Unknown Cooperations

Mr. J · 09-01-2013, 08:28 PM

The verbiage is care-free but the mood isn't
can't tell how it all happened or who did it
used to be hard bars kicked to a smooth rhythm
left each MC ate, a menace straight up, new fitted
old kicks sitting high in the laboratory
diabetic hooks caused the end of that story...
so since Nate Dogg left, I been hoping to witness yo' death
couldn't stay tuned in, cramped up should exercise yo' self
fitness for health, should understand the prices of wealth
precise likeness to dividends in decline, no business, no help
disregard for savings and what the idea does
got high in plain sight felt what happened to Aaliyah just rush

to be continued

Geno · 09-01-2013, 11:32 PM

first half was fire, then you got lazy

would like to see sometheing more coherant from you. something less random thoughts, and more precision execution.

cool drop though, always a pleasure. short, sweet, to the point. still waiting for something irregular from you though

Mr. J · 09-05-2013, 06:57 PM

thnx breh

CopyPat · 09-06-2013, 04:22 AM

didn't really get this man??? needs to be fully explained/finished

Split · 09-06-2013, 07:06 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mr. J

The verbiage is care-free but the mood isn't
can't tell how it all happened or who did it
used to be hard bars kicked to a smooth rhythm
left each MC ate, a menace straight up, new fitted
old kicks sitting high in the laboratory
diabetic hooks caused the end of that story...
so since Nate Dogg left, I been hoping to witness yo' death
couldn't stay tuned in, cramped up should exercise yo' self
fitness for health, should understand the prices of wealth
precise likeness to dividends in decline, no business, no help
>didnt like
disregard for savings and what the idea does
got high in plain sight felt what happened to Aaliyah just rush

to be continued

Everything above the line I didnt like, was fire. idk I don't have much to add or throw out there but it was cool to read, and simple without being simplistic. The bold line was my favorite in a long time.. Thought you killed this tho

When's the next Issue come out?

09-01-2013, 08:28 PM	#1
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,025 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349678	Unknown Cooperations The verbiage is care-free but the mood isn't can't tell how it all happened or who did it used to be hard bars kicked to a smooth rhythm left each MC ate, a menace straight up, new fitted old kicks sitting high in the laboratory diabetic hooks caused the end of that story... so since Nate Dogg left, I been hoping to witness yo' death couldn't stay tuned in, cramped up should exercise yo' self fitness for health, should understand the prices of wealth precise likeness to dividends in decline, no business, no help disregard for savings and what the idea does got high in plain sight felt what happened to Aaliyah just rush to be continued __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

09-01-2013, 11:32 PM	#2
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,325 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036758	first half was fire, then you got lazy would like to see sometheing more coherant from you. something less random thoughts, and more precision execution. cool drop though, always a pleasure. short, sweet, to the point. still waiting for something irregular from you though __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

09-05-2013, 06:57 PM	#3
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,025 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349678	thnx breh __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

09-06-2013, 04:22 AM	#4
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 707 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742221	didn't really get this man??? needs to be fully explained/finished __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.