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08-21-2013, 08:39 PM | #1 |
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*at precinct* WHAT IN GODS NAME WERE YOU THINKING WHEN YOU WERE DROWNING THOSE INNOCENT BAB- *wipes smudge off cops face* got it :)
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This is Norwegian Wood. Feel the violin undulating The strings so underestimated. I’m feeling violent. And the color violet is all I see after it’s souls decimated. I feel better about yourself already. Reading the instructions to this do-it-yourself machete. The annointed king of pointy things. I exist, so you know you aren’t above me. My monsters handcuffed. Behind bars. Do you want me? The ultimate scenario. Not even slightly unfocused. Unzip your skin-tights with my opus. Inform you of it. When you look down, get hit right in the forehead. Sit tight. Fellatiate. My salamander while you salivate. The master I want to be the reason you drink. This feelings n’sync. And there ain’t a lake full of timber the could ignite the embers, I think. Of course you look up to me. In a naked portrait of myself you’d quit. Exaggerate my abdomen Accentuate the crevices. Give me a 12 pack. Extenuate. I’m extra masculine |
08-21-2013, 08:49 PM | #2 |
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Fuckin awesome.
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08-21-2013, 08:53 PM | #3 |
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lol shots fired.
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08-21-2013, 09:05 PM | #4 |
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Ok.
Were the strings truly underestimated, though?
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08-22-2013, 12:23 AM | #5 |
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don't be rude young cake. Ask McCartney.
and if itz 2 anybodiez accord this wasnt about cake but i was making it known bout something we discussed. |
08-22-2013, 12:24 AM | #6 |
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jerkz
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08-22-2013, 12:47 AM | #7 |
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I liked this a lot. The off-kilter flow with the wonderful mix of images was pretty great. Every thought transitioned smoothly. Every line was fun, and a few were funny. I guess it just seems like you wrote this with joy.
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08-22-2013, 12:48 AM | #8 |
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I'm a blackbird singing. You're a bassoon-playing buffoon
who couldn't bloom in the concrete crack's dirt inches. Plying a toon. Watching a tool. Yellow-bellied everything. Peddle bennies, sell and swing. Smell the melting wedding rings. I'm your pusher. You're nearing a cliff, and you might fall. Find a cushion, then kneel onto it and lick my balls. The ultimate scenario. My hands don't tremble as they crush the keys. I'm exploring hidden temples hid by brush and trees. Enter without touching leaves. Dismember you and crush your dreams. You'll never be in love again. Severed wings, bicuspid bends. Meant to leave but fucked instead. Bend so deep, I touch the end. Corner store. Boys in backstreets. Brian nicked the tip of a J. Kevlar clips, that's how we pack heat. Thousand stacks meet. Pounds and cash. You're green with penis envy. I choose the funhouse mirror, but your seeded dreams are tempting.
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08-22-2013, 09:46 AM | #9 |
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wow!!
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08-22-2013, 10:03 AM | #10 |
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I want to be the reason you drink. This feelings n’sync.
w00t
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08-23-2013, 01:22 AM | #11 |
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Thanks!
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08-23-2013, 01:38 AM | #12 |
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Very very gewd
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08-23-2013, 08:46 PM | #13 |
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This is Norwegian Wood. Feel the
violin undulating The strings so underestimated. I’m feeling violent. And the color violet is all I see after it’s souls decimated. decent I don't know what undulating is I feel better about yourself already. Reading the instructions to this do- it-yourself machete. this is dope as fuck The annointed king of pointy things. I exist, so you know you aren’t above me. Mymonsters handcuffed. Behind bars. Do you want me? great follow up The ultimate scenario. Not even slightly unfocused. Unzip your skin-tights with my opus. Inform you of it. When you look down, get hit right in the forehead. great word play Sit tight. Fellatiate. My salamander while you salivate. The master I want to be the reason you drink. This feelings n’sync. And there ain’t a lake full of timber the could ignite the embers, I think. Of course you look up to me. In a naked portrait of myself you’d quit. Exaggerate my abdomen Accentuate the crevices. Give me a 12 pack. Extenuate. I’m extra masculine I don't know where each rhyme begin and end. cool concept and execution. tons of pop references. I like it |
08-27-2013, 09:37 PM | #14 |
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thanks. uppin one last time ya
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08-27-2013, 10:37 PM | #15 | |
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Quote:
Yet I loved it all. Yay. Fuck Vaginas!
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08-28-2013, 10:44 PM | #16 |
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You are one twisted individual it seems, I really like it lol...your word usage is dope man.
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08-29-2013, 01:07 AM | #17 |
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haha very good. lake of timbers was sneaky with nsync
anointed king of pointy things this was small but dense. no wasted words enjoyed as usually. certain haha nice bro, nice u guys shoulda collabed this i guess aha
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08-29-2013, 03:17 AM | #18 |
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Lmao this reminded me of the song Pauly shore saw my penis.
disturbing yet very entertaining. Complex flow good multies creative wordplay. This was tight lol good shit man
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08-31-2013, 03:32 AM | #19 |
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i'll one up this verse and post my verse.
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