adverse
alright
I ain’t done, stand over his corpse and let the eagle ruffle feathers
They gon claim genocide off one body like I’m bad weather.
don't get it
This prick couldn’t stand toe to toe, a fighter with no pride
shit you gon need drugs just to keep up...take that as advice....
I get where you were going with it, but ehh the concept didn't really connect


I'm going to have to go with Adverse on this one... I dunno I really like the age gap/jared line. And a lot of each of their lines were so similar in how hard they hit/how good they were that they cancelled each other out basically.

I think Adverse won --- but I wouldn't say there is a CLEAR CLEAR winner --- but vote Adverse
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Ad's opener was cool... Wordplay was eff bc I seen that as a FB meme..but cool tie in with the personal..made it decent.. indigo was ok... Chip on his face and text sence was blahh.. I like the closer.. best bar in ur verse

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Inno ya opener was too weak...light jab at best..
Xzibit and Carmen San didn't work for me.. Carmen line was done in like 02 no hate... Bullet holes was light... I didn't get the genocide line at all... Advice was cool..decent finisher

Vote adverse.. more consistent.. inno seemed like he wrote quick
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Old 04-02-2020, 01:18 PM   #8
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This gat hit like an asteroid, one blast will fade him quick
How ironic because you're gettin Jurass Kick'd back to your RAPTOR alias
I like the personal angle, but jurass kicked/jurassic is anything earth shattering for me
We're more than a decade apart old man, i fear for your health n back
Jared Foggle you'll get yourself in trouble fuckin with that 12 year gap
that's dope.
Speaking of, dude's a dirty fuck, only thing to gain is herps from his sex game
Any hole that Indigo in start sproutin warts n turnin purple the next day
clever, haven't heard an indigo flip vs Inno.
Saw your videos, lookin like Mexican Post Malone, if y'all think that's a coincidence WAIT
He misses that 1-2 ring, so pass it here, next punch will tattoo the chip on his face
had to google it, but it's a decent reference and the personal angle still gives it impact
Our match is least attractive on the card, this ain't Adverse versus the next King
For a topical artist your narrative stinks..
...37 yrs old and just now "emerged on the text scene"?
this punch is really cool, but the execution isn't quite there for me. It's just a matter of taste, but I tend to see punches kind of like jokes. If you give up the flip to early in the bar it loses impact, imo. If it were me, I would've tried to end with the narrative sentence

'37 yrs old and just now "emerged on the text scene"? That narratives shitty enough for one of your topicals

Can't emphasize it enough, that's just my two cents, but we're different people and at the end of the day, I'm glad our verses have different delivery

Most unwillin to spar with a villainous heart knifework cut you into a million parts
I'll have pieces of innocent across seas successfully avoiding any criminal charge
appreciate the multies in the setup. The punch is cool, but I think 'successfully avoiding any criminal charge' is kind of a weak way to end a punch


Solid verse. I got nitpicky with two, but I think it's worth doing for the sake of feedback.



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Who’s this fagot, pull the the 9 and send bullets to his face
Tag his toes n leave him frozen n unknown that’s cold case.
I like the flip, but I think you could've expanded on the cold case angle. I get bullets to his face transferring to unknown, but Frozen kind of comes out of nowhere
Bitch you fucked up sparing with the god you could never pivot
Slap this bitch like a pimp n ride, no xzibit when I leave him frigid.
frigid? You slapped him THAT hard? I'm fucking around. Pimp my ride is an odd combination of nostalgic, but recent enough where we don't see it as classic yet. Just old. It's an alright punch, but nothing crazy
After I’m thru, no body parts shit they’ll be asking where”d he go
Niggahs gone be looking for you like that bitch Carmen San Diego.
killing me. Instead of 'looking for you LIKE that bitch Carmen Sandiego' it could've been something like 'looking for this bitch' or something else that insulted Adverse. Instead you threw some shade at Carmen smh

I like the reference and the bars cool

Rip through yah dome piece no mercy when I let the AK burst!
Now watch as I make him count bullet holes , thats an adverse
EDIT: followed up with Inno, I see how that he's going for add - verse (counting the bullet holes) but the punch didn't really come through very well.
I ain’t done, stand over his corpse and let the eagle ruffle feathers
They gon claim genocide off one body like I’m bad weather.
dope. Really well constructed bar imo.
This prick couldn’t stand toe to toe, a fighter with no pride
shit you gon need drugs just to keep up...take that as advice....
no pride/advice is a stretch, but I'm pretty lenient with that stuff unless you're the one making an issue about rhymes

And you're not

which is cool

I like the angle a lot, the execution is alright.



Gonna quickly hit up Inno regarding that adverse line. But I thought this was a solid drop. A lot of nice moments where your technical writing skills shone, like 'I'll let the eagle ruffle feathers'. That could've been a punch, but putting it in the setup like that fluidly helped a lot.

Great reads, guys. Will vote once I understand the count the bullet holes line

EDIT: Now that I get it, I think Adverse has it with consistency and the 12 year gap was the LOTB for me.

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We're more than a decade apart old man, i fear for your health n back
Jared Foggle you'll get yourself in trouble fuckin with that 12 year gap

Most unwillin to spar with a villainous heart knifework cut you into a million parts

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Bitch you fucked up sparing with the god you could never pivot
Slap this bitch like a pimp n ride, no xzibit when I leave him frigid.


Not a crazy battle, but i give this one to Adverse. His verse seemed more thought-out than Innos.
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